2019-2020年高考英语写作最后冲刺 训练、点评和猜题 04（含解析）.doc

2019-2020年高考英语写作最后冲刺 训练、点评和猜题 04（含解析）阅读下面短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。Zhang Siyu, 25, who works as an agent for a performance pany in Beijing, went on a cruise trip from Singapore to Malaysia in August. But the views from the ships deck didnt provide much pleasure, as a group of Chinese people playing cards laughed loudly nearby. Most passengers were Westerners. “At that moment, as a Chinese I wished I could find a hole in the ground and hide,” she recounted. “I was in no mood to appreciate the view.” As more and more Chinese tourists travel abroad, some of their behavior is raising eyebrows.According to the latest xx LivingSocial survey, Chinese tourists were recently ranked second behind US citizens in a global poll of the worst travelers.According to experts, Chinese people lack access to information regarding the cultural customs of foreign countries, as well as international behavior guidelines. For instance, Chinese might not be aware of travel manners on certain transportation means such as airplanes, as evidenced by two recent fight incidents. Wang Jing, 30, an accounting professional in Hebei, travels extensively. He found that many Chinese do not tip waiters or luggage carriers in Europe. “Its not because they dont have any money,” he said. “They just dont know that they should give a tip, or dont know how much is appropriate.”写作内容1.以约30词概括上文的主要内容。2.以约120词就“中国游客在外国的表现”发表你的看法。内容包括：对于中国游客在全球最差游客榜单中位列第二，你有什么感想？你认为中国游客在外国的不妥表现是什么原因引起的？你觉得应该采取什么样的措施来提高中国游客的国际地位？写作要求1.在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容但不得直接引用原文中的句子；2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。评分标准概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。【思路点拨】 任务型写作要求考生阅读一篇短文，然后完成两项任务：使用约30个词概括要点；使用约120个词写一篇符合要求的短文。这一题型旨在考查考生“用英语获取信息、处理信息、传达信息的能力，分析问题、解决问题的能力以及用英语进行表达的能力”，即“综合语言运用能力”。因此，本篇写作有下列重点需要考生认真思考，加以解决： 1.概括短文内容：浏览全文，我们不难发现，这篇文章的主要内容是：中国游客“紧随”美国游客之后，在全球最差游客榜单中位列第二。原因是：中国游客在国外旅游时不得体的举止行为加上不少中国游客对文明礼貌的重要性缺乏认识；2.对于中国游客在全球最差游客榜单中位列第二的感想：伤感和耻辱(要有一定的阐述)；3.中国游客在外国的不妥表现是什么原因引起的(谈主要的原因。根据原文提供的素材，比如：中外文化、风俗习惯的不同等)；4.应该采取什么样的措施来提高中国游客的国际地位(要靠船下槁围绕上文说的主要原因来谈措施)。【参考答案】More and more Chinese travel abroad, but many have impropriate behaviors in foreign countries, and quiet a few Chinese tourists are ranked the second worst travelers in the world. Some experts think thats because Chinese are unaware of the good manners.When I learn that Chinese tourists are ranked the second worst travelers, I am very sad. Chinese is regarded a country of courtesy, but Chinese tourists are so unpopular among foreigners. It is really a shame, and we should think it over to find out the reason.In my opinion, there are various reasons for this. Chinese people are unaware of the cultural customs of foreign countries may be the most important reason. Whats more, Chinese manners are greatly different from manners in western countries, and it is easy for Chinese tourists to ignore the host countrys manners.In order to solve this problem and improve our fame in social behaviors, I suggest that the government hold regular lectures on manners in foreign countries or publish handbooks about this matter. I believe that things will get better and better. 【范文评析】1.范文在概括短文内容时，没有直接引用原文中的句子，符合题目设定的要求。第一话“More and more Chinese travel abroad, but many have impropriate behaviors in foreign countries, and quiet a few Chinese tourists are ranked the second worst travelers in the world.”比较长。该句由一个简单句和两个并列句组成，分别用“but”和“and”把三个句子连接起来，彰显了语句的复杂性；2.用时间状语从句“When I learn that Chinese tourists are ranked the second worst travelers”引出我的感想。范文在阐述感想时没有单单使用“I am very sad. It is really a shame”这样干巴巴的句子去阐述，而是给予深化，赋予这些句子以内涵：Chinese is regarded a country of courtesy(礼仪之邦), but Chinese tourists are so unpopular among foreigners(不受外国人的欢迎)、we should think it over to find out the reason(仔细考虑找出原因)。