2016高考英语写作复习公开课.ppt

基础写作训练 平均分 峰值 约15分 17 19分 最吃亏学生群 中等左右学生 书面表达是提分最大的潜力股 5分 9分 23分 高考满分作文I mverypleasedtotellyouthechangesinmylifesinceourhomeworkhasreduced Beforethat learningduringthedaywasverysimple Havingclassanddoinghomeworkwastheonlythingweshoulddo Intheevening wealsohadalotofhomeworktodo Wecouldnotgotobeduntil11 30 Nevertheless sincereducingthelearningload mylifehasbecomemuchmoreinteresting Ioftenvisitmuseumsandcomputerroomsanddrawpicturesinmysparetime Intheevening IalsohavetimetowatchTVandreadnewspapers Inolongerstayuplate onthecontrary Igotobedatabout10pm Inshort Iamquitesatisfiedwithmylifenow 高考英语作文第五档 很好 要求 21 25分 1 完全完成了试题规定的任务 覆盖所有内容要点 2 应用了较多的语法结构和词汇 3 有效地使用了语句间的连接成分 使全文结构紧凑 4 语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误 但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致 具备较强的语言运用能力 5句话强化训练 Shooting originatedasameansofsurvival developedintoasportonlyinthelate19thcentury Thesport whichfirstappearedin1896 waseversuspendedduringthe1904and1928Games ItwasonlyfouryearsbeforethesportreturnedtotheOlympic However notuntil1968werewomenfirstallowedtocompeteintheOlympicshooting Withthesportbecomingmoreandmorepopular ithasgrownsteadilyfromjust3shootingeventsatthe1896OlympicGamesto17today 经典案例 广东08高考 句子表达有何亮点 写作中复合句常见的错误 1 只有从句 没有主句 Thekeeperwhohadlivedinthelighttowerforalongtime sohecouldkeepcalminthestorm Thekeeper whohadlivedinthelighttowerforalongtime couldkeepcalminthestorm 2 以逗号代替句号 把两个简单句当成一个句子 Theoldmanthoughtofhisson tearscamedownfromhisface Thehallisdifferentfromallotherbuildings itismadeofglass 3 刻意使用从句 表达不自然 ThereareoverfiftystudentsinthisschoolwhoaregoingtotakepartinthesportsmeetnextSunday OverfiftystudentsinthisschoolaregoingtotakepartinthesportsmeetnextSunday Thehallisdifferentfromallotherbuildings whichismadeofglass Theoldmanthoughtofhisson withtearscomingdownfromhisface 4 过多地使用并列句组合信息 Weweredrivingoutintothecountry andwesawourEnglishteacherridinginabus andthebuswascrowded Itisabeautifulday andthesunisshiningandabreezeisblowing Itisabeautifuldaywiththesunshiningandabreezeblowing Asweweredrivingoutintothecountry wesawourEnglishteacherridinginacrowdedbus MyEnglishLearning ItissixyearssinceIbegantolearnEnglish Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates IhavemadeprogressinmyEnglish NowI mdoingwellbothinwritingandreadinginEnglish ButIstillfindithardtolearnEnglish suchassomedifficultidioms Difficultasitis Ihavemadeupmymindtomasterthisusefullanguagebymyhardwork 请看范例 从上述例子同学们可以明白什么样的句子叫 规范的英语句子 其实 规范的英语句子 就是我们经常讲的三种句子 A Simplesentence Hearingthenews hewashappy B CompoundsentenceA HegavemeabookbutIforgottobringitbackhome C CompoundsentenceB Whatheisdoinghasnothingtodowithme Whenheheardthenews hewashappy Hereare3waystomakesentences I 巧妙运用短语 写出规范的简单句 1 借助名词短语做同位语 如 李立 男 19岁 1986年生 籍贯 广东 LiLi aboyof19 wasborninGuangdongin1986 2 借助介词短语做定语 如 李飞 男 10岁 棕色短发 身穿白色茄克 LiFeiisaten year oldboywithshortbrownhairandawhitejacket 