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单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,书面表达练习讲评,暨写作技巧指导,What makes a good composition?,1. Good handwriting,2.The fewer errors, the better,I really dont know what should I do.,I should,1.,句子结构问题,There is a factory which near my home.,is,我学到的写作技巧,NO.1,注意句子,_,的正确搭配,结构,He has already apologized to the people for what he had done and gave/give some money to them.,given,did,2.,谓语动词形式问题,The waste waster was flowed directly into the river.,flows,That have resulted in unsafe drinking water.,has,我学到的写作技巧,NO.2,注意谓语动词的形式,-,_,、,_,、,_,语态,单复数,时态,3.,词汇用法问题。,It always pushes/pulls/flows waste into the rivers and gives out poisonous gases.,pours,I suggest them cut back on production.,they,Suggest (,建议,)+,n.,(that) + _ + _,（,_,）,+,动名词,主语,(should) do,宾格,/,所有格,them/ their cutting,王老师建议我们买本英语字典。,Mr,Zhao suggested that,we (should) buy,an English dictionary.,Mr,Zhao suggested,us / our buying,an ,causes unsafe drinking water,makes,The factory often pours lots of waste into the river, which causes the drinking water unsafe.,cause,sth,.,cause,sb,.,sth,.,cause,sb,. to do,causes drinking water to be unsafe,If I do so, hell loss his job.,lose,n.,I want to forgive for him.,forgive me,forgive sb. for doing,It makes bad/harmful effects on peoples health.,has/brings about,Looking these, I cant stand with what they do.,seeing,put up with,我学到的写作技巧,NO.3,注意用词的,_,适当使用,_,词汇,较高级,准确性,Is the following a good passage?,Dear Annie,There is a factory near my home. It often pours the waste into the river. This causes unsafe drinking water. It gives out poisonous gases. It has a bad effect on the peoples health. I cant stand seeing this. I want to ask them to cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases. However, my father is the manager of the factory. This will make him lose his job. He has apologized to the local people for this and given them some money. I want to forgive him, but I dont think he is right. What should I do?,To improve our writing,1,Only correct sentences are not enough.,Dear Annie,There is a factory near my home. It often pours the waste into the river. This causes unsafe drinking water. It gives out poisonous gases. It has a bad effect on the peoples health. I cant stand seeing this. I want to ask them to cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases.,However, my father is the manager of the factory. This will make him lose his job. He has apologized to the local people for this and given them some money. I want to forgive him, but I dont think he is right.,What should I do?,我学到的写作技巧,NO.4,注意合理,_,分段,What makes a good composition?,1. Good handwriting,2.The fewer errors, the better,3.Proper paragraph structures,Dear Annie,There is a factory near my home. It often pours the waste into the river. This causes unsafe drinking water. It gives out poisonous gases. It has a bad effect on the peoples health. I cant stand seeing this. I want to ask them to cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases.,Dear Annie,Near my home is a factory, which often pours its waste into the river .,This causes unsafe drinking water.,It gives out poisonous gases, which has a bad effect on the peoples health.,I cant stand seeing this. I want to ask them to cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases.,我学到的写作技巧,NO.5,恰当地使用,_,_,和,_,定语,从句,倒装句,Dear Annie,Near my home is a factory, which often pours its waste into the river . This causes unsafe drinking water. It gives out poisonous gases, which has a bad effect on the peoples health. I cant stand seeing this. I want to ask them to cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases.,Dear Annie,Near my home is a factory, which often pours its waste into the river.,This causes,.,unsafe drinking water.,It gives out poisonous gases, which has a bad effect on the peoples health.,Seeing these, I cant put up with what they do.,I want to ask them to cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases.,我学到的写作技巧,NO.6,准确使用,_,_,作状语,非谓语,动词,Dear Annie,Near my home is a factory, which often pours its waste into the river . This causes unsafe drinking water. It gives out poisonous gases, which has a bad effect on the peoples health. Seeing these, I cant put up with what they do.,I want to ask them to cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases.,Dear Annie,Near my home is a factory, which often pours its waste into the river.,This causes unsafe drinking water.,It gives out poisonous gases, which has a bad effect on the peoples health.,Seeing these, I cant put up with what they do.,My suggestion is that,they should cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases.,Dear Annie,Near my home is a factory, which often pours its waste into the river .,This causes unsafe drinking water.,It gives out poisonous gases, which has a bad effect on the peoples health.,Seeing these, I cant put up with what they do.,My suggestion is that,they should cut back on the production.,They must be prohibited from,giving out waste water and poisonous gases.,我学到的写作技巧,NO.7,避免简单句型,_,重复使用,What makes a good composition?,1. Good handwriting,2.The fewer errors, the better,3.Proper paragraph structures,4.words,phrases and sentences of high level,Dear Annie,Near my home is a factory, which often pours its waste into the river . This causes unsafe drinking water. It gives out poisonous gases, which has a bad effect on the peoples health. Seeing these, I cant put up with what they do.,My suggestion is that they should cut back on the production. They must be prohibited from giving out waste water and poisonous gases.,At the same time,Therefore,In addition,我学到的写作技巧,NO.8,添加必要的,_,关联词,Dear Annie,There is a factory near my home. It often pours the waste into the river. It gives out poisonous gases. This causes unsafe drinking water. It has a bad effect on the peoples health. I cant stand seeing this. I want to ask them to cut back on the production. I also want to stop them from giving out waste water and poisonous gases.,Im writing to you for your advice.,However, as my father is the manager of the factory, this will make him lose job. He has apologized to the local people for this and given them some money. I want to forgive him, but I dont think he is right.,What should I do?,Looking forward to hearing from you soon.,我学到的写作技巧,NO.9,注意书信的,_,和,_,开头,结尾,What makes a good composition?,1. Good handwriting,2.The fewer errors, the better,3.Proper paragraph structures,4.words,phrases and sentences of high level,5.Proper linking words and completeness,Enjoy our works!,Dear Annie,Im writing to you for your advice.,Near my home is a factory, which often pours much waste into the river. This has led to unsafe drinking water. At the same time, it gives off various poisonous gases, which has a bad effect on the peoples health. Seeing these, I cant put up with what they do.,Therefore, my suggestion is that the factory should cut back on the production. In addition, they must be prohibited from giving off the gases.,Competition,Rewrite the rest of the passage and try to use as many writing skills that you have learned as possible.,Lets share our writing!,我们学到的写作技巧,NO.1,注意句子结构的正确搭配,NO.2,注意谓语动词的形式,-,时态、语态、单复数,NO.3,注意用词的准确性 适当使用较高级词汇,NO.4,注意合理分段,NO.5,恰当地使用定语从句和倒装句,NO.6,准确使用非谓语动词作状语,NO.7,避免简单句型重复使用,NO.8,添加必要的关联词,NO.9,注意书信的开头和结尾,Homework,Rewrite the whole passage on your own.,书面表达练习讲评暨写作技巧指导,May you make greater progress in the next writing practice!,
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