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单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,writing,writing,Writing points,完成审题 确定文体 抓住要点,组织语言,书写修改,Writing points,“,中小学生健康,”,为话题写一篇短文,【,要求,】,(1),内容包括列举中小学生面临的健康问题。 请谈谈怎样才能保持健康。,(2),字数:,60-80,词。,(3),短文中不得出现你的真实姓名、学校名和地名。,“中小学生健康 ”为话题写一篇短文,Topic -,health,1. What,are,healthy,problems of middle school students?,2. How,can,students,keep,healthy?,Topic -health1. Whata,How to keep Healthy ?,Everyone wants to keep healthy today, especially our students. But we dont pay attention to our health. Some of them,go to school without breakfast in the morning,. Some students and pupils,play computer games or watch TV all day, especially at the weekends. Many boys think it is cool to,drink or smoke,.,It is important for us to have good habits. We should,eat breakfast every morning,. We can,watch TV or play games for a short time, then,have a rest,. We also can,take part in some clubs,. I think it is necessary for us to keep healthy.,初中英语作文教学课件,开头,1.,关于,人们有不同的观点。一些人认为,Therearedifferentopinionsamongpeopleasto_.Somepeoplesuggestthat_.,2.,俗话说(常言道),,它是我们前辈的经历,但是,即使在今天,它在许多场合仍然适用。,Thereisanoldsaying_.Itstheexperienceofourforefathers,,,however,,,itiscorrectinmanycaseseventoday.,3.,现在,,,它们给我们的日常生活带来了许多危害。首先,,;其次,,。更为糟糕的是,。,Today,_,whichhavebroughtalotofharmsinourdailylife.First,_Second,_.Whatmakesthingsworseisthat_.,4.,现在,,很普遍,许多人喜欢,,因为,,另外(而且),。,Nowadays,,,itiscommonto_.Manypeoplelike_because_.Besides,,,_.,5.,任何事物都是有两面性,,也不例外。它既有有利的一面,也有不利的一面。,Everythinghastwosidesand_isnotanexception,,,ithasbothadvantagesanddisadvantages.,6.,关于,人们的观点各不相同,一些人认为(说),,在他们看来,,Peoplesopinionsabout_varyfrompersontoperson.Somepeoplesaythat_.Tothem,_.,结尾,1.,自然结尾,点明主题,随着文章的结束,文章自然而然地结尾。如“,Helping the Policeman (,帮助警察,)”,的结尾可以是:,The two children were praised by the police and they felt happy.,再如“,The,Tortoise,and the Hare(,龟兔赛跑,)”,的结尾可以是:,When the hare got to the tree, the tortoise had already been there,。,2.,首尾呼应,升华主题,在文章的结尾可以用含义较深的话点明主题,深化主题,起到“画龙点睛”的效果。如“,I Love My Hometown(,我爱家乡,)”,的结尾可以是:,I love my hometown, and I am proud of it.,3.,反问结尾,引起深思,这种方式的结尾虽然形式是问句,但意义却是肯定的,而且具有一定的强调作用,可引起他人的深思。如 “,Learning English can give us a lot of pleasure (,学英语能为我们带来许多乐趣,)”,的结尾可以是:,If we learn English well, we can Dont you think learning English is great fun?,4.,表达祝愿,阐述愿望,这种方式的结尾常出现在书信或演讲稿的文体中,表示对他人的祝福或对将来的展望等。如“,A Letter to the Farmers(,给农民们的一封信,)”,的结尾可以是:,I hope the farmers life will be better and better.,另外,书信的结尾常有以下形式的祝福语:,Best wishes;I wish you a merry Christmas and a happy new year;I wish you have a good time,等。