如 有了Tom的帮助 我们很快就找到了他们的村子 WiththehelpofTom wesoonfoundtheirvillage 4 借助非谓语动词短语做定语或状语 如 他们站在大树下 等待着总统的到来 Theyarestandingunderthebigtree waitingforthepresident 3 借助介词短语做状语 II 巧用连接词 写出规范的并列句 如 他给我钱 我不要 IwasjustwalkingdownthestreetcornerwhenIsawyou 如 我刚到拐角处 就见到你啦 HegavemealotmoneybutIrefused III 用好从句和引导词 写出规范的复合句 1 名词性从句 如 老师生气 原因 王力迟到 ThatWangLicamelatetoschoolmadetheteacherveryangry 2 定语从句 如 中国 地处亚洲东部 特点 地大物博 人口众多 资源丰富 China whichliesintheeastofAsia isagreatcountrywithalargeareaandpopulationaswellasrichnaturalresources 3 状语从句 如 雷锋还活在我们心中 我深受感动 Iwasdeeplymovedbythis becauseIknowLeiFengisstilllivinginourhearts 学会运用复合句和非谓语动词 Kateisanewstudent Shecomesfromanorthernprovince Shespeaksadialect Wefindithardtounderstandherdialect Kate anewstudentfromanorthernprovince speaksadialectwhichwefindhardtounderstand 用一句话表达 不是人人都能学好英语 小学生同时学汉语和英语反而会影响汉语学习 学会运用复合句和非谓语动词 第一步 拆分成几个简单句 不是人人都能学好英语 小学生同时学汉语和英语 这会影响汉语学习 第二步 分别翻译这几个简单句 NoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish ChildrenfromprimaryschoollearnEnglishandChineseatthesametime ThiswillaffecttheirChinesestudy NoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish ChildrenfromprimaryschoolstarttolearnEnglishandChineseatthesametime ThiswillaffecttheirChinesestudy 第三步 合并句子 ThatchildrenfromprimaryschoolstarttolearnEnglishandChineseatthesametimewillaffecttheirChinesestudy becausenoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish NoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish ChildrenfromprimaryschoolstarttolearnEnglishandChineseatthesametime ThiswillaffecttheirChinesestudy 第三步 合并句子 IfchildrenfromprimaryschoolstarttolearnEnglishandChineseatthesametime thiswillaffecttheirChinesestudy 方法2 becausenoteveryoneisgoodatlearningEnglish 情景说明 通知 新光中学高三年级学生将于9月9日去体检 体检地点 第一人民医院体检时间 9月9日 星期六注意 1 7 45在医院门口集合 可以骑车或步行前往 2 体检前空腹 3 在医院要保持安静 听从医生和护士的安排 实战练习 Notice ThestudentsinSeniorThreeofXinguangMiddleSchoolwillgotohaveaphysicalexaminationintheFirstPeople sHospitalonSaturday 9thSept We llmeetatthehospitalgateat7 45 Youmayeitherwalkthereorgotherebybike Wearenotallowedtoeatordrinkanythingbeforetheexamination Pleasekeepquietandlistentothedoctorsandnurseswhenyouarethere 学会使用复合句和非谓语动词 你来试试 参考词汇 错别字 wrongly writtencharacters网络语言 weblanguage 要求 1 用两句话表达表格内容2 两句话要有连贯性 第一句 两个信息点 1 学生作文中出现很多错别字2 他们 上网聊天时经常使用网络语言 Therearemanywrongly writtencharactersinstudents compositions Thereasonwhytherearemanywrongly writtencharactersinstudents compositionisthattheyoftenuseweblanguageswhenchattingonline 合并句子 Theyoftenuseweblanguageswhenchattingonline 1 Theyhavesomuchhomeworktodoeverydaythattheyfailtomemorizethenewcharacters 第二句 1 每天有很多作业做2 没有记住生字 Theyhavemuchhomeworktodoeveryday 2 Withsomuchhomeworktodo theyfailtomemorizethenewcharacters 3 Becausetheyhavesomuchhomeworktodo theyfailtomemorizethenewcharacters 合并句子 Theyfailtomemorizethenewcharacters 连接两句话 Thereasonwhytherearemanywrongly writtencharactersinstudents