3.用“In my opinion”承上启下谈“中国游客在外国的不妥表现的原因”。范文根据原文提供的素材就谈了一个主要原因：中国游客没有意识到中外文化习俗的不同。词组“be unaware of”、关联句“Whats more”和经典句型“it is easy for Chinese tourists to ignore the host countrys manners(it is+adj. for sb. to do sth.)”的运用使文章增强了可读性和连贯性；4.范文用动词不定式短语作目的状语“In order to solve this problem and improve our fame in social behaviors”引出了“应该采取什么样的措施来提高中国游客的国际地位”的话题。范文围绕“中国游客没有意识到中外文化习俗的不同”的原因提出了两个措施“hold regular lectures on manners in foreign countries”“ publish handbooks about this matter”。最后范文还不忘用“I believe that things will get better and better”来升华文章的主题。练习二随着经济的发展，中国人出境旅游的现象在增加。但是，国人在境外的以下不文明行为也引起了多种议论，请针对以下不文明现象，写一篇150字左右的文章。国人在境外的不文明行为：随处抛丢垃圾、废弃物，随地吐痰、擤鼻涕、吐口香糖；上厕所不冲水，不讲卫生留脏迹；乘坐公共交通工具时争抢拥挤，购物、参观时插队加塞，排队等候时跨越黄线；在教堂、寺庙等宗教场所嬉戏、玩笑，不尊重当地居民风俗。文章要求：1.简述不文明行为及影响 2. 如何做一个文明游客为国家树立形象（可结合自己的经历）【思路点拨】 本篇书面表达看上去所给的要点比较多，咋一看，考生可能感到无从下手。其实看看题目中“文章要求(简述不文明行为及影响)”后，对于题目第二段中的要点的处理就比较容易了。1.交代话题的背景：随着经济的发展，中国人出境旅游的人数在增加；然后“简述不文明行为”(举上其中两个考生认为最拿手的例子说明问题就行，因为是要考生简述)；接着重点要落在“(不文明行为)所造成的影响”上。如：给外国人留下不好的印象；有损我们国家的形象，给国家带来坏名声等等；2.这篇作文的重点内容是“如何做一个文明游客为国家树立形象”。要想用有限的字数来把问题表达清楚也并非易事。所以，要想说到问题的焦点上，这就需要考生具备高度概括的能力并能熟练驾驭语言才能做得到。这个问题需要分成两个方面来阐述(标本兼治)：一方面是“如何阻止不文明行为的发生(治标的问题)”；另一方面是“做一个文明游客为国家树立形象(治本的问题)”。【参考答案】With the development of economy, more and more Chinese travel to foreign countries. Their uncivilized behaviors such as throwing litter everywhere and speaking loudly in public leave a bad impression on foreigners. All these uncivilized deeds do great harm to our nations image and give China a bad name. To prevent such behaviors, I think, maybe it is of use to blacklist those tourists and ban them from going travelling abroad. Besides, improving the moral quality of the whole nation and raising peoples cultural awareness are also important.As a mon visitor, how to create a positive image for our country? The most important way is to follow the old saying: When in Rome, do as the Romans do. In other words, you should respect the local customs and cultures. Whats more, always keep good manners in mind and treat people with courtesy, kicking off uncivilized behaviors.2.用动词不定式“To prevent such behaviors”作目的状语，引出“如何阻止不文明行为的发生(治标的问题)”。范文就用两句话就把问题阐述清楚，实属不易。“it is of use=it is useful”句型的运用、高级词汇“ban sb. from doing sth.”的使用以及“improving .and raising.”两个动名词短语作主语，足见作者语言功底的深厚；3.用一个省略句“As a mon visitor, how to create a positive image for our country=how can we create.?”引出“做一个文明游客为国家树立形象(治本的问题)”。谚语“When in Rome, do as the Romans do(入乡随俗)”的使用，关联句“Whats more”的使用以及词组“keep.in mind”的使用为文章增色不少。练习三随着中国人生活水平的提高，选择到国外去旅行已成为中国人盛行的度假方式之一。但是，有些中国旅行者的不文明行为却给广大的中国人丢尽了脸，如乱丢垃圾、在景区乱写乱画、在公共场所大声喧哗、大声接打手机、在飞机上大打出手等等。请以“Be a Civilized Chinese”为题目，写一篇英语稿件，投给China Daily.注意：词数150左右。 开头已经给出，不计入总词数。 Be a Civilized ChineseWith the improvement of Chinese peoples living standard, _ _【思路点拨】本篇书面表达属于夹叙夹议类的文章。根据题目所给的提示信息说明中国旅行者不文明行为的严重性以及该采取哪些措施。写作时注意以下几点：1.仔细阅读有关提示，弄清楚题目所含有的所有信息，明确有哪些要点： 随着中国人生活水平的提高，选择到国外去旅行已成为中国人盛行的度假方式之一；有些中国旅行者的不文明行为却给广大的中国人丢尽了脸；如乱丢垃圾、在景区乱写乱画、在公共场所大声喧哗、大声接打手机、在飞机上大打出手等等； 在话题范围内合理地进行分析、想象和发挥：围绕“做一个文明的中国人”的话题谈自己的建议或看法。2.谋篇布局，运用三段式：第一段话题说背景；第二段列举不文明现象(要夹叙夹议)；第三段谈谈建议或看法；3.头脑风暴：搜索表达是所需要的词汇：With the improvement of/ with the development of, choose to travel abroad, a way of spending their holidays, uncivilized behavior, makes Chinese ashamed, litter here and there/throw rubbish everywhere/ drop litter everywhere, scratch their names on the walls or other buildings/ carve their names on the trees or statues, talk loudly in public places, fight against sb.等等。