,结尾,连接词,(,1,)表选择关系或对等关系的连接词:,either,or,,,neither,nor,or,as,well,as,and,both,and,.,(,2,)表因果关系或对等关系的连接词:,therefore,so,as,a,result,as,the,result,of,,,because,of,due,to,owing,to,thanks,to,等,.,(,3,)表时间顺序的连接词:,the,moment,as,soon,as,at,first,then,later,meanwhile,at,the,beginning,in,the,end,before,long,for,the,first,(,second,),time,the,minute,等,.,(,4,)表转折关系的连接词:,yet,and,yet,but,while,on,the,contrary,on,the,other,hand,however,at,the,same,time,(然而)等,.,(,5,)表解释说明的连接词:,that,is,that,is,to,say,in,other,words,such,as,for,instance,and,so,on,etc.,and,the,like,等,.,(,6,)表递进关系的连接词:,not,only,but,(also),what,s,more,what,s,worse,besides,in,addition,worse,still,moreover,above,all,等,.,(,7,)表示总结的连接词:,in,a,word,on,the,whole,in,short,briefly,in,brief,to,sum,up,in,all,等,.,(8),表示空间顺序的连词,如,on,the,right/left,to,the,right/left,of,on,one,side,of.,in,the,middle/center,of,等,.,初中英语作文教学课件,错误修改,一、“汉语式”英语,例:,His fathers body is strong.,他父亲身体很好。,析:汉语说“某人的身体强弱”时,在英语中不必加,body,。因此,在书面表达中要注意英语的习惯用法,否则容易杜撰出“汉语式”英语,使人难以看懂。同时不能先想汉语意思,然后再直译成英语,而要擅于直接用英语思考。,正:,His father is strong.,错误修改,二、难词解释,例:,the time fell sleeping,就寝时间,析:同学们遇到要表达的术语有难词时,想不到用合适的单词来表达,于是就闹出了这样的笑话。因此,在平时学习中学生们就要知难而进,想方设法记忆必要的单词,同时增强解释的能力,只有这样才能提高英语书面表达能力。,正:,the sleeping time,二、难词解释,三、单词堆砌,例:,Our go to school time is 8,:,00.,上学时间是,8,:,00,。析:同学们在书面表达中应尽量使用自己熟悉且有把握的习惯用语,不能凭着自己的中文习惯主观臆造句子,否则不可能做到,“,语言准确,得当,”,。,正:,We go to school at eight.,三、单词堆砌,四、时态的误用,例:,She like it very much and reads it to the class.,她很喜欢它并且读给同学们听。,析:在书面表达中,应根据上下文或时间状语来确定动词的时态。,正:,She liked it very much and read it to the class.,四、时态的误用,五、用词错误,例:,He gave me a very good advice yesterday.,昨天他给我一个非常好的建议。,析:,advice,表示,“,建议,”,时,是不可数名词,不能用不定冠词来修饰,而应用,a piece of,。,正:,He gave me a piece of very good advice yesterday.,五、用词错误,六、一致性错误,所谓不一致不仅指主谓不一致,它还包括数的不一致、时态不一致以及代词不一致等。,例,1,:,Once one have money,,,he can do what he want to do.,人一旦有了钱,他就能想干什么就干什么。,析:,one,是第三人称单数,因此本句的,have,应改为,has,。同理,,want,应改为,wants,。,正:,Once one has money,,,he can do what he wants to do.,例,2,:,Water will boil at 100.,水在,100,沸腾。,析:表示客观真理的句子,其谓语动词应用一般现在时。,正:,Water boils at 100.,六、一致性错误,七、修饰语错位,英语与汉语不同,同一个修饰语置于句子中不同的位置,句子的含义就有可能发生变化。,例:,I can dance. I too can sing.,我会跳舞,也会唱歌。,析:,too,一般位于句尾,不能用于句首。,正:,I can dance. I can sing too.,或,I can dance and sing too.,七、修饰语错位,八、结构不完整,在口语中,交际可借助手势、语气、上下文等来理解结构不完整的句子。可是书面语就不同了,句子结构不完整会令句意表达不清。这种情况常常发生在主句写完以后,作者又想加些补充说明的时候。,例:,There are many ways to know the society. For example,,,by TV radio,,,newspaper and so on.,有许多方式来了解这个社会,例如通过电视、广播、报纸等等。,析:本句后半部分,For example,,,by TV,,,radio,,,newspaper and so on,不是一个完整的句子,仅仅是一些不连贯的词语,不能独立成句。