如何写基础写作之活动

*,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,如何写活动,How to introduce an activity or a program?,Writing order:,第一句,:what:,An introduction of the activity/program,；,who&when/where,；,Aim,目的,发生了,什么事，,发生在,谁,身上,?,什么,时候,/,地点,发生的,?,第二,四句,:&how,活动,(,事情,),的具体情况,:,是,怎么,进行的,?,第五句,:Effect/feelings,A conclusion of the activity/program,活动,(,事情,),的效果,/,感受,.,参加的活动,+,时间,+,主题,/,目的：,Last Saturday/On August 26,sb,.,took part in,a speech,contest(with,the theme of/aim of.,at,Guangzhou Childrens Palace,whose theme/aim,was“Protect Our Earth”,In order to,all the students of our school,took part in an(three-day)activity called,organized by+place+time.,attend+lecture(meeting,lecture,wedding)/take(active)part in/join in/participate in (activity)which was,held(organized,sponsored)by(,由,主办,)in.,In order to,an(,meaningful,important,unforgettable,colorful,instructive),activity was organized by from April 1,st,to April 3th/,which lasted 3 days from to.,Words and expressions,介绍活动的短语,:,succeed in;fail in,hold a party/meeting/celebration,organize an activity,参加者，参加人数等：,the participants,第,2-4,句：介绍活动,:,During the four days,a series of activities were held including ,There are a lot of,colurful,activities,for example.,内容包括：,A variety/series of activities will,be held/organized during including A and,B.In addition,/for instance,from which,we have got/can get a lot of joy and inspiration.,活动,(,事情,),的过程,介绍活动过程的连接词,:,At first,Then,After that,At last/Finally,描述活动过程可能用到的动词短语,:,have no trouble doing;get into trouble;,prepare,sb,for;give up doing;set about doing;,do,sth,as usual;try ones best to do=go all out to do;do ones bit for;,help,sb,out;make friends with,sb,;,cant help doing;,do some good deeds;,feel excited about doing;,Some are doing A,others are doing B,and still others are doing C.,第五句活动的效果（结果）或影响、感受或表决心,:,call on,sb,to do;,speak highly of;think highly of;,have a better knowledge/understanding of,get to know ;know more about,enrich ones life;broaden ones horizons;,enable,sb,.to gain more social experience;,make a better sense of ones personal value,活动的影响或目的,:,总结活动,影响或目的,套语,:,provide,sb,.with a valuable opportunity to speak English,make friends and exchange learning experience.I found my English much improved.,Never in my life shall I forget the impressive days,in .,gain a lot of social experience and learn to work for the society.,Through,these activities,we,can learn many things that cant be learned in class.,We enjoyed a change from our busy life in the city.,It was a very relaxing,Sunday,when,makes you a useful person and it is also full of joys.,8 This activity is a great success,which,9.Through the activity,not only did,we,but we also,10 The activity not only but also,11 make up ones mind to do;spare no effort to do,特别要注意：文体,/,人称,/,时态！,假设你参加了你校组织的中学生社会实践活动，请你根据以下信息，叙述“井冈山之旅”,(A Tour to the,Jinggang,Mountain),的活动情况。,【,写作内容,】,时间：,4,月,5,日,7,日,交通工具：火车,活动内容：,（,1,）参观“希望小学”,(the Hope Primary School),了解学生的学习条件；（,2,）与村民同吃同住，了解生活状况；,（,3,）参加田间劳动，体验农民生活。,感受：,（,1,）农民的生活条件改善了；,（,2,）有众多好心人资助,(sponsor),，不需交学费,(tuition fees),没有学生失学,(drop out of),。,步骤：,step 1:,审题：,人称：,I,we,时态,：（各句各分析）：活动内容：,过去时；感受：现在时，现在完成时,Step 2:5,个句子信息安排（很重要,!,）,假设,你参加了你校组织的中学生社会实践活动，请你根据以下信息，叙述“井冈山之旅”,(A Tour to the,Jinggang,Mountain),的活动情况。,【,写作内容,】,时间：,4,月,5,日,7,日,交通工具：火车,活动内容：,（,1,）参观“希望小学”,(the Hope Primary School),了解学生的学习条件；,（,2,）与村民同吃同住，了解生活状况；,（,3,）参加田间劳动，体验农民生活。,感受：,（,1,）农民的生活条件改善了；,（,2,）有众多好心人资助,(sponsor),，不需交学费,(tuition fees),没有学生失学,(drop out of),。,假设你参加了你校组织的中学生社会实践活动，请你根据以下信息，叙述“井冈山之旅”,(A Tour to the,Jinggang,Mountain),的活动情况。,【,写作内容,】,时间：,4,月,5,日,7,日,交通工具：火车,活动内容：,（,1,）参观“希望小学”,(the Hope Primary School),了解学生的学习条件；,（,2,）与村民同吃同住，了解生活状况；,（,3,）参加田间劳动，体验农民生活。,感受：,（,1,）农民的生活条件改善了；,（,2,）有众多好心人资助,(sponsor),，不需交学费,(tuition fees),没有学生失学,(drop out of),。,(,注意：不可以增加一个完整的句子，只能在已有信息的句子内做合理的拓展。）,Step 3:,考虑每个句子的单词，短语，句型,写好草稿,Step 4:,考虑句间的流畅过渡。,Step 5;,行文，注意书写，完成后检查拼写，标点,A Tour to the,JinggangMountain,On April 5th,I participated in a three-day tour organized by our school to the,Jinggang,Mountain by train.,After we got there,first,we visited the Hope Primary School,where we got to know the conditions of students study,in the less developed areas,（合理拓展）,.,After that,we,were arranged to,（合理拓展）,live in the houses of local villages to get to know more about their daily life.There we were able to have meals with them and work in the fields to experience the farmers life.,During the visit,we were excited to find that,（合理拓展）,for one thing,the farmers are leading a better life than ever before,;,for another,the students neednt pay their tuition fees and no children drop out of school,with many warm-hearted people sponsoring them,unselfishly,（合理拓展）,.,出现的问题：一、审题和文章结构方面,审题不细心，要么漏信息或写错信息（如：,4,月,5,日写成,4,月,4,日）；,时态不正确（写成将来时或一般现在时）；,信息重组不合理,(,本次特别严重）主要表现有：,1,第一句信息不完整，没讲去,jinggang,Mountain,第一句就写去希望学校。,2,第二句增加为：,in these days,we did many things to know about them.,或者在活动内容后增加一句；,All the students thought that the farmers were too tired after,expericing,their life.,；,3,讲内容的句子用得少，讲感受的句子多，导致写完了所有内容以后就加一句：,This is a