虚拟语气在写作中的提分技巧作文练习评讲解析ppt课件

单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,欣赏下列两个语段，并指出它们的技巧,1.,Brief as the passage is, it still,arouses my endless imagination to,the past time.,Were I in the past, I would like that I stayed,in Britain in the 19th century,where and when,the Revolution of Industry was,flourishing,.,With the inspiring atmosphere of the creative times,I would try,my,utmost,to do my,favorite,scientific experiment,since,I have great interest in science.,Whats more,the scientific lovers would be invited to,join my little club to invent some brand-new inventions and,create,new designs of our daily lifes,products,cooperating,to put the,theory,we learned from books to our practical life.,In this way,I could get,inspiration of wisdom,and,resourcefulness,to,bring convenience and improvements to,our life.,欣赏下列两个语段，并指出它们的技巧,1,2.,Should I be given,the,opportunities,to travel to the past,I would like to,go back to Qing Dynasty of early 20th century,when,China was,in a disaster,.,Were I back in,the late Qing Dynasty,I would,make every endeavor,to,rescue,China,from,the foreign invaders and,prevent,it,from,be,ing,bullied,without,resistance,.,Firstly,I would teach,my,modern theory,and,knowledge,to the governors,instructing,them to,fight against,the enemies and,construct,powerful armies.,Secondly,all the citizens would be called on,to unite together and,resist,other countries,invasion,bravely.,Whats more, joining some,anti-invaders,parties,would also be,my choice.,2. Should I be given the oppo,2,亮点句型写作指导,除了虚拟语气外，有许多亮点句型可以应用到写作中，增分添彩。,亮点句型写作指导除了虚拟语气外，有许多亮点句型可以应用到写作,3,比喻,A is to B,what,C is to D.,Like,the sunshine , kindness can help,those in trouble,.,Kindness,is like,the lighthouse,which can,direct the way for,those who,are in dim situation.,比喻A is to B what C is to D.,4,排比,If I could,go back to,the past and do the above mentioned things,the last thing my grandpa remembered would not be,the indifference and the back of his beloved grandson.,If I could,travel back through time,the last memory between him and me would not be,his closed eyes and the dead look of half-unconscious suffering. Then now,I would not have to,live with this unbearable regret and pain for the rest of my life.,If only I could,!,排比,5,倒装（赢在写作 P37-38）,Simple as the story is ,Here goes the saying that _.,Only when _ can we _.,Only in this way, can we,Only by doing -, can we_.,Only after doing sth, can we,On the west of the school lies a pond, where many fish are swimming.,Under no circumstance should we -,类似的用法：,Never/ By no means / on no account / in no way / at no time should I .,Hardly/scarcely had I got into the room when it began to rain.( no sooner， than),倒装（赢在写作 P37-38）Simple as the s,6,Had it not been for,her sticking to being on time,she wouldnt have earned herself,a well-paid job and more importantly built up an image of reliability and integrity.,倒装,Should I be given,the opportunities to travel to the past,I would like to,go back to Qing Dynasty of early 20th century when China was in a disaster.,Were I back in,the late Qing Dynasty,I would make,every endeavor to rescue China from the foreign invaders and prevent it from being bullied without resistance.,Had it not been for her st,7,亮点写作的注意事项,1. 过多的亮点，显得堆砌,对策：亮点分布，尽量首句,2.亮点单一，例如全段排比或比喻,对策：最好总排比-总的结构。照顾段落的完整性。,3.华而不实，不重视内容，徒有框架没有内容,对策：先想内容，再想修辞手法,4. 过多注重运用亮点，没有注意谋篇，顾此失彼,对策：谋好篇，定好每点行数，才能下笔,亮点写作的注意事项1. 过多的亮点，显得堆砌,8,亮点句型写作训练,练习：,1.说明挫折的意义,2.你怎样看待老师对学生的影响。,3.说说你对母爱的理解,4.谈谈决心对人的影响,亮点句型写作训练,9,使用虚拟语气写作的注意事项：,1.确定到底要不要“虚”？,2.确定到底使用哪个时态的“虚”？,3.所谓“一虚到底”，其实是指在该假设情境中的虚拟的时态的一致性。而非一定是通段都使用虚拟！一切要看情况进行选用。