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考点考查项目体裁专题十六读后续写挖命题【考情探究】考情分析2018.11 2018.6 2017.11 2017.6 2016.10 故事类记叙文 故事类记叙文 故事类记叙文 故事类记叙文小两口野外游话题和爸爸去朋友 家农场游玩迷 路的故事和父母一块去 旅游的故事朋友一起骑车 玩不幸走散,女 游玩,野外遇到 主人迷路,在野 狼的故事 外独自度过夜晚标示词名词(词组)动词(词组)72627382读后续写形容词、副 词12其他1.考查考生对故事类文章的理解以及根据原文的内容创作逻辑合理、语义通顺的结尾的 能力;考查内容 2.考查续写内容的丰富性以及和原文的相符性;3. 考查对所给关键词语的覆盖情况;4. 考查续写的文章中应用的语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性。提供一段 350 词以内的语言材料,要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关 考查方式 键词语进行续写(150 词左右),将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文分析解读读后续写是浙江省高考英语科特有的题目,综合了阅读理解和写作。该题不仅考查考生的语言表述能力,还考查考生对文章的理解能力、对文章结构的把握能力和对情节 发展的判断构思能力。考生只有在对原文准确深刻理解的基础上,对情节的发展做出判断, 运用合适的构思能力,才能做出优秀的续写。因此,读后续写具有较大的难度。【真题典例】阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。原文延续了浙江省读后续It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never 写的特点,是一篇故事性before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West.很强的记叙文。文字简单,We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. 内容贴近日常生活。We reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dadsfriend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos. 文章第一段交代故事的背 His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons 景。介绍了度假的原因和 Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guest room of the farm 地点。house listening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Veryearly in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast.“The day第二段简单地介绍了旅 starts at dawn on my farm,”he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt 途。Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheepout to graze(吃草).I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding 第三段是对在农场的日常horses. They looked really cool.活动的简单介绍。In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, andhe said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasnt going to take a 第四段和续写故事的展开 horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and I put on our new cowboy hats, 有很大的关系。这一段讲 got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Dont be到了如何发生了我和爸爸 late for supper,”Uncle Paul cried,“and keep to the track so that you 去骑马的故事。而续写的 dont get lost!”“OK!”my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and 内容就是在此基础上展 his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and quiet and the 开。colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the lateafternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautifulwoven(编织的)blanket spread out upon the ground just for us.注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右;2. 至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse.Paragraph 2:We had no idea where we were and it got dark.写作指导根据续写第一段所给的段首句 Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. 可知,本段应该主要描写突然出现一只兔子之后的故事。按照常理,突然出现的兔子一般会让 马受惊。故本段描写马受惊后发生的事比较自然。从第二段的段首句 We had no idea where we were and it got dark.可以看出作者和父亲 迷路了。那么本段的故事主要根据迷路之后的情况展开,应该是从迷路到回家的故事。 写作时一定要注意以下两点:第一,从本故事的发展来看,第一段是马受惊后发生的事,而第二段是迷路之后的故事,因此 要注意人物心理和情感的描写。第二,注意两段的逻辑关系。要注意第一段段首句和原文的逻辑顺畅,以及第一段的内容,尤 其是段尾的内容和第二段段首句的逻辑合理,即第一段的最后一定要有迷路的情节设计。参考范文Paragraph 1:Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. This unexpected appearance frightened my horse, which made it run wildly. I tried my best to control it, but in vain. Frightened as I was, I tried to keep my balance to prevent me from falling off. Fortunately, minutes later, the horse stopped before a river, out of breath, and so did I. At that moment, my dad also came up. Seeing I was OK, he was quite relieved. But it was clear that we got lost.Paragraph 2:We had no idea where we were and it got dark. We didnt know where thefarm house was. What we could do was to go back along the previous track slowly. But it was really difficult for us in such a dark situation. Just as we were at the point of desperation, we heard a faint voice from the distance. “It must beUncle Paul,” I said. So we cried back with excitement. Finally, Uncle Paul safely brought us back home. What an amazing ride!范文鉴赏1. 范文和原文的逻辑关系紧密,故事紧紧贴近原文的故事发展。2. 续写使用了不少高级的句子结构,如:Frightened as I was.尽管我很害怕to prevent me from falling off 防止我掉下去.the horse stopped before a river, out of breath, and so did I.马在一条小 河前停了下来,气喘吁吁,我也如此。What we could do was to go back along the previous track slowly. 我们能做的就是 沿着之前的痕迹慢慢走回去。3.文章用娴熟的笔法使用了很多精美词汇,如:previous adj. 之前的in vain 白费力气at the point of desperation 将要绝望之际a faint voice 微弱的声音过专题【五年高考】Writing 1(2017 浙江 11 月)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。A Vacation with My MotherI had an interesting childhood. It was filled with surprises and amusements, all because of my motherloving, sweet, yet absent-minded and forgetful. One strange family trip we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her.My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached, David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if wed ever see them again? Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games, camping equipment, and a tent into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after wed returned home to get the purse and travelers checks Mom had forgotten.David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while Dad slept:“You stand outside the door and play lookout(放哨)while I go, and Ill stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind:“Honey, where are the kids?” “What?! Oh, Gosh.I thought they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we werent about to take any chances.On the fourth or fifth night, we had trouble finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea:Why didnt we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there? David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our objections(反对). If a strange family showed up on her front doorstep, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone in the world is as nice as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右;2. 