,正:,There are many ways to know the society,,,for example,,,by TV,,,radio,,,and newspaper and so on.,八、结构不完整,九、悬垂修饰语,所谓悬垂修饰语是指句首的短语与后面句子逻辑关系混乱不清。,例:,At the age of ten,,,my grandfather died.,在我,10,岁时,我祖父去世了。,析:,at the age of ten,只指出,10,岁时祖父去世了,但没有说明是,“,谁,”,10,岁时。按一般的推理不可能是,my grandfather,。,正:,When I was at the age of ten,,,my grandfather died.,九、悬垂修饰语,十、词性误用,“,词性误用,”,常表现为:介词当动词用,形容词当副词用,名词当动词用等。,例,1,:,Few people can around the world.,很少人能周游世界。,析:,around,是副词,这里误当动词用。,正:,Few people can travel around the world.,例,2,:,The place is danger.,这个地方危险。,析:,danger,是名词,这里误用为形容词。,正:,The place is dangerous.,或,The place is in danger.,十、词性误用,十一、指代不清,指代不清主要指代词与被指代的人或物关系不清,或者先后所用的代词不一致。,例,1,:,Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted her to be her bridesmaid.,玛丽和我姐姐很要好,因为她要她做她的伴娘。,析:此句让读者无法判断两位姑娘中谁将结婚,谁将当伴娘。,正:,Mary was friendly to my sister because she wanted my sister to be her bridesmaid.,例,2,:,Help yourself to some drink,,,boys and girls.,孩子们,随便喝些饮料吧。,析:句中的,boys and girls,和反身代词,yourself,指代不一致。正:,Help yourselves to some drink,,,boys and girls.,十一、指代不清,十二、间断句子,我们不能把两个或两个以上的句子简单地连结起来,应注意连结时应加上适当的词。,例:,There are many ways we get to know the outside world.,我们有许多方式来认识外面的世界。,析:这个句子包含了两层意思:,There are many ways,以及,we get to know the outside world,,简单地把它们连在一起就不妥当了。,正:,There are many ways for us to get to know the outside world.,十二、间断句子,十三、累赘,语言以简洁为贵。能用单词的不用词组;能用词组的不用从句或句子。,例:,Except the fact that he is lazy,,,I like him.,除了他很懒外,我喜欢他。,析:本句中的,the fact that he is lazy,是同位语从句,我们按照上述,“,能用词组的不用从句,”,的原则可以将其改写为:,正:,Except his laziness,,,I like him.,十三、累赘,十四、不连贯,不连贯是指一个句子前言不对后语,或是结构上不畅通。,例:,The fresh water,,,it is the most important things of the earth.,淡水是世界上最重要的东西。,析:,The fresh water,与逗号后面的,it,不连贯,同时,it,与,things,在数方面不一致。,正:,The fresh water is the most important thing in the world.,十四、不连贯,十五、综合性语言错误,大写字母,拼写,主位一致,句子结构,动词时态,标点,冠词,名词单复数,十五、综合性语言错误,初中英语作文教学课件,激励学生学习的名言警句,1,、聪明的人有长的耳朵和短的舌头。,弗莱格,2,、重复是学习之母。,狄慈根,3,、当你还不能对自己说今天学到了什么东西时,你就不要去睡觉。,利希顿堡,4,、人天天都学到一点东西,而往往所学到的是发现昨日学到的是错的。,B.V,5,、学到很多东西的诀窍,就是一下子不要学很多。,洛 克,6,、学问是异常珍贵的东西,从任何源泉吸收都不可耻。,阿卜,日,法拉兹,7,、学习是劳动,是充满思想的劳动。,乌申斯基,8,、聪明出于勤奋,天才在于积累 华罗庚,9,、好学而不勤问非真好学者。,10,、书山有路勤为径,学海无涯苦作舟。,11,、人的大脑和肢体一样,多用则灵,不用则废 茅以升,12,、你想成为幸福的人吗?但愿你首先学会吃得起苦 屠格涅夫,13,、成功艰苦劳动正确方法少说空话 爱因斯坦,14,、不经历风雨,怎能见彩虹 真心英雄,15,、只有登上山顶,才能看到那边的风光。,16,只会幻想而不行动的人,永远也体会不到收获果实时的喜悦。,17,、勤奋是你生命的密码,能译出你一部壮丽的史诗。,18,暗自伤心,不如立即行动,19,挫折时,要像大树一样,被砍了,还能再长;也要像杂草一样,虽让人践踏,但还能勇敢地活下去,20,随随便便浪费的时间,再也不能赢回来,21,成功是优点的发挥,失败,是缺点的积累,激励学生学习的名言警句,
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