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单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,Writing,DISCUSSION:,What is a good writing？,Content:everything needed included which is related to,your view.(内容要完整),Structure:,*Good beginning and ending(好的开头结尾),*Well organized and smoothly developed,(结构合理,行文流畅),Language:,*No Chinglish(避免中文式英文),*No Grammatical mistakes(没有语法错误),*With exactly used words and relatively changed sentence patterns,(词语的准确运用和句式的富于变化),Im very pleased to tell you the changes of my life since the reduction of learning load was brought in.,Before that,I was often exhausted at weekends.I attended school and had classes the whole day.In the evening，I was often forced to do my boring homework and I could not go to bed until 11:30.,Since,the program of reducing learning load was introduced,my life,however,has become much more interesting.I frequently pay a visit to museums,drop in at computer rooms and draw pictures in my leisure time.After lunch,I watch TV,read stories and look through newspapers to enrich myself.No longer do I stay up;,on the contrary,I go to bed at about 10 p.m.,In short,I am quite satisfied with my life now.,Structure,Enjoy the following paragraphs:,Now in the country areas,there are many children out of school.,The reasons can be listed as follow,.,_,most families are too poor to send their children to school._,they have no choice but to,stay at home and make money.,as a result;In addition;,To begin with;However,To begin with,As a result,使用恰当的连接词,Use proper linking words,_,some parents think there is no need for their daughters to go to school.,Therefore,they dont let them go to school.,_,some children are not interested in their studies._,some wouldnt like to go to school.,In my opinion;Finally;,To make matters worse;In addition,In addition,Finally,To make matters worse,As far as Im concerned,all the children including girls should be educated._,the whole society should put great emphasis on childrens education _ theyll play an important part in the future of our country one,day.,besides;However;because;Therefore,Besides,because,Avoid Chinglish!,1)Traffic in Shanghai is too crowded.,2)There has a highway connected with Beijing.,3)Though the transport is good，but it fades next to our natural resources.,4)I forgot my dictionary at home.,5)It will cost us much money to buy one.,Language,heavy.,left,is,take,改错,It built in the 1980s.,In our city,the public order is better than other places.,Buy a cellphone is too expensive.,The public order is very well.,At the last，I hope you can invest here.,The government is like investors to come here.,Let me introduce this city for you.,Thank you for you come.,I think you can happy.,To my surprised,my father agreed to buy one.,that of,good,likes,to,your coming,be,was,Buying,surprise,Language,改错,A lot of families are much more poor.,Im very happy I can write letter to you.,Some are not interest in lessons.,I think every child is equality.,Because of their parents dont have enough money.,I can keep touch with my family.,Some parents think go to school is not good.,Every child including girls should have the chance to accept education.,There are many families are poor.,Some parents in village think that girls are not important as well as boys.,very,interested,equal,going,receive,the,in,a,Language,Adopt a variety of sentence patterns,使用较丰富的句式,When he arrived,he gave me an e-mail,immediately.(,使用,V-,ing,形式,),2.Once it is seen,it can never be forgotten.(,过去分词,),_,he gave me an e-mail immediately.,When,arriving,/On his arrival,_,it can never be forgotten.,Once seen,3.To his surprise,the little girl knows so many things.(使用名词性从句),4.People suggest that the conference be,put off.(改被动语态),_the little girl knows so many things.,What,surprises him is that,_the conference be put off.,It is suggested that,5.He did not know what had happened,until he had read the news in the newspaper,.(使用强调句型),6.I passed the physics exam because of your help.(用虚拟语气）,_he had read the news in the newspaper _ he knew what had happened.,_the physics exam,_your help.,It,was,not,until,that,I couldnt have passed,but for,without,7.I wont believe what he says.(使用状语 从句),8.The girl is spoken highly of.Her composition was well written.(用定语从句),_he says,I wont believe.,The girl_,is spoken highly of.,No matter what,whose composition was well written,Whatever,9,.,If you study hard,you will make rapid progress.（用并列句）,10.He had no sooner come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad.(使用倒装句),_he come back from Beijing _he was sent abroad.,_make rapid progress.,Study,hard,and,youll,No sooner had,than,Hardly.when.,assess,Please learn to,Your composition,when you finish it from now.,书面表达评价表,项目 自评 他评,1.书写工整吗？有没有乱涂乱划?,2.句子开头注意大小写了吗?,3.有没有注意标点符号?,4将文章分段了吗?分成了几段?,5有单词拼写错误吗?几个?,6.有时态错误吗?误用了哪种时态?,7.注意主谓一致了吗?,8.有没有语态的错误?,9.有没有使用关联词?使用得当吗?,10.有没有词性的错误?哪一种?,11.简单句表达正确吗?,12.是否注意使用了复杂的句子结构?,13.表达方式是否多样化?注意长短句搭配了吗?,14.有没有用好词好句?用了哪些?,See you!,
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