至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.Paragraph 2:We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.答案【写作提示】原文是一篇有关家庭旅游生活的故事。文章内容贴近生活,中学生容易发挥想象去续写。续 写的内容应该还是按照家庭旅游的主线来进行,当然,涉及“妈妈健忘,但是很善良”的特点 也是续写的关注点。【参考范文】Paragraph 1:The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. We decided to camp along the river. The views there were surprisingly beautifulthe warm sunshine, the fresh air, the clean water. We sat on the grass, enjoying the splendid nature. However, when Dad was about to put up our tent, he was disappointed to find that it had been left in the hotel. Well, Dad had to go back to fetch it to continue our camping.Paragraph 2:We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. Every time we got to a new place, Mom would cheer up like a child. She would get off the car excitedly, laughing and dancing around. Together we enjoyed the modern sights in the big cities, the historical buildings in the small towns and the amazing scenery in nature. When we came back to the hotel after the tiring but excellent visit, Mom would hug us and kiss us on our faces. How sweet she was! Absent-minded and forgetful as she was, she never forgot to express her love to us.Writing 2(2017 浙江 6 月)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。On a bright, warm July afternoon, Mac Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac pedaled(骑行)along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday. Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, thats a big dog!”he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasnt a dog at all, but a wolf, quickly catching up with him.Macs heart jumped. He found out his can of bear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Macs relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Macs bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to quickly restart the chase(追 赶).Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down. He saw a steep uphill climb before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, hed be easy caught up and the wolfs teeth would be tearing into his flesh. At this moment, Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didnt think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now.注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右;2. 应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:The car abruptly stopped in front of him.Paragraph 2:A few minutes later, the other cyclists arrived.答案【写作提示】文章题材和野外生活相关,故事具有冒险性。原文是主人公 Mac 在和朋友一起外出骑车旅游 时不幸遭遇饿狼的故事。就在最危险的时候 Paul 和 Becky 驱车走近。这样,精彩的故事进一 步展开。本文故事设计具有很大发展空间。根据文章的第一段提示句,本段应该描述 Paul 和 Becky 是如何帮助 Mac 脱险的,而根据第二 段的提示句,本段则应该是 Mac 的朋友到来之后发生的事。考生可以根据自己的理解和想象 进行合理的续写。一定要注意续写的内容的合理性,不可脱离原文的故事无限发展。 【参考范文】Paragraph 1:The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Mac rushed down from his bicycle and waved at the people inside the car for help. Paul and Becky inside the car got out immediately to help him climb into the car, in spite of the danger that the fierce wolf was running near. They quickly pushed Mac into their car and closed all the doors as hard as possible, legs trembling and breathless. Seeing this, the wolf still howled outside the car for some time and then left unwillingly.Paragraph 2:A few minutes later, the other cyclists arrived. Macs friends were shocked to hear the story and very grateful to the young couple. Mac invited all of them back tohis home for dinner and he introduced his wife and daughters to his two new friends who saved his life. During the dinner they recalled theadventure and talked about the ways to deal with such dangerous situations.Writing 3(2016 浙江 10 月)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake inthe forest. Unfortunately, on the wayan unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp”and walked away.With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.“Tom!”she cried.“Help!”No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag withTom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling(滴 落)somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me?Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右;2. 应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.Paragraph 2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up.答案【写作提示】这是一篇情节自然,但是有冒险色彩的故事。原文讲到 Tom 和 Jane 因琐事吵架,后来 Jane 意外迷失在森林里。根据原文及所给的段首句,续写部分的构思不会太难。根据第一段的首句可知,本段应该描述当天晚上 Jane 的心态和行动。而根据第二段的提示句 可知,本段主要叙述 Jane 最终是如何获救的。当然,在续写中,一定要反映出 Jane 的坚韧和 聪明,同时,最后一定要有 Tom 努力救援的信息,这样的续写故事结尾才有正能量。【参考范文】Paragraph 1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. She had to stay alone in the forest for another cold night.Jane was so tired and disappointed, but she didnt lose heart. She knew Tom must be trying his best to search for her. She believed that the helicopter must have been called by Tom and was sure it would come back again tomorrow. She found a place near thestream and slept.Paragraph 2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Shewalkedalong the stream, hoping to find a suitable place so that the helicopter could find her. She was so lucky that before long a big rock appeared, which was high above the trees. There she climbed and waited with heryellow blouse in hand for the helicopter to come again.To her great joy,she didnt wait long before she saw the helicopter in the sky. She waved hard with the yellow blouse and the helicopter quickly found her. She was right and it was Tom who called the helicopter and saved her.