高中英语作文技巧.ppt

,学生：老师，我请假。老师：why?学生：我晕课，尤其是写作课，上作文课我就头疼。,Badsample,卷面不整洁;涂改较多;语言错误多;层次不清;得10分,samplesofstudentwork,progress,well,widened,are,词汇有错误;卷面有涂改;得19分.,samplesofstudentwork,roads,Myhometownisbecomingmoreandmore,词汇,句型,语法多样化,1.覆盖了所有的要点2.应用高级的语法结构和词汇3.有效地使用句子间的连接成分，使结构紧凑4.书面干净整洁,要点全,连接词,如何算是一篇好文章？,词汇是衡量英语水平的一个重要标志。,生动活泼，语言简洁,能使文章上下衔接自然、紧凑。,增强书面表达效果的技巧,形象面子工程的作用,漂亮的书写是写作得分的亮点,影响给分的因素之一：作文的卷面,Whichcompositionfeelsmoreattractive,why?,影响给分的因素之二：文中所采用的语言材料,人靠衣装，文靠词装,A.词汇的选择灵活新颖，出奇制胜；,1.Becausetheweatherwasgood,ourjourneywascomfortable.(幸亏)2.Ithinkyoudbetteraskwhatyoudontunderstand.3.Luxunisnotonlyawriter,butalsoathinker.,Thankstothegoodweather,ourjourneywascomfortable.,I.怎样使用较高级的词汇,AsfarasImconcerned,youdbetteraskwhatyoudontunderstand.,ThereisnodoubtthatLuxunisnotonlyawriter,butalsoathinker.,感情细腻，表现恰当,B.句型结构运用灵活多变,增加文章的魅力,Inordertomyparents,Ishouldmakefulluseofeveryminutetostudywhatmyteachertaught.2)我很乐意和你分享我是怎样学英语的ImgladtosharewithyouhowIlearnEnglish.Imgladtosharewithyoutheway_IlearnEnglish,*语法，句法高分tips,inwhich,定语从句,Inordertomakemyparentshappy,宾语从句,E.恰当使用特殊句式，增强语句表现力,句，强调句，倒装句型，省略句，感叹句等,将下列句子转换：1.IdidntrealizethemistakeuntilIgrowup.(强调句）2.Wecanmakegreatachievementsonlybyworkinghard.（倒装句）3.Lastbutnotleast,enjoyingsomeEnglishwebsitesishelpfultous.(it),ItwasnotuntilIgrowupthatIrealizedthemistake,Onlybyworkinghardcanwemakegreatachievements,Lastbutnotleast,itishelpfultoenjoysomeEnglishwebsites.,影响给分的因素之三：行文的流畅,上下贯通、一气呵成正确而巧妙地使用好连接词,and,also,besides,morever,whatsmorefurthermore,inaddition,1.表递进.表转折.表因果.表目的.表总结,but,however,onthecontrary,ontheotherhand,inspiteof,despite,because,since,therefore,so,thus,asaresult/consequence,onaccountof.,inorderthat,sothat,forthepurposeof.,inbrief,inshort,inaword,inconclusion,onthewhole.AsfarasImconcerned,Ifyouaretheteacher假定你是李华,你的英国朋友Peter来信询问你的英语学习情况并希望你简单介绍自己家乡，请你根据下列要点写回信。要点:1.我学英语已经六年了，在老师和同学们的帮助下取得了一些进步；2.但是总觉得英语难学，尤其是英语中的一些习惯用法；3.今后一定要努力学习这门有用的外语，争取能用流利的英语和你写信；4.我的家乡发生很大的变化，盖起了许多高楼，拓宽了道路，变得越来越漂亮和现代化；5.如果有时间可以到中国来，我会带领你参观我的家乡。,最近在武安市高三年级学生中就市政府“拆违”展开了一场讨论，请你就下表提供的信息给市长写一封信，客观地介绍讨论情况。约70的学生认为：1应该拆除违法搭建；2违法建筑占用绿化带并常堵塞交通；3大多数违法建筑陈旧过时，既破坏城市的美，又存在安全隐患。约30的学生认为：1不宜全部拆除；2许多违法建筑系下岗职工所建，以便经营一些小生意以养家糊口；3拆违会使一部分人失去谋生手段。,Writing,Homework,注意：1词数：100左右(不包括已给出部分)；2文章应包括题中所给的主要信息。可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3开头与结尾已为你写好。参考词汇：绿化带：greenbelt安全隐患：hiddendangerDearMayor,ImastudentofSeniorThree.Imwritingtotellyouaboutthediscussionwevehadaboutwhetherthecitygovernmentshoulddemolishillegalbuildings.Opinionsbetweenusaredivided._Bestwishes,theillegalbuildingstakenupblockedthetrafficoutofdatebreaksthebeautyofthecityexistssomehiddendangers,Brainstorming,Support:,Notsupport:outofjobrunsomesmallbusinessMakealiving/supportonesfamilypulldownthesebuildings,影响书面表达得分的因素：,“大错误”包括时态错误、句子结构错误、中式英语等，如：Myhometownhadbigchange,buildmanyhouses,Myhometownhasgreatchanges.,语言表达出现“大错误”及“小错误”,Greatchangeshadtakenplaceinmyhometownthere.Forexample,manynewhouseshadbeenbuiltandroadshadbeenwidened.,3.IfyougettoChinathathavetime,mewithyoulookmyhometown.4.Iwillwelcometoyou.