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单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,2019/1/23,#,2016.10,浙江高考,作文续写,1.,One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to,camp overnight,by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came,up and,they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that,she said,to Tom. “Im going to find a better spot for us to,camp.,and walked away,.,With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she,had climbed,to a high place. she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she,saw nothing,but forest and, far beyond, a,snow capped,mountain top. She suddenly realized,that she,was lost,. “,Tom! she cried. Help!,No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane,kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was,beginning to,fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark,Jane wanted,very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him,how much,she loved him.,Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (,滴落,）,somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great,joy, she,also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had,she tasted,anything better. Feeling stronger now.,Jane began,to walk along the stream,and hope,it would lead her to the lake.,As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that,for me,? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A,few minutes,later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking,that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.,注意,:,1.,所续写短文的词数应为,150,左右；,2.,应使用,5,个以上短文文中标有下划线的关键词语：,3.,续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；,4.,续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。,Paragraph 1,But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.,Paragraph,2,It was daybreak when Jane woke up,剧情回顾,精读文章,One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to,camp overnight,by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came,up and,they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that,she said,to Tom. “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp and walked away,.,With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she,had climbed,to a high place. she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she,saw nothing,but forest and, far beyond, a,snow capped,mountain top. She suddenly realized,that she,was lost,. “,Tom! she cried. Help!,No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane,kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was,beginning to,fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark,Jane wanted,very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him,how much,she loved him.,Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (,滴落,）,somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great,joy, she,also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had,she tasted,anything better. Feeling stronger now.,Jane began,to walk along the stream,and hope,it would lead her to the lake.,As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that,for me,? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A,few minutes,later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking,that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.,Paragraph 1,But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again,.,Paragraph,2,It was daybreak when Jane woke up,第二个晚上！,又一个白天！,那么，怎么编故事？,1.,增加冲突,2.,放大内心冲突,人物之间的,人物与环境之间的,人物与时间之间的,增加障碍,原则就是增加紧迫感，将故事推向解决或者崩溃,高考阅卷评分依据,1.,与,所给短文,及,段落开头语,的衔接程度,。,2.,内容的丰富性，对所给,关键词,的涵盖情况。,3.,应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性。,4.,上下文的连贯性。,续写步骤,1.,精读文章,确定线索,。,尊重,原文的写作,思路；原文中的时间线索，地点线索等。,2.,仔细审题目要求及提示句。,3.,回扣原文拟定草稿。,4.,标出续写部分的划线词。,参考范文,Paragraph 1,But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.,Jane had to stay alone in the,forest for,another cold night. At that moment (,时间,), she felt a little sad, but she wasnt so,frightened (,情感,). She reminded herself constantly, (,心理,) “ Tom must have called for those,helicopters. Maybe,(,情感,) he was in one of them and will return soon (,动作,)! I have to guide him tomorrow,.” She,felt asleep (,动作,) and dreamed of seeing Tom (,动作,).,Paragraph 1,But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.,Jane had to stay alone in the,forest for,another cold night. At that moment (,时间,), she felt a little sad, but she wasnt so,frightened (,情感,). She reminded herself constantly, (,心理,) “ Tom must have called for those,helicopters. Maybe,(,情感,) he was in one of them and will return soon (,动作,)! I have to guide him tomorrow,.” She,felt asleep (,动作,) and dreamed of seeing Tom (,动作,).,Paragraph 2,It was daybreak when Jane woke up.,She ate some berries and then (,时间,) walked along,the stream, hoping (,心理,) to find a suitable place to guide the helicopter. She walked and,walked, exhausted,but full of hope. Suddenly (,时间,), she spotted (,动作,) a huge flat rock.,She managed (,动作,) to climb onto it and waited with patience. The moment (,时间,) the helicopter appeared (,动作,) again.,The,nearer it got (,动作,), the more she waved (,动作,) the yellow blouse. To her great joy, (,情感,) the helicopter didnt miss Jane this time and it landed near the big rock slowly. Tom jumped off the helicopter and rushed (,动作,) towards Jane. They hugged each other tightly (,情感,)and burst into tears (,情感,).,