【参考答案】Be a Civilized ChineseWith the improvement of Chinese peoples living standard, more and more people choose to travel abroad as a way of spending their holidays.However, some tourists have uncivilized behavior when they are traveling abroad, which greatly makes all of us Chinese ashamed. For example, when they visit some world famous places of interest, they litter here and there. Whats worse, some even carve their names on the trees or statues. Besides, some tourists talk loudly in public places with each other or on their mobile-phones. Worst of all, some passengers on board even fight against each other or with the air-hostesses just because of some inconvenience. These actions show the low quality of some tourists. As far as I am concerned, its the duty of every Chinese to protect the environment and public facilities, no matter where we are traveling. Only in this way can we be civilized Chinese who will win respect from all over the world.【范文评析】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构。具体地说：1.第一段用一个简单句就把话题的背景说得清清楚楚。经典句型“With the improvement of Chinese peoples living standard” 用with引导的原因状语从句，突出句子重点，句子结构平衡和词组“choose.as a way of spending their holidays”的运用充分吸引了阅卷老师的眼球；2.第二段用了很多关联词“However, For example, Whats worse, Besides, Worst of all”，使文章结构清晰，逻辑明确；时间状语从句“when they are traveling abroad, when they visit some world famous places of interest ”和非限制性定语从句“which greatly makes all of us Chinese ashamed.”的运用使得文章错落有致；本段最后一句是对上面所述现象的的议论“These actions show the low quality of some tourists(这些行为表明一些游客素质的低下)”；3.第三段用经典句型“As far as I am concerned”引出自己的建议“protect the environment and public facilities(保护环境和公共设施)”。最后一句“Only in this way can we be civilized Chinese who will win respect from all over the world”倒装句结构，变换句子样式，使文章更吸引人。猜 题请根据你对图片的理解用英语写一篇短文。你的短文应包含以下内容： 1.描述图片内容，如情景、人物、动作，等等； 2.结合实际，谈谈你身边的不文明现象； 3.举例说明我们中学生如何养成文明习惯。 注意：1.可参照图中文字及下面文章开头所给提示，作必要的发挥想象。 2.词数 150 左右。开头已经写好，不计入总词数。 3.作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。 With the development of economy, ethical(伦理) and moral education has been a hot topic nowadays. 【思路点拨】 题目要求非常明确，要考生完成三项任务：1.描述图片内容，如情景、人物、动作，等等。这就要求考生仔细审图，设想一个完整的画面： 时间地点：一个暖和天，公园里 人物、动作：一个游客占据长凳睡着了，老太太和小孩没有地方休息了。2.结合实际，谈谈你身边的不文明现象。由游客霸占长凳睡觉，我们自然联想到：公共汽车上的占座；再根据常识列举一些身边的不文明行为，比如：公共场所大声喧哗、抽烟、乱扔垃圾、行人闯红灯等等。3.举例说明我们中学生如何养成文明习惯(要根据自己的实际水平进行力所能及的表达)。 【参考答案】With the development of economy, ethical and moral education has been a hot topic nowadays.As is vividly shown in the picture, on a warm day in the park the bench is occupied by one traveler who is so tired as to fall asleep, leaving no room for an old lady and a little child to relax.What the picture wants to tell us is that such behavior can be seen easily in our daily life. In the buses some young people dash to the seats intended for the old and the disabled. Besides, in public places, people are often seen talking loudly, smoking or littering without paying attention to others around. And also, many people put their lives at risk by crossing the streets, ignoring the traffic lights and passing cars. This kind of behavior damages the image of our city.From my point of view, we, the students, should lead the role in observing the Chinese virtue. We should learn from the good examples around us and resist the bad behaviors. Remember that whatever we do, we should put others interests before ours. Only in this way can we make our society a more harmonious one to live in.【范文评析】 1.用经典句型“As is vividly shown in the picture”引出对图片的描述。词汇“be occupied by, so.as to.”和现在分词短语作结果状语“leaving no room for an old lady and a little child to relax”的使用不仅吸引人的眼球，而且使文章的结构紧凑一气呵成； 2. 用一个复合句“What the picture wants to tell us is that such behavior can be seen easily in our daily life”引出话题。本段最大的特点是运用了被动语态和非谓语动词。被动语态“can be seen，are often seen”和非谓语动词“to tell us, intended for, the disabled, talking loudly, smoking or littering, without paying attention to, by crossing, ignoring, passing”等的使用，充分显示了作者语法功底的深厚；本段最后一句“This kind of behavior damages the image of our city(这种行为有损我们城市的形象)”为文章增添了活力；