,使用虚拟语气写作的注意事项：,10,说说挫折的意义,1.,Hard and painful as frustration is,it is of significance in our life.,As the old saying goes, “storm makes trees take deeper roots”,without frustration,never could we,grow up as a,strong-willed,person.,Were we surrounded by,over-praise,and immersed in the pride and happiness,frustration would be,a timely alarm,urging,us not to stop at the so-called peak and continue your pace of pursuit.,Were we confronted with,obstacles,frustration could be,a philosophers stone（魔法石）,with which,we could,transform,the,temporary setbacks,to great,opportunities,to become stronger,In a word,life is,not only,about,how to,live through the storm,but also,how to,dance in the rain,.,说说挫折的意义1. Hard and painful,11,说说挫折的意义,2.,Never can we emphasize the significance of setback,too much,.,Without setback, our life would be,a rose lacking fragrance,.,Without setback, our life would be,a voyage lacking direction,.,It is no exaggeration to say that,frustration has sown the seed of maturity and self-development in my inner heart,and has made it possible for me to,achieve great success,.,说说挫折的意义2. Never can we emph,12,老师对学生的影响,1.,Suppose that,teachers were absent in our life, students life,would be,a picture,with,intense darkness,.,Without teachers,the laborious engineers of our soul, students,personalities,and,characters,would not be,shaped.,Without teachers,the ladder with selfless devotion, our heart,would not be,lifted up by,encouragement,and grow,mature,.,Without teachers,the sparkling lighthouse in the ocean of knowledge,never could,teenagers find,access to,the,successful,life,in the future,.,老师对学生的影响 1. Suppose that te,13,老师对学生的影响,2.,Without,the patient and careful,teachers,never could students,grow from a childish and,dependent,child into a,mature,and,independent,adult.,Without,the,selfless,and,affectionate,preaching of teachers,never could students,step onto a path with a bright and promising future,.,Without,the,knowledgeable,teachers,never would students,master,the necessary knowledge and devote them to,the construction of a more harmonious society and country,.,老师对学生的影响2. Without the patient,14,母爱的理解,1.,Without,maternal affection,we would,change from fragrant flowers into weeds,abandoned by,others,without,a shelter and care.,Without,this ever-lasting emotion,never would we,live as full and rich a life as other children,surrounded by,merriment,and happiness.,母爱的理解1. Without maternal affec,15,母爱的理解,2.,Maternal love is like a circle.,It has no beginning and no ending.,But for,motherhood,we would be,the little strayed lambs,who,step on the mistaken track.,But for,motherhood,never can we,be enveloped in warmth and merriment by,a patch of sunlight,.,But for,motherhood,we could be,overwhelmed,by endless darkness,and the world would,fade from colorful and wonderful to dim and cold,.,母爱的理解2. Maternal love is like,16,决心的影响,1.,Determination,is,the fuel of ships,without which,never could we,arrive at,the shore of success,.,Determination is the walking stick of the climbers,without which, never could we,reach,the peak of,life. Determination is,the very condition,without which, never could we,get rid of the dark depth of depression,.,决心的影响1. Determination is the f,17,决心的影响,2.,Without,the,firm determination,never could,individuals,grow into,strong trees struggl,ing,in the wind and rain,.,Without,the,steadfast,mind,never could,teams unite together to,create miracle,.,Without,the,unswerving resolution,never could,countries unite and fight for the,flourishing and bright future,as well as,a harmonious world.,决心的影响2. Without the firm deter,18,虚拟语气在写作中的提分技巧作文练习评讲解析ppt课件,19,说说挫折的意义,1.,Hard and painful as frustration is,（倒装）,it is of significance in our life.,As the old saying goes, “storm makes trees take deeper roots”,（名言）,without frustration,never could we,grow up as a,strong-willed,person.,（虚拟）,Were we surrounded by,over-praise,and immersed in the pride and happiness,frustration would be,a timely alarm,urging,us not to stop at the so-called peak and continue your pace of pursuit.,Were we confronted with,obstacles,frustration could be,a philosophers stone（魔法石）,with which,we could,transform,the,temporary setbacks,to great,opportunities,to become stronger,.