compositionisthattheyoftenuseweblanguageswhenchattingonline Moreover theyhavesomuchhomeworktodoeverydaythattheyfailtomemorizethenewcharacters Exchangeanddiscussyourpartner scomposition thengiveeachotherascoreaccordingtothefollowingcriteria Pairwork 1 一个乞丐在路边讨钱 askformoney 李先生匆忙赶路上班 没有注意到那个乞丐 2 乞丐很生气 伸出 stickout 拐杖 差点把李先生绊倒了 tripover 3 李先生意识到他是个残疾人 便在口袋里找钱给他 4 李先生拿出了一张百元钞票 a100 yuannote 突然一阵风把钞票吹到了空中 5 乞丐迅速跳起来去追那张钞票 李先生站在那里 惊得合不拢嘴 实战演练 以下是你根据图画内容和题目要求 经过观察 整理排列成的五个信息块 请分别用一个句子表达出来 并组成一篇连贯性的短文 Abeggar AbeggarOneday Mr Lihurriedonhiswaytowork Abeggarontheroadsidewasaskingformoney Mr Lipaidnoattentiononhim Thebeggargotangryandstuckouthiswalkingstick ItalmosttrippedMr Liover Whenherealizingthebeggarwasadisabledperson Mr Libegantosearchforsomemoneyinhispockettogivehim Hetookouta100 yuannote butitwassuddenlyblownintotheairbythewind Seeingthis thebeggarjumpedquicklytorunafterthenote ItmadeMr Lisosurprisedthathestoodtherewithhismouthopen AbeggarOneday whenMr Lihurriedonhiswaytowork abeggarontheroadsidewasaskingformoney butMr Lipaidnoattentiononhim Asaresult thebeggargotangryandstuckouthiswalkingstick whichalmosttrippedMr Liover Realizingthebeggarwasadisabledperson Mr Libegantosearchforsomemoneyinhispockettogivehim Hetookouta100 yuannote whichwassuddenlyblownintotheairbythewind Seeingthis thebeggarjumpedquicklytorunafterthenote whichmadeMr Lisosurprisedthathestoodtherewithhismouthopen 审题列要点依要点 拟草纲 组织成句 构篇章 扩句成文 检查润色书写 写作解题步骤 如何提高作文档次 1 字迹工整 2 避免低级错误 避免语法和拼写的低级错误 避免被扣印象分 多样化句式 1 用itis was that 强调句式 2 用作状语的介词短语开头的完全倒装句或用以onlyinthisway等开头的部分倒装句 3 用with的复合结构 with 宾语 宾补 作状语 4 用非谓语动词简化状语从句或并列结构 5 用what引导的名词性从句 6 用独立主格结构 7 恰当运用感叹句 被动句等 8 适当使用插入语 如tobehonest Iguess Ithink personally等 9 尽量用短语代替单词来表达同样的意思 1 表示平行 对等或选择关系and both and aswellas togetherwith neither nor also notonly butalso either or aswell 2 表示转折关系but yet however nevertheless 然而 inspiteof although otherwise while afterall 3 表示对比关系onthecontrary insteadof ononehand ontheotherhand justlike 4 表示因果关系so for therefore asaresult of because owingto dueto thanksto 三 学会使用恰当的连接词 5 表示时间 顺序关系shortlyafterwards next finally intheend eventually6 表示递进 强调关系besides furthermore 此外 what smore inaddition moreover 而且 worsestill tomakemattersworse 7 表示解释 说明关系namely 也就是 actually suchas forexample forinstance thatistosay inotherwords andsoon totellyouthetruth accordingtothis8 表示结论inshort inbrief inaword ingeneral asyouknow asfarasIknow onthewhole inconclusion atlast finally 三 学会使用恰当的连接词 3 注意表达的高级化一 使用较高级的词汇 itdoesn tmatterwhethertheywillgotocollegeornot itdoesn tmakeanydifferencewhethertheywillgotocollegeornot 高级 句式 80 studentsholdtheviewthat 注意 Thereare80 studentsholdtheviewthat Thereare80 studentswhoholdtheviewthat Thereare80 studentsholdingtheviewthat 非谓语 定语从句 同位语从句 二 巧用精彩句式 分析原因 注意一句多译 Severalfactorscontributetosuchchanges reasons leadtoresultincauseberesponsibleforaccountfor展开论述变化的原因 Homework Rewritethecompositionandhanditin