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,*,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,2006,年,TEM-4,作文试题及样卷评分,Topic,Recently a Beijing information company did a survey of student life among more than 700 students in Beijing, Guangzhou, Xian, Chengdu, Shanghai, Wuhan, Nanjing and Shengyang. The results have shown that 67 percent of students think that saving money is a good habit while the rest believe that using tomorrows money today is better. What do you think?,Instructions,Write a composition of about 200 words.,You are to write in three parts.,In the first part, state specifically what your opinion is.,In the second part, support your opinion with appropriate details.,In the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.,You should supply an appropriate title for your composition.,Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriateness. Failure to follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.,Band 5: 15 Effective Communication with Accuracy,The writing effectively addresses the writing task. It demonstrates a well developed logical organizational structure with clearly stated main ideas and sufficient supporting details. It has almost no errors of vocabulary, spelling, punctuation or syntax, and it displays an adequate ability to use the language with appropriateness. No difficulty is experienced by the reader.,Band 4: 14-12 Good Communication with Few Inaccuracies,The writing adequately addresses almost all of the writing task, though it deals with some parts more effectively than others. It demonstrates a generally well developed logical organizational structure with main ideas and supporting details.,It has relatively few significant errors of,vocabulary, spelling, punctuation or syntax, and,it displays an ability to use the language with,appropriateness. Very little difficulty is,experienced by the reader.,Band 3: 11-9 Passable Communication with Some Inaccuracies,The writing adequately addresses most of the writing task. On the whole, it demonstrates an adequately developed organizational structure, though there may occasionally be a lack of relevance, clarity, consistency or support.,It has occasional errors of vocabulary, spelling, punctuation or syntax, which may, from time to time, obscure meaning, and for the most part it displays some ability to use the language with appropriateness. Occasional difficulty is experienced by the reader.,Band 2: 8-6 Problematic Communication with Frequent Inaccuracies,The writing only addresses some of the writing task. It demonstrates and inadequate organiza- tional structure, and there may quite often be a lack of relevance, clarity, consistency or support.,It has frequent errors of vocabulary, spelling, punctuation or syntax. And it displays a limited ability to use the language with It has frequent errors of vocabulary, spelling, punctuation or syntax. And it displays a limited ability to use the language with appropriateness. Some difficulty is experienced by the reader.,Band 1: 5-3 Almost No Communication,The writing almost completely fails to address the writing task. It has neither an organizational structure nor coherence.,Almost all sentences contain errors of vocabulary, spelling, punctuation or syntax, and it displays no ability to use the language with appropriateness. Even after considerable effort on the part of the reader, the text is largely incomprehensible.,字数不足,170,扣,1,分。,以下是样卷分析。,Sample 1,The Good Habit,Nowadays,more and more,young people,think that,it is better that using tomorrows,money today than saving money,while,in,my opinion, I think,its right.,For the first, our,contrair,has to develop.,So it,calls us to,use more money to let the,nation develop.,And then,that,may make our life more,comfortable. For example,I heard a story,.,There,are,two man. A,use,tomorrows,money to buy a new house,as,he has to,pay money to the bank every,months,while B,start,keeping,money.,Twenty years later, B finally k,eeping,enough money to buy a new house, but A has been,lived,in,it,for twenty years and,pay,enough,money to the bank.,At the end, if we have the,abilile,to pay the,list,why we,dont,use tomorrows money to,let our life more wonderful,?,So, thats what I think.,5-6,分。结构基本符合，但语言过于简单，语法错误多，内容模糊不清，题目不正确，字数少于,170,。,举例不可信。举例应该真实可信，比如亲身经,历、朋友体验或者名人轶事等。,文章结尾太简单。,Sample 2:,Saving money is a good habit,The other day, I heard a conversation between a boy and a girl. “Why,are you always lack of,money? As far I know, your parents give you,ample,money for your daily life”. said the girl. “Yes, I always use tomorrows money today”. Said the boy. “Its a bad habit, and you,should your money,!” the girl,shouted,. This is a very common phenomenon among the university students.,Owing to their argument,certainly, I am in favor of the girls view.,What possibly contributes to,the,preference can be listed,as follow,. In the,first place, money is very important for us.,We use money,buy,food, buy clothes and,so on. But, money is very precious,because its very hard to make money. So,money should be used when its necessary.,In the second place, there are so many poor children who quit school for lack of money in poor,religion,. So its very significant to save our money to help those poor children. And they,are look,forward to your help!,The last but the least important,is that if you always use tomorrows money today, you will form a bad habit.,But your money is limited,.,So you may rob others of money.,In short, I hold a firm belief that saving,money is a good habit and we should,keep it,forever. Its,the,high time that we,took some measures to save money!,9-10,分。