句子润色用高级结构让句子靓起来

,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,#,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,句子润色：,用高级结构让句子 靓起来,教学目标：,1.,用高级结构为作文提档升级,2.,活学活用，能够在情境中实际 运用所学知识。,第二节书面表达（满分,25,分）,假定你是李华，与留学生朋友,Bob,约好一起去书店，因故不能赴约。请给他写封邮件，内容包括：,1.,表示歉意；,2.,说明原因；,3.,另约时间。注意：,1.,词数,100,左右；,2.,可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。,2016,年全国卷,3,Dear Bob,Im Li Hua.Yesterday we agreed to go to the bookstore together on Saturday but I want to tell you that I cannot go to the bookstore with you,because I have som,e,thing important,.I know I should keep my promise.I am very sorry about that.I hope you can understand me.,Shall we go on Sunday morning?I suggest we should start early.In this way we can have more time to read and select books.If you agree,lets meet at 8:30 outside the school gate.You can also choose the time to go to the bookstore if you have a plan.I will be free any time after school next week.,Yours,Li Hua,整篇作文缺少高级词汇、短语。句式单调，缺乏多样性，简单句的大量运用给人记流水账的感觉。,遣词造句过于平淡，叙述理由不够真诚，含糊不清以我为主体，没有顾及他人的感受。,正文第一段结尾结构松散，不够紧凑，上下文缺乏巧妙连接，表达过于口语化。部分句子不符合英式表达，如,I hope you can understand me.,完全是汉语思维的产物。,综上可知，语言平淡、中式英语思维、上下文缺乏连贯性是制约考生取得高分的关键因素。,策略,1,：特殊句式 风景独好,1,使用强调句,:,用,do,does,did,强调一般时态的谓语动词,;,用,it is.that.,强调谓语之外的各种句子成分。,Those who like reading extensively say we get our knowledge through reading.,Those,who like reading extensively say,it is,through reading,that,we get our knowledge.,Those who like reading extensively say we,do,get our knowledge through reading.,举一反三,您给了我们很多的知识和快乐！,(,梅二检,),It is you who/that give us so much knowledge and happiness.,You do give us so much knowledge and happiness.,It is your unreserved(,无保留的）,help that enables me to obtain this splendid,（极好的）,opportunity of further education.,2,使用倒装句,The library is to the east of the teaching building.,To the east of the teaching building is the library.,只有用这种方法我们才可以学好英语。,Only in this,way,can we,learn English well.,我不仅取得了好成绩，而且交到了很多好朋友。（,梅一检）,举一反三,Not only have I obtained the excellent academic performance,but also I have made lots of good friends,3,使用虚拟语气,Obviously,its high time for us to take some measures to solve the problem.,Obviously,its high time that we took some measures to solve the problem,We have done the work well with your help.,Without/but for your help,We could not have done the work well with your help.,I cant imagine what I would be like without them.,4,使用,with,的复合结构,:,介词,with+,宾语后接非谓语（动名词、现在分词、不定式、过去分词）、名词、形容词、副词并构成逻辑上主谓关系的结构。,with the technology developing,the human living environment has become worse and worse,由于有个重要的会要参加，我不能和你一起去书店了。,With an important meeting to attend,I cannot go to the bookstore with you.,5,使用独立主格结构,Weather permitting,we will have a picnic tomorrow.,My mother being ill,I have to take care of her now.,我的妈妈生病了，我必须照顾她。,策略,2,：活用非谓语，句句精彩,1,运用非谓语动词整合简单句，提升表达档次,（,1,）,I have a good command of English.,(2)It makes it easy for me to communicate with native speakers of English.,I have a good command of English,making it easy for me to communicate with native speakers of English.,举一反三,In this picture,a mother bird stays in her nest in a big tree.she watches her babies flying away.,In this picture,a mother bird stays in her nest in a big tree,watching her babies flying away.,All the people here like the novel.,It is written by Tom.,All the people here like the novel,written by Tom.,2,运用非谓语动词简化复合句，使语言简练,If you want to travel around the downtown area,youd better hire a street bike.,Wanting to travel around the downtown area,youd better hire a street bike.,After they visited the lab,the visitors went to the library.,Having visited the lab,the visitors went to the library,策略,3,使用谚语，画龙点睛,谚语的准确使用也可以为文章增色。,策略,4,运用从句，丰富内涵,通过合并意义相关的几个句子，用一定的连接方式连接起来，或通过紧凑，去掉一些多余的成分，避免冗长累赘、松散无力，使句子凝练，层次清晰。例如：,Some students,are interested in the activity.,They,are welcome to take part.,Students who are interested in the activity are welcome to take part.,背熟这,10,篇优秀范文，,2017,高考英语写作轻松得,20+,That is owing to,（因为）,the fact that,（同位语从句）,my younger brother suddenly fell ill and was taken to a hospital thismorning.(2,道歉信,),Besides,the success stories of world-famous people are also attractive to me,which help me learn a lot from them.,（,6,建议信）,I keep wondering how you feel about your school life in Beijing.,（,7,求助信）,第二节书面表达（满分,25,分）,假定你是李华，与留学生朋友,Bob,约好一起去书店，因故不能赴约。请给他写封邮件，内容包括：,1.,表示歉意；,2.,说明原因；,3.,另约时间。注意：,1.,词数,100,左右；,2.,可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。,2016,年全国卷,3,Dear Bob,Im Li Hua.Yesterday we agreed to go to the bookstore together on Saturday but I want to tell you that I cannot go to the bookstore with you,because I have som,e,thing important,.I know I should keep my promise.I am very sorry about that.I hope you can understand me.,Shall we go on Sunday morning?I suggest we should start early.In this way we can have more time to read and select books.If you agree,lets meet at 8:30 outside the school gate.You can also choose the time to go to the bookstore if you have a plan.I will be free any time after school next week.,Yours,Li Hua,Beautify it,