“小错误”主要是反应在个别单词拼写错误、冠词介词使用不准确等方面,如：Undermyteacherandclassmatesallhelptome,.,IhopeyoullgetachancetocometoChinaandIllshowyouaroundmyhometownifyouarefree.,WelcometoChina.,Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,没有使用高级词汇和复杂句1.Iwillvisitmyhometownwithyou.2.Ifyouhavetime,Iwilltakeyoutotravelaroundmyhometown.,Iwillshowyouaroundmyhometownifyouarefree.,书写是否工整清晰也会影响答卷得分。卷面不整洁，涂改多；大小写;标点符号;书写不清，得分会很低！,审题不认真，要点有所遗漏,1.彻底理解题意，看准答题要求（包括字数要求）。2.把内容要点在稿纸上列成提纲。3.连词成句，连句成文。4.成文后认真检查，确信无一遗漏。,注意：,完全完成了试题规定的任务，覆盖所有内容要点。应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。语法结构和词汇方面有些错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。,书面表达评分最高标准（第五档21-25分）,Onepossibleversion:June8,2008DearPeter,Imverygladtoreceiveyourletter.IwilltellyousomethingaboutmyEnglishstudyandhometown.ItissixyearssinceIbegantolearnEnglish.Withthehelpofmyteachersandclassmates,IhavemadesomeprogressinEnglish.HoweverIstillfindEnglishhardtolearn,suchassomedifficultidiomswhichmademeconfused.Nomatterhowharditis,Ihavemadeupmymindtomasterthisusefullanguagebymyhardwork.,NotlongagoIreturnedtomyhometownandfoundgreatchangeshadtakenplacethere.Manynewhouseshadbeenbuiltandroadshadbeenwidened.Myhometownisgettingmodernandmoreandmorebeautiful.IhopeifyouhaveachancetocometoChinaandIllshowyouaroundmyhometownwhenyouareonleave.Bestwishes,LiHua,MySuggestions:,1.beautifulwordsandexpressions2.propersentencestructures3.connectionsbetweensentences4.propercomplexsentences5.writingmodels,Sixstepsforwriting(写作六步骤）,DearSmith,LiHua,Yours,22,Iwassopleasedtohearfromyouandamwritingtotellyousomethingaboutmyschool.Youreright.Quiteafewchangeshavetakenplaceinourschool.Ononesideoftheroadisanewteachingbuilding;Ontheotherside,wheretheplaygroundusedtobe,standsanothernewbuilding-ourlibrary.Theplaygroundisnowinfrontoftheschool.Wehavealsoplantedalotoftreesinandroundtheschool.Ihopethatyouwillbeabletoreturnandseethechangesforyourselfsomeday.Bestwishes,注意：1.词数100左右；2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3.开头语已为你写好。June8,2008DearPeter,Imverygladtoreceiveyourletter.IwilltellyousomethingaboutmyEnglishstudyandhometown.,字数不够或未能传达读者任何信息，不得分。