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单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,二级,三级,四级,五级,2021/1/27,#,Continuation writing,读后续写,Continuation writing读后续写,1,什么是读后续写？,提供一篇,350,词左右的材料（一般是记叙文，且以事件发生的时间为序），短文中会将,10,个关键词画下划线。,根据该材料的内容情节等将其发展为一篇,150,词左右的逻辑合理情节完整的短文。,需要续写两个段落且要用到至少,5,个关键词，每个段落都给出了第一句。,什么是读后续写？提供一篇350词左右的材料（一般是记叙文，且,2,【2018,浙江高考真题,】,It was summer, and my,dad,wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before.He decided totake me on a trip to the Wild West. We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of NewMexico.We reachedAlbuquerque in the late afternoon.,UnclePaul,my dadsfriend,pickedus up from the airport anddrove us up to his farm in Pecos.,His wife Tina cookedus a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle.My dadand I spent the night in the guestroom of the,farm house,listening to the frogs and water rolling downthe,river,nearby.Very early in the morning,Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast.“The daystarts at dawn on my farm,”he said.After breakfast,I went to help Aunt Tina,feed,the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the,sheep,out tograze (,吃草,). I was impressed to seemy dad and Uncle Paul riding horses.They lookedreally cool.,In the afternoon,I asked UnclePaul if I could take a horse ride,and he said yes,as long asmy dad went with me.I wasnt going to take a horse ride by myself anyway.So,my dad and I puton our new cowboy hats,got on our horses,and headed slowly towards the mountains.“Dont be,late,for supper,”Uncle Paulcried,“and keep to the,track,so that you dont,get lost,!” “OK!”mydadcried back.After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of,sight,.It was so peacefulandquiet and the colors of the brownrocks,the deep green pinetrees,and the late afternoon sunmixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautifulwoven (,编织的,),blanket spread out uponthe ground just for us.【,答题时需注意,】,1.,所续写短文的词数应为,l50,左右；,2.,至少使用,5,个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；,3.,续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；,4.,续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。,Paragraph1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse. _,Paragraph2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark. _,【2018浙江高考真题】,3,要续写的两个段落的第一句（已给出）,Paragraph 1:,Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.,Paragraph 2:,We had no idea where we were and it was gettingdark,要续写的两个段落的第一句（已给出） Paragraph 1,4,读后续写考查什么？,核心素养：,语言能力：阅读和写作,思维品质：想象能力和创新精神,具体说来，应该是这四个方面,把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力,语言运用的准确性和丰富性,对语篇结构的把控能力,创造新思维能力,读后续写考查什么？核心素养：,5,评分标准,得分要素：,与所给短文及段落开头与的衔接程度,内容的丰富性和对所给关键词语的覆盖情况,应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性,上下文的连贯性,扣分标准：,总分,25,分，按五个档次给分,根据内容及语言初步定档,词数少于,130,的，扣,2,分,单词拼写及标点符号使用情况，视其对交际的影响程度酌情处理,书写较差以至于影响交际，可酌情降低评分档次,评分标准得分要素：,6,评分细则,评分档次,第一条,第二条,第三条,第四条,第五档,（,21-25,分）,与所给短文融合度高，与所提供的各段落开头语衔接合理。,内容丰富，应用了五个以上短文中标出的关键词语。,所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。,有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写的短文结构紧凑。,第四档,（,16-20,分）,与所给短文融合度较高，与所提供的 各段落开头语衔接较为合理。,内容比较丰富，应用了五个以上短文中标出的关键词语。,所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达。,比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写的短文结构紧凑。,第三档,（,11-15,分）,与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供的 各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接。,写出了若干有关内容，应用了四个以上短文中标出的关键词语。,应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义表达。,应用简单的语句间连接成分，使全文内容连贯。,第二档,（,6-10,分）,与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供的各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接,写出了一些有关内容，应用了,3,个以上短文中标出的关键词语,语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表达。,较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性。,第一档,（,1-5,分）,与所提供的短文和开头语的衔接较差。,产出内容较少，很少使用短文中标出的关键词语。,语法结构单调，词汇项目有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达。,缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容连贯。