文章切题，结构正确，有内容，有句式变化。但语法错误多，随意，粗心漏词。,说理缺乏逻辑。比如很多小孩失学不是我们需要节约用钱的理由，再比如钱不够用就会去抢别人的钱吗？,文章的入题不错，但故事交代很马虎，语言也很平凡，且不够简练。,文章结尾主题被简单重复，思想没有升华。,Sample 3,：,Saving Money,is,a Good Habit,I think saving money is a good habit,. Because,saving money can make you learn how to use less money to buy more things. Saving money can make you become a rich man.,If,some thing,happen,one day, you must use some money to solve the problem, but nobody can lend to you the money. Your saving money can help solve the problem.,Nowdays, some students use their parents money to buy a lot of,unnessary,things.,Such as, Some students change their,mobil,phone,every month,. Its not a good habit. Although their parents have a lot of money, they cant use money in that way.,Its waste,of money.,If you save money as a habit.,You,can,think carefully before you buy everything.,“,This thing is necessary,for me? Can I buy,the,cheaper one?” All those questions can,be asked by yourself.,If you want to buy a very useful thing, but you dont have enough money, you can save money for it. After some time, you can buy it for your-,self.,Saving money is a good habit. It,make,you become rich. It,make,you learn how to use less money to buy more things.,本卷得分,8-9,分。文章基本切题，结构基本正确。但语言简单，重复动词，语法错误多。,开始段没有引入主题，而是直接提出作者观点，太突然。而且有许多非完整句。,文章没有深度，思考肤浅。,Sample 4: Saving Money or Using Tomorrows Money,A survey by a Beijing information company which is to reveal how students think of the way to deal with money did recently, with the result that 67 percent of students think that saving money is a good habit while the rest believe that using money of tomorrow today is better. As far as I am concerned,it depends,.,First of all, saving money is a good habit of traditional concept, which makes people feel secure. However, using tomorrows money today is suggested and,couraged,according to societys needs.,Economics,can develop rapidly by the great amount of money used by people. That is to say, peoples consumption,urge,the,economics,to develop.,Secondly, different people have different life goals. Some people prefer to work hard when they are young and then enjoy the happy and rich life when they are old. Others would like to enjoy life every minute and do not think about the life after they retire from their company. They believe “time is money”, as the proverb goes. Therefore, it goes without saying that not enjoying todays life is a great pity for them. Money can be earned after its spent, while time past will not come back.,All in all, saving money or using tomorrows money today depends on peoples perception. The,passitive,of saving money does not outweigh that of using tomorrows money today. In a word, people could deal with money, according to their thoughts.,11-12,分。文章切题，结构正确，内容充实，观点有代表性，语言通畅。但长句有一点语法错误。,单词和拼写有个别失误。,Sample 5,There is no,concensus,among the people on the issue of the choice between saving money and using tomorrows money today. The attitudes toward this problem vary from person to person. And in my humble opinion, it is essential for us to save more money today instead of using tomorrows money. There are many reasons that may account for my point, and the following are the most conspicuous aspects.,To start with, we Chinese people boast a good tradition of being economical. The traditional Chinese culture regards waste as a poor moral standard. As a university student, we need to keep on carrying forward our nations fine moral standard, i.e. saving. And saving money is conducive not only to the cultivation of a good moral, but also,to release,the heavy burden resulting from some accidents in the future. In other words, saving todays money could meet our urgent need of it in the future.,Last but not least, the fierce competition well face after we graduate is full of uncertainties. Once we could not find a job which offers high salaries, it will be impossible for us to return the money to the creditors.,To put it into a nutshell, I am a great believer that saving money is a good habit because it really exerts positive impacts on both the present and the future.,本卷得分,12,分。语言通畅，词汇丰富，观点明确，条理清楚，结构正确。但有少量语法错误和拼写错误。没写题目（如果有题目可给,13,分）。,2007,年,TEM-4,便条,Note Writing,Write a note of about 50-60 words based on the following situation,：,Your classmate, Jimmy, is head of the universitys swimming club. He has invited you to join the club, but you like some other sport. Write a note, declining his invitation and explaining why.,Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriateness.,Sample1: (8,分,),April 22, 2007,Dear Jimmy,I received your short message, and Im glad to learn that you have been promoted as head of our universitys swimming club. Congratula- tions! You deserve that. As to your invitation for me to join your club, Im afraid I cant make it.,As you know, I am unable to swim and staying in water makes me uneasy. Funny, right? Whats more, I joined our schools basketball team two weeks ago. And I guess well exercise a lot for the competition held next month. So there is probably no time for me to learn swimming. Well, maybe you could drop in and watch our competition next month.,Yours,Sherry,Sample 2: (9,分,),April 22, 2007,Dear Jimmy,Thank you so much for inviting me to join the swimming club. Id like to but Im afraid I cannot. To learn tennis has long been my dream and the best tennis teacher will be leaving next year. So this is the last chance for me and I would like very much to seize it.,Best wishes.,Yours,Tom,知识回顾,Knowledge Review,祝您成功！,
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