英语写作讲解篆中（桂文峰）

单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,初中英语书面表达,篆中 桂文峰,Teenagers,colorful,life,We study.,We like listening,to music.,We play,computer games for long.,We like reading,books.,We often play,Sports.,We go to KFC.,Sometimes we travel.,Sometimes we,stay up studying.,Teenagers,healthy,life,We study all day.,We like listening,to music.,We play,computer games for long.,We like reading,books.,We often play,Sports.,We go to KFC.,Sometimes we travel.,Sometimes we,stay up studying.,colorful,healthy,认真,审题,，,找出文章要表达的中心。,写作第一步,审,健康很重要。在学习和工作的压力日趋增大的今天，会休息的人才会有健康的身体。人们是如何度过假期的呢？国际健康组织对此作了一次调查，右图是他们此次的调查结果。根据你所得的信息，请为国际健康组织写一篇完整的调查报告,并提倡大家进行假日休闲。,审,travel,stay at home,visit friends or parents,work,用简单的句子或短语,列出,文章要点。,列,写作第二步,根据以下关键词及图表用简单的句子列出文章的要点,如何度假,调查报告,倡议假日休闲,stay at home,work,visit friends or parents,travel,A lot of people travel.,Some people stay at home.,Some other people visit friends or parents.,A few people work.,Enjoy your vacation.,列,A lot of people travel.,Some people stay at home.,Some other people visit friends,or parents.,A few people work.,How do people spend their vacation?We made a survey and here is our survey report,.,Come and enjoy your vacation.People who relax well work well.,a nice head,a nice tail,a nice body,加,加首尾,，使结构完整,。,可以采取,总分总,结构或者,总分,结构，开头或结尾的句子应注意简洁，漂亮。,写作第三步：,Second,we should keep quiet in the library.,First,we have to wear our uniforms to go to school,though most of us dont like them at all.,Every school has its own rules for students.We have many school rules to follow in our daily life.,Whats more,we ought to return books on time.,Our school rules are good for us,I will try me best to follow them.,Third,we must do lots of homework.,3 2 1 4 6 5,How do people spend their vacation?We made a survey and here is our survey report.,A lot of people travel.Some people stay at home.They watch TV or surf the internet.Some other people visit friends or parents.A few people work.,Come and enjoy your vacation.The people who relax well work well.,连,恰当运用,关联,词句，使得文章层次清晰，各个部分衔接自然。,写作第四步：,1.,表示并列或递进,:and,as well as,both,and,not only,but also,neither,nor;,2.,表示选择,:or,either,or;,3.,表示转折,:but,however,although,though,after all,4.,表示因果,:because,so,therefore,5.,表示条件,:if,unless,6.,表示对比,:instead,not,but,on the one hand,on the other hand;,7.,表示解释,:for example,for instance,such as,that is to say,in other words;,8.,表示顺序,:to begin with,firstly,first(of all),second(ly,),next,later,since then,from then on,finally,in the end;,9.,表示强调,:also,besides,what,s more,actually,in fact,10.,表示结论,:all in all,altogether,in a word,generally speaking,关联词,Lets play the game.,_ I am tired,I keep on working till midnight.,He didnt go to movies,he went to the concert _.,We like doing kinds of sports _ swimming,running and hiking.,_,he stood up.Then he got out._,he went back._,he smiled.,How do people spend their vacation?We made a survey and here is our survey report.,According to it,most people travel.,And,some people stay at home.,Also,some other people visit friends or parents.,However,a few people work.,Come and enjoy your vacation.People who relax well work well.,连,美,选好词句，,美化,文章。在有把握的情况下展示自己的语言功底。,写作第五步：,We interviewed people about the ways to spend the vacation and here is our survey report.,According to it,most people,choose to travel to get away from the busy world during the holidays.,Then some people like to stay at home,watching TV or surfing the Internet to have a good rest.,And to visit friends or parents,also makes them relaxed,.,However,a few people have to work.,Come and enjoy your vacation.People who relax well work well.,美,Skill One Make your sentences correct,Good,good,study,day,day,up.,We should do sports a week once.,Save the environment is our duty.,There is going to have a meeting today.,I hope I can come true my dream.,once a week,Saving,be,achieve,Skill Two Express in different ways,Our parents really wish us to,work hard,.,Our parents really wish us to,put our heart into study.,The teenagers,like,the computers.,The teenagers,are fond of,the computers.,We,shouldnt eat,junk food.,We should,stay away from,the junk food.,When he spoke,he got more excited,.,The more,he spoke,the more,excited he got.,We should learn English grammar,.,Its important to learn English grammar.,中考作文评分标准,第四档,(1215,分）覆盖所有内容要点。准确使用丰富的词汇和语言结构。全文结构紧凑，有效地使用了语句间的连接成份，符合英语交际习惯；具备较强的语言运用能力。,第三档,(811,分）覆盖所有内容要点。恰当使用较丰富的词汇和语言结构。适当运用了语句间的连接成份，较好地达到了交际的目的。,第二档,(47,分）没能覆盖所有内容要点。词汇和语言结构不能完全满足写作任务的要求。文章不够连贯，影响对写作内容的理解。,第一档,(03,分）漏掉较多内容要点或写的内容与规定任务无关。词汇和语言结构错误较多。内容不连贯，无法传达有效信息。,作文,试题回放（,2006,年上海市）,以“,I have a dream,”,为题写一篇不少于,60,个词的短文，标点符号不占格。,Sentence patterns for reference(,以下句型供参考）,My dream is to be/to do/to go,I enjoy/like/prefer,To make my dream come true,I,If,my dream comes true,I have a dream,Have you ever watched a bike racing?The riders are cool!Yeah,its my dream to be a professional bike rider.,I fell in love with bike rider for the first time I rode.Since that,Ive been riding for 5 years.Some peopl