,与原文剧情融洽，逻辑合理,续写内容丰富有看点，用了关键词,语法结构和词汇多样准确,语句间衔接自然，结构紧凑,评分细则评分档次第一条第二条第三条第四条第五档与所给短文融合,7,解题思路,搞清原文剧情,回扣原文，结合段首句确定剧情走向,融入关键词，想象细节拟写草稿,丰富细节，润色,解题思路搞清原文剧情回扣原文，结合段首句确定剧情走向融入关键,8,Step 1,精读文章，搞清思路,It was summer, and my,dad,wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before.He decided totake me on a trip to the Wild West. We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of NewMexico.We reachedAlbuquerque in the late afternoon.,UnclePaul,my dadsfriend,pickedus up from the airport anddrove us up to his farm in Pecos.,His wife Tina cookedus a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle.My dadand I spent the night in the guestroom of the,farm house,listening to the frogs and water rolling downthe,river,nearby.Very early in the morning,Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast.“The daystarts at dawn on my farm,”he said.After breakfast,I went to help Aunt Tina,feed,the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the,sheep,out tograze (,吃草,). I was impressed to seemy dad and Uncle Paul riding horses.They lookedreally cool.,In the afternoon,I asked UnclePaul if I could take a horse ride,and he said yes,as long asmy dad went with me.I wasnt going to take a horse ride by myself anyway.So,my dad and I puton our new cowboy hats,got on our horses,and headed slowly towards the mountains.“Dont be,late,for supper,”Uncle Paulcried,“and keep to the,track,so that you dont,get lost,!” “OK!”mydadcried back.After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of,sight,.It was so peacefulandquiet and the colors of the brownrocks,the deep green pinetrees,and the late afternoon sunmixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautifulwoven (,编织的,),blanket spread out uponthe ground just for us.,暑假,父亲,带我去西部,叔叔,的农场度假,我们在,农场,听着蛙鸣和,河水,声入睡,早上我帮忙,喂,鸡,，父亲和叔叔骑马,放,羊,我很羡慕，于是和父亲去骑马,他们叮嘱晚餐别,迟到,，沿着,路,走能不,迷路,我们骑马就,走远,了，风景很美,Step 1 精读文章，搞清思路It was summer,9,feedthe chickens,River,sheep,track,UnclePaul, farm house,Dont be late for supper!,My dad,feedthe chickensRiversheeptra,10,剧情需要前后照应形成,闭环,，否则很难用上关键词。,可遵循时间顺序，地点顺序，逻辑顺序等设计剧情。,不建议的剧情：,追兔子迷路，进入迷宫发现宝藏（扯太远了回不来）,追兔子迷路，森林里乱窜结果碰到了家或熟人或救援队，安全返回（强行结尾，无逻辑）,追兔子迷路，晚上点燃火柴，烛光中看到了温暖的家（悲剧结尾）,Step 2,回扣原文，设计剧情,剧情需要前后照应形成闭环，否则很难用上关键词。Step 2,11,Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse. _,Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark. _,Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpe,12,Step 3,拟写草稿，用上关键词,怎样让记叙文生动起来呢？,动作描写,2-5,个,环境描写,1-2,个,对话,1-2,个,表情或心理,1-2,个,已给提示词汇：,dad,，,Uncle Paul,，,farm house,，,river,，,feed,，,sheep,，,late,，,track,，,get lost,，,sight,话题激活词汇：,情感：,panic,，,relief,，,nervous,，,worried,动作：,run,，,cry,，,think to oneself,环境：,scenery，mountain，range，valley，river，lake，forest，sun，set，wind，blow,Step 3 拟写草稿，用上关键词怎样让记叙文生动起来呢？,13,Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.,（已给出）,Dad and I found it was so cute that we decided to run after it.,After a while, we were completely,lost,in the forest.,There was nothing left in our sight but the trees.,“We may not be able to make it back to the farm house in time for supper.”,I thought to myself.,After a series of useless attempts to find a way out, we felt hungry and tired.,动作一,动作三,+,心情,对话（内心独白）,动作二,环境描写,Suddenly a little rabbit jumpe,14,We had no idea where we were and it was getting dark.,（已给出）,We got stuck in the forest.,And an unexpected shower added to the difficulty of us in finding a way home, for all the tracks we had made disappeared because of the rain.,I was almost breaking down when my father said, “Dont worry, my son. I remember there is a river near the farm house. Find the river and we will be back home.”,Finally, we found the river and got back to the house along it.,Needless to say, we ate a late dinner.,动作一,环境,对话，转折（高潮）,动作（结局）,We had no idea where we were a,15,怎样提高与原文的融合度呢？,人物性格和关系保持一致。,语言风格保持一致（如景物描写，对话）。,剧情发展符合逻辑，符合常识，且在前文能找到铺垫。,怎样提高与原文的融合度呢？人物性格和关系保持一致。,16,Step 4,润色，标出关键词,润色包括连接词的使用、句型和词汇的升级替换,标出关键词（下划线，题型要求。在使用关键词语时根据时态和语态的需要，可以改变动词的形式，可以改变名词的单复数，但不要改变关键词语在原文中的含义和词性。）,Step 4 润色，标出关键词润色包括连接词的使用、句型和词,17,Thank you,！,Bye,！,Thank you！Bye！,18,1.,满含泪眼问问春花，春花却不答语，零乱的落花已经飘飞过秋千去。,2.,怎能忍受这孤独的馆舍正紧紧关住的春寒，特别在杜鹃悲啼不停夕阳将暮之时。,3.,辞官归隐田园后融入大自然怀抱里的悠闲自得，忘却了荣辱得失，尽享田园生活之恬淡。,4.,惜别之情不是很浓烈，更没有悲伤，竟被眼前美丽的景观吸引了，若非急着去赴任，诗人定会继续欣赏下去，与大自然共享闲暇。,5.,文本解读本文是一篇论述生物社会行为的文章。作者选取了独特的视角，将一些群居性生物的行为与人类进行比较，描述了它们在集体行动中所表现出的高度组织性、协调性,.,6.,以及作为群体出现时所表现的巨大力量和智慧，从而得出这样的结论：人类的社会行为与生物的社会行为有极大的共性，并非水火不容，而是可以互为比照的。,7.,很显然，作者的目的不是为了证明其他生物比人类更高明，也不只是为我们提供生物交流技术方面的有趣知识，更是以一个医学家、生物学家的睿智和敏锐的洞察力,.,8.,对传统生物学过分强调个体行为和动物本能的观点进行了反思，也对人类盲目自大、不能充分认识自身生存危机作出了警示。,9.,人类虽然最终脱颖而出，主宰了这个世界，但人类的行为方式还具有和其他社会性生物相类似的特点，还需要联合，需要团结，才能源源不断地产生智慧，克服自身发展面临的种种困境，推动社会进步。,1. 满含泪眼问问春花，春花却不答语，零乱的落花已经飘飞过秋,19,
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