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单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,初中英语写作训练,吕春燕,2019.5.9,中考英语,作文,评分标准,一档13-15分,包含,所有,要点，应用了,较丰富,的语言结构和词汇，用词准确、语法正确、句子通顺、行文连贯、表达清楚，具有,较强,的语言运用能力。,二档10-12 分,基本包含,所有要点，应用了,较丰富,的语言结构和词汇，句子较通顺，表达较清楚，但有,少量,错误。,三档7-9分,内容包含了,多数,要点，语言表达过于,简单,，句子,不够,通顺，有部分语言错误，基本上不影响总体理解。,四档4-6分,只包含了,少数,要点，语言不规范，句子无条理，行文不连贯，语言错误严重，影响理解。,五档,1,-3分,只写出与要求的内容相关的一些,信息词语,，语言,错误多,。,六,档,0,分,空白,Alice is my a best friend,she come from,Canada.she is very tall,hair is very long,he,like sports.but I dont know if does she like,swim?,She likes chinese,and she do well in,it,we all very like she.,去掉,comes,She,her,she,likes,去掉,likes,swimming,Chinese,does,去掉,her,very much,For example,How,can we write a,good,composition?,审,列,连,加,查,誊,书面表达六步法,。,审：认真审题，找出文章要表达的中心及要求。,书面表达第一步：审,节约资源,保护环境,从我们身边的小事做起。Li Ming 是一个注重“低碳”生活的中学生，假设你是他,请以“My Low-carbon Life”为题，写一篇80词左右的短文，简单描述自己的“低碳生活”。,要点：,(,1,),每天步行上学,;(,2),离开教室时，关灯、电扇、电视等；,（,3,）不用水时，记得关水龙头，循环使用水；,（,4,）充分使用纸张（,5,）不使用塑料袋。,参考词：,on foot,turn off,tap(,水龙头,),reuse,make full use of,plastic bag,写作要求：（1）内容包括所提供的信息及要点，可适当发挥，但不要逐条翻译；（2）不得透露考生姓名、学校等信息。,文章中心,:,我叫李明,(,全部考生都叫李明,),，我的低碳生活,要求,:,1.,80词左右,2.,写作要求,(1)(2),列：,用简单的句子和短语列出文章的要点,.,书面表达第二步：列,(,1,),每天步行上学,I go to school on foot every day./I walk to school every day.,(,2),离开教室时，关灯、电扇、电视等,remember to turn off the lights,the TV and the fans,（,3,）不用水时，记得关水龙头，循环使用水；,turn off the tap.reuse water,（,4,）充分使用纸张。,I make full use of paper,（,5,）不使用塑料袋,Dont use plastic bags,I go to school on foot every day./I walk to school every day.,2.I always remember to turn off the lights,the TV and the fans when I leave the classroom.,3.When I am not using water,I always,turn off the tap.I often,reuse water.,for example,when I finish washing the clothes,I use the water to clean the floor and water flowers.,4.I think saving paper is necessary,so,I make full use of paper.,5.,I use cloth bags,instead of plastic bags,when I go shopping,.,为了,衔接紧密,和,避免逐条翻译的嫌疑,，可,以在适当的地方添加事例或紧密相连的话,然后连成句。,连：恰当运用连接词，使文章层次清晰，各部分衔接自然。,书面表达第三步：连,1.,When,I am not using water,I always,turn,off the tap.I often,reuse water.,for example,when,I finish washing the clothes,I use the,water to clean the floor and water flowers,。,2,.I think,saving paper is necessary,so,I make full use of paper,加：加首尾，使文章结构完整。可以采用,总分总，分总,结构。开头和结尾应注意简洁，漂亮，最好采用开门见山的形式，结尾应注意与题目或开头相呼应，并且要扣题有力。,书面表达第四步：加,My name is Li Ming.I am a middle school,student.,I like having a low-carbon life.,结尾：,Its important for us to protect the,environment.,Its important for us to live a low-carbon,life to protect the environment.,开头：,（比较）,查：,检查,1,格式,是否正确,2,词汇,是否用对,3,是否符合,英语习惯表达,4,时态,是否正确,5,用,主动语态,好还是用,被动语态,好,6,标点,是否用对,7,人称,是否用对,8,主谓,是否一致,9.,名词的,单复数,等,书面表达第五步：查,誊：誊写。将检查后的作文整洁 地抄写在横线上,注意：,横线就是我们英语作业本的第三条线（基准线），小写字母 都要穿过这条线。,卷面整洁不一定加分，,卷面潦草一定要扣分,。,书面表达第六步：誊,f/g/j/p/q/y,My,name is Li Ming.I am a middle school student.,I like having a low-carbon life.,I go to school on foot every day.I always remember,to turn off the lights,the TV and the fans,when I,leave the classroom.When I am not using water,I,always turn off the tap.I often reuse water,for,example,when I finish washing the clothes,I use the,water to clean the floor and water flowers.I never use,plastic bags so I often make full use of paper.,I think saving paper is necessary,Its important for us to live a low-carbon life to protect the environment.,a nice head(,总,),a,nice,body,（分）,a nice tail,（总）,在你的成长过程中，许多人、许多事一直陪伴着你，支持着你，温暖着你，感动着你。请你以,”Say thanks to_”,为题写一篇短文。,写出要感谢的,对象,，,原因,及,感激语言。,语言表达流畅、准确。,词数,70,个左右，书写规范，不得出现真实姓名等。,文章中心内容及要求,:,1,、对象、原因、感激的语言。,2,、人称（,shehe,）,3,、时态（一般时、过去时、将来时）,书面表达第一步：审,主体内容：感谢的原因,Why,to say thanks?,My mother is very kind and nice to me.,She,takes an umbrella to me,She,looks after me carefully,She,encourages me,She,helps me,She,takes good care of me,.,She,cooks breakfast for me,书面表达第二步：列,主体内容：感谢的原因,Why,to say thanks?,My mother is very kind and nice to me.,She gets up early,to,She takes an umbrella to me,Sometimes She when it rains,She looks after me carefully,She encourages me,She helps me,She takes good care of me,.,cook breakfast for me,Every time I want to give up,When I meet trouble,When I am ill,书面表达第三步：连,开头：感谢谁,我的妈妈,I,will,finish my junior middle school soon.I want to thank a lot of people.They,always helps,me during my growing up.but I really want to say thanks to my mother.,Say thanks to my mother,书面表达第四步：加,结尾：感谢的言语,To say thanks to my mother?,I,will,go to senior high school in two months.I really want to say I love her very much.Thank you my mother,Thank you for,looking after me.,Thank you,for helping me.,Thank you for,encouraging me.,.,I will study harder in return(,回报,),。,书面表达第四步：加,主体内容：感谢的原因,Why,to say thanks?,My mother is very kind and nice to me.,She always takes good care of me.She gets up early to cook breakfast for me.Sometimes She takes an umbrella to me,when,it rains.,When,I am ill,she looks after me,carefully.She often helps me,When,I meet trouble.Every time I want to give up,she always encourages me to stand up,again.,书面表达第五步：查,I wi
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