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基础写作的评分标准 内容 5分 语言 7分 连贯性 2 分 书写 1分 句子内容的 完整性 (Completeness) 句子结构的 正确性 (correctness) 句子结构的 复杂性 (Variety) 句子内容的 连贯性 (Coherence) 处理词语 写出句子 连接句子，变身复句。 1. 某事值得做 sth is worth doing 值得 (花费金钱，时间 ) worthwhile 2. 日常生活 daily life 3. 饥饿 starvation 4. 卫星 satellite 通讯传播 communication 5. 天气预报 weather forecast 6. 能源短缺 energy shortages 写作内容： 最近，你班同学就“太空探索是否值得” 这一话题展开了一场讨论 .请你根据下表 提供的信息，用英语写一篇短文介绍讨论 的情况。 30%的同学反对： 1. 离我们及我们的日常 生活太远 2. 浪费金钱，这些金钱本可以 用来解决饥饿，污染等问题。 70%的同学赞成： 1. 已使用卫星进行通讯 传播，天气预报等； 2.有望解决地球能源 短缺问题 . 1.There are 30% of the students think that space is worth exploring. 30% of the students think that space is worth exploring. 错误诊断 ： there be 句型使用错误 . 中国式英语 2. 70% students think that is worthwhile to explore space. 70% of the students think it is worthwhile to explore space. 错误诊断 ：百分比和名词之间要用 of, of之后的 名词要有 the that是从句标记，要有主语 3. And had 30% the students are agree the idea of explore space. 30% of the students agree with the idea of exploring space. 错误诊断： have的用法错误 百分数后用 of连接名词 sb agree with sb/sbs idea of是介词，后用名词或者动名词 写说明文或介绍性的文章时 ,时态要用 现在时 , 注意句子结构 ,尤其是主句 ,从句结构要清晰 , 复杂 ,主句 ,状语部分要用恰当 ,不要逐句翻译 . 找出错误，修改 标注出你认为他 /她写得好的句子 The discussion of seeking the space Today, our class had a discussion, which talk about if the seeking of the space have a worthwhile. Those who are in favor of seeking the space claim that it has a lot of advantages. For example, the satellite was used to communication and the whether forecast, also the seeking could make the earth full of energy. But some students who disagreed with it said: “ Maybe the seeking is right, but its too far to know it in our daily life, the money used to seeking the space should be useds the deal with the starvation and the pollutions. on my views, I think the seeking of the space is worthwhile to do it. The discussion of seeking the space Is space exploration worthwhile? Is space worth exploring? Today, our class had a discussion, which talk about if the seeking of the space have a worthwhile. discuss sth discussion on/about sth it is worthwhile to do sth Recently, we have had a discussion on whether it is worthwhile to explore space. Whether the space exploration worthwhile Those who are in favor of seeking the space claim that it has a lot of advantages. be in favor of 赞成 claim 声称，宣称 Those who are in favor of (赞成 ) exploring space claim that it has a lot of advantages. 70% of the students who are in favor of exploring space claim that it has a lot of advantages. For example, the satellite was used to communication and the whether forecast, also the seeking could make the earth full of energy. 1. 拼写错误 whether 2. 时态错误 For example, satellites have been used for communication and weather forecast, and the exploration can enable us to solve the problem of energy shortages on the earth if we find new resources on other planets. But some students who disagreed with it said: “ Maybe the seeking is right, but its too far to know it in our daily life, the money used to seeking the space should be useds the deal with the starvation and the pollutions. But 30% of the students who disagree with it feel that space is too far from our daily life and the money spent on space exploration can have been used to deal with problems such as starvation and pollution. On my views, I think the seeking of the space is worthwhile to do it. In my view, space is worth exploring. In my opinion, space is worth exploring. As far as I am concerned, space Personally speaking, I think 1.Recently, our classmates have held a discussion whose topic of that was whether worth exploding in space. Recently, our classmates have held a discussion whose topic is whether space is worth exploring. Recently, our classmates have held a discussion on whether space is worth exploring. 2. 30% students disagree because they considered that it was far away from us and our daily life. 30% of the students disagree because they consider that space is far away from our daily life. 3. Besides, it wasted money which should have solved some problems such as starvation and pollution. Besides, it wastes a lot of money, which could have been used to solve problems such as starvation and pollution. 4. But the others agreed with the opinion that was worth doing that and gave some reason about that it benefited solving earths energy shortages problem. 结构混乱 But the others who agree with this idea that space exploration is worthwhile claim that we have benefited a lot from space research and it may help us to solve the earths energy shortage problem. 5. And it is known to all the satellite is used to make communication or forecast. It is known to all that satellites have been used for communication and weather forecast. 被用来做某事 1. be used to do sth 2. be used for sth Sample 1 Recently, our class has held a discussion about whether space is worth exploring. 30% of the students object the idea of exploring space. They feel that its a waste of time and resources to do so and the large sum of money spent on the exploration could have been used to deal with problems such as starvation and pollution. However, 70% of the students consider it worthwhile to explore space. As we all know, satellites have been used for communication as well as weather forecast, which make our lives more convenient. Besides, if resources are found on other planets, energy shortages on our earth can be solved. Sample 2 Recently, students in our class have had a discussion on whether space is worth exploring. 30% of the students think space exploration is not worthwhile. They think space is too far away from us and our daily life, and the money spent on space exploration can have been used to solve problems such as starvation and pollution. 70% of the students think space is worth exploring because we have benefited a lot from it, such as using satellites for communication and weather forecast. Also, space research will enable us to find new resources to solve the problem of energy shortages on the earth.
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