(虚拟+排比+非限制性定从),In a word,life is,not only,about,how to,live through the storm,but also,how to,dance in the rain,.(总结部分可以用现在时),说说挫折的意义1. Hard and painful,20,说说挫折的意义,2.,Never can we emphasize the significance of setback,too much,.,(倒装),Without setback, our life would be,a rose lacking fragrance,.,Without setback, our life would be,a voyage lacking direction,.,It is no exaggeration to say that,frustration has sown the seed of maturity and self-development in my inner heart,and has made it possible for me to,achieve great success,.,（虚拟反说+比喻+排比）,说说挫折的意义2. Never can we emph,21,老师对学生的影响,1.,Suppose that,teachers were absent in our life, students life,would be,a picture,with,intense darkness,.,Without teachers,the laborious engineers of our soul, students,personalities,and,characters,would not be,shaped.,Without teachers,the ladder with selfless devotion, our heart,would not be,lifted up by,encouragement,and grow,mature,.,Without teachers,the sparkling lighthouse in the ocean of knowledge,never could,teenagers find,access to,the,successful,life,in the future,.,（虚拟反说+排比）,老师对学生的影响 1. Suppose that te,22,老师对学生的影响,2.,Without,the patient and careful,teachers,never could students,grow from a childish and,dependent,child into a,mature,and,independent,adult.,Without,the,selfless,and,affectionate,preaching of teachers,never could students,step onto a path with a bright and promising future,.,Without,the,knowledgeable,teachers,never would students,master,the necessary knowledge and devote them to,the construction of a more harmonious society and country,.,（虚拟反说+排比）,老师对学生的影响2. Without the patient,23,母爱的理解,1.,Without,maternal affection,we would,change from fragrant flowers into weeds,abandoned by,others,without,a shelter and care.,Without,this ever-lasting emotion,never would we,live as full and rich a life as other children,surrounded by,merriment,and happiness.,（虚拟反说+排比）,母爱的理解1. Without maternal affec,24,母爱的理解,2.,Maternal love is like a circle.,It has no beginning and no ending.,（比喻，多一句进行补充说明，使得比喻更具体形象）,But for,motherhood,we would be,the little strayed lambs,who,step on the mistaken track.,But for,motherhood,never can we,be enveloped in warmth and merriment by,a patch of sunlight,.,But for,motherhood,we could be,overwhelmed,by endless darkness,and the world would,fade from colorful and wonderful to dim and cold,.,（虚拟+比喻+排比）,母爱的理解2. Maternal love is like,25,决心的影响,1.,Determination,is,the fuel of ships,without which,never could we,arrive at,the shore of success,.,Determination is the walking stick of the climbers,without which, never could we,reach,the peak of,life. Determination is,the very condition,without which, never could we,get rid of the dark depth of depression,.,（先总说比喻决心像，再用非限制性定从+虚拟反说进行论证，还采用了排比的手法）,决心的影响1. Determination is the f,26,决心的影响,2.,Without,the,firm determination,never could,individuals,grow into,strong trees struggl,ing,in the wind and rain,.,Without,the,steadfast,mind,never could,teams unite together to,create miracle,.,Without,the,unswerving resolution,never could,countries unite and fight for the,flourishing and bright future,as well as,a harmonious world.,(虚拟排比递进：个人团队-国家),决心的影响2. Without the firm deter,27,