,samplesofstudentwork,readandwrite,findithard,fluentEnglishtowrite,Greatchanges,roads,hadtakenplaceinmyhometown,buildings,widened,Itwillbewonderfulwhen,youcometoChinaifyouarefree,showyouaround,Iwillbegladto,语言不地道;中文式思维;语言错误较多，得分13分,samplesofstudentwork,learn,oftheteachersandmy,progress,readandwrite,ithardtolearn,hardwork.,writelettersinfluentEnglish,found,hadbecome,WelcometoChinaifyouhavetime,showyouaround,语言素质较好;基本功不差;语句仍有毛病；得15分.,samplesofstudentwork,Practice,Findsomesimilarwordsorphrasesofthefollowings,good2.think3.clever,perfectexcellentoutstandingpleasantwonderfulfavorablemagnificent,inonesopinion/viewholdtheviewthatitiswidelysharedthat,wisebrightsmartintelligentcute,III.常用的连接词1.表示递进;在同一话题上补充内容另外，还有：2.表示转折关系但是，然而，相反：,whatsmore;besides;also;moreover;inaddition,but;however;yet;instead;ontheotherhand;onthecontrary.,3.表示因果关系因为，因此，所以:4.表示条件关系如果，只要:除非:否则:,since;as;because(of);so;thus;therefore;asaresult;,if;oncondition(that);aslongas,unless,orelse,5.表示时间关系当的时候:when;while在之后:after在之前:before直到:until直到才:notuntil一就:assoonas后来，然后:later;afterwards不久:soon近来:lately;recently自从:since从那时起:fromthenon,6.表示特定的顺序关系首先:firstly最主要的:aboveall其次:secondly然后:then;next最后:finally;intheend7.换一种方法表述换句话说:inotherwords;thatistosay;,8.进行举例说明例如，比如:9.用于陈述事实,forinstance;forexample;like;suchasthatistosay,namely,actually,andsoon,believeitornot,totellyouthetruth,forthisreason,实际上:infact;actually;asamatteroffact跟你说实话:totellyouthetruth,10.对一个话题进行总结总而言之，总的来说:,onthewhole;inshort;allinall;ingeneral;inaword,finally,inconclusion,generallyspeaking,asyouknow,intheend,其它常用到的副词therefore;otherwise;finally;furthermore;thus;namely;although;afterwards;personally;,12.表示结果：thus,therefore,so,asaresult,seeingthat,luckily,unfortunately13.表示强调：aboveall,indeed,surely,certainly,ofcourse,afterall,withoutanydelay,atleast,atmost,mostimportant,undoubtedly,6.表示特定的顺序关系首先:firstly最主要的:aboveall其次:secondly然后:then;next最后:finally;intheend7.换一种方法表述换句话说:inotherwords;thatistosay;,II.丰富的句式：(常用到的句型结构）利用不同的句型来表达同一个意思，能增加文章的文采。HowhappyIwaswhenIreceivedyourletter!Itwasthisyoungboywhohelpedtheoldgranny.Onlyinthiswaycanyousolvethisproblem.Theyreadwhilewalkingorridingonabus.,1.感叹句,2.强调句,3.倒装句,4.省略句,Isawayoungladywalkingslowlyinthestreetwithahandbaginherhand.Letscometothemainteachingbuilding,atthebackofwhichstandstheschoollibrary.ThatswhatIshoulddo.Timepassedquicklybeforeweknewit.,5、with短语,6、定语从句,7、各种名词性从句,8、各种状语从句,Practice,Ladiesandgentlemen,Welcometoourschool!,Thisvillageisasmallonewith/whichhasnearly100familiesandabout500people.,Itusedtobeverypoor.,However,ithaschangedalotsince1978,andhasbeendevelopingveryfast.,Peoplehereliveamuchbetterlifethanbefore.,书面表达：,Nowitistaking,onanewlook.,Inthepast,theschoolherewasverysmallandmostchildrencouldntaffordtogotoschool.,Butnowithasbeenrebuiltand,whichhas4storeysisthemostbeautifuloneinthevillage.,Alltheschool-agechildrencanstudyhere.,Whatsmore,theyenjoyfreeeducation.,Mayyouenjoyyourstayhere,thenewlybuiltteachingbuilding,/Mayyouhaveapleasanttimehere!,Thankyou.,Goodbye!,