【三年模拟】模拟题组Writing 1(2019 浙江杭州质检)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。A man came home from work late, tired and irritated(不耐烦的), to find his 5-year-old son waiting for him at the door.“Daddy, may I ask you a question?”“Yeah sure, what is it?” replied the man.“Daddy, how much do you make an hour?”“Thats none of your business. Why do you ask such a thing?” the man said angrily. “I just want to know. Please tell me. How much do you make an hour?” pleaded the little boy.“If you must know, I make $20 an hour.”“Oh,” the little boy replied, with his head down. Looking up, he said, “Daddy, may I please borrow $10?”The father was angry, “If the only reason you asked that is that you canborrow some money to buy a silly toy or some other nonsense, then you march yourself straight to your room and go to bed. Think about why you are being so selfish. I work hard every day for such childish behavior.” The little boy quietly went to his room and shut the door. The man sat down and started to get even angrier about the little boys questions. “How dare he ask such questions only to get some money?”he thought to himself. After about an hour or so, the man calmed down, and started to think:Maybe there was something he really needed to buy with that $10 and he really didnt ask for money very often. The man went to the door of the little boys room and opened the door. “Are you asleep, son?” he asked.“No, daddy, Im awake,” replied the boy.“Ive been thinking, maybe I was too hard on you earlier,” said the man. “It has been a long day and I took out my anger on you. Heres the $10 you asked for.” The little boy sat straight up, smiling. “Oh. Thank you, daddy!” he yelled. Then, reaching under his pillow he pulled out some crumpled(皱巴巴的) bills.注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右;2. 至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:The man, seeing that the boy already had money started to get angry again.Paragraph 2:Not knowing what his son meant, the father just stood there, waiting for his boys explanation.答案【写作提示】原文是一篇充满亲情的故事。孩子为了得到父亲的陪伴而向父亲借钱。父亲由于工作劳累而 态度不好,斥责了孩子。后来父亲意识到了自己的行为不妥,来向孩子道歉并解释。而根据所 给的段首句可知,故事的结尾却又发生了转折,形成曲折的故事。根据第一段的段首句,父亲 又生气了。本段应该描写父子之间的新的情感冲突。而根据第二段的段首句可知,本段主要 是儿子的解释,是整个故事的高潮和主旨。【参考范文】Paragraph 1:The man, seeing that the boy already had money started to get angry again.“How can you be so selfish?Why do you want more moneysince you already have these bills?”the father could hardly hold his anger back andinquired with two eyebrows knitted into one. With held-back tears in his eyes, the little boy slowly and carefully counted out his money, and then looked up at his father, replying, “Because I didnt have enough before, but now I do.” with big blue eyes shining with tears. Paragraph 2:Not knowing what his son meant, the father just stood there, waiting for his boys explanation.Wiping away his tears and an innocent smile appearing on his face, the boy requested in a relieved voice, “Daddy, I have $20 now. Can buyI an hour from you?Please come home early tomorrow. I want tohave dinner with you.” Hearingthe boys small but sincere request, the father couldnt hold back his tears. Realizing he was too busy with his business to spare some time with his beloved ones, he gathered his son into his arms and apologized again and again, “Sorry., and I promise Ill be back early tomorrow.”Writing 2(2019 浙江七彩阳光联盟高三 11 月期中)阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。To celebrate his girlfriends birthday, Luke Fortune drove from a small town in Central Oregon to Portland, where he parked his car in a paid garage overnight. The next morning, he discovered that the cars window had been smashed, along with his dreams for the future:His backpack and computer were gone.“Everything important to me was on that computer,” said Fortune, 21, who is studying to become a paramedic(护理人员). “My classwork, every paper Id written, and all the programs I needed for my paramedic tests. Every letter I was working on for job applications. I felt sick.”Two days after the theft, another young man was standing outside his apartment, also in Portland. Masoud Almazrouei, 29, is an exchange student from the United Arab Emirates. He had been approached by a man who said he had a computer for sale. Only $200. Almazrouei, who had been in the United States for only a year, admits now that he was naive(天真). But he needed a computer, so he bought it, took it home, and turned it on. Within seconds, he saw files and photographs.“I wondered who would sell a computer with all of this on it,” he said. “I realized it could be stolen.” Almazrouei found what appeared to be the owners cellphone number and called it.“This guy with a thick accent told me he had my computer,” Fortune said. “He told me the story and said it was his fault. I thought it was a scam(骗局). I told him if he really had the computer, he should take it to the police.”Soon after, a police officer called Fortune to say that a man had dropped the computer off and had said he was sorry. He passed along the mans number.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右;2. 至少使用 5 个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1:Fortune called and thanked Almazrouei and insisted on payinghim a reward of $200, the money he was out.Paragraph 2:A story about the two young mens encounter made it to the local papers.答案【写作提示】原文是一个曲折并具有传奇色彩的故事。Fortune 丢了自己的电脑,而电脑被小偷卖给了 Almazrouei。Almazrouei 是一个诚实的人,他想把电脑还给 Fortune, 而 Fortune 不相信。 最后在警察的
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