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WRITING 学校一日生活 美国中学生Jeff将要来你所在的红星中学体验生活 学习中文 假设你是李华 请给Jeff写一封信 按照下图顺序介绍他在学校一天的安排 注意 1 信的开头已为你写好 2 词数不少60 1 2 3 4 Keypoints GotoschoolbybikeHaveChineseclassHavelunchinthedining roomHavesportsintheafternoon WaysofgoingtoschoolHavingclassesLunchtimeandbreaksActivities Evaluation 1 是否覆盖了内容要点 2 是否运用的句式和词汇基本 能够满足任务要求 3 是否语法和用词方面有一些错误 但不影响理解 Mark Correct Ifyouwanttowriteagoodpassage youshould Givefulldetails Useproperconjunctionsandconjunctsentences 第二档 15 17分 完全完成了试题规定的任务 覆盖了所有内容要点 运用的句式和词汇能满足任务的要求 语法和用词基本准确 少许错误主要为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致 使用了简单的语句间连接成分 所写内容连贯 达到了预期的写作目的 Enrich Improve Ihavepreparedaroomforyouinmyhouse Ourschoolisquiteclosetomyhouse sowecangotoschooltogetherbybike Thefirstclassbeginsat9o clock WewilllearnChineseuntil11 30 Icanhelpyouwhenyouhavedifficulty Atnoonwewillhavelunchinthedining room TherearemanykindsofChinesefood I msureyouwillloveit What smore youcanmakemorefriendsandtalkwiththemwhileyouareenjoyingyourlunch Possibleversion 1 2 3 Body Intheafternoon wecanhavefunwithourclassmatesintheplayground Ifyoulike wecanplaybasketball footballortable tennis Also thereisaswimmingpoolinourschool Wecangoswimmingaswell Ifyouhaveanyquestions pleaseletmeknow Iwilltrymybesttomakeyourselfathome 4 Ending Ihavepreparedaroomforyouinmyhouse Ourschoolisquiteclosetomyhouse sowecangotoschooltogetherbybike Thefirstclassbeginsat9o clock WewilllearnChineseuntil11 30 Icanhelpyouwhenyouhavedifficulty Atnoonwewillhavelunchinthedining room TherearemanykindsofChinesefood I msureyouwillloveit What smore youcanmakemorefriendsandtalkwiththemwhileyouareenjoyingyourlunch Possibleversion 1 2 3 Body Intheafternoon wecanhavefunwithourclassmatesintheplayground Ifyoulike wecanplaybasketball footballortable tennis Also thereisaswimmingpoolinourschool Wecangoswimmingaswell Ifyouhaveanyquestions pleaseletmeknow Iwilltrymybesttomakeyourselfathome 4 Ending WRITING 学校一日生活讲评 时间顺序及其表达 记叙文 学校一日生活 Youwillgotoschoolbybikewithmeinthemorning WewilllearnChinesetogetherfrom9to11 30a m Wewillhavelunchinthediningroom YoucanmakemorefriendswhileyouareenjoyingtastyChinesefood Youcandoavarietyofsportsintheplayground I msureyouwillloveourschool Youwillgotoschoolbybikewithmeinthemorning WewilllearnChinesetogetherfrom9to11 30a m Wewillhavelunchinthediningroom YoucanmakemorefriendswhileyouareenjoyingtastyChinesefood Youcandoavarietyofsportsintheplayground I msureyouwillloveourschool Afterthat then also afterclass afterlunch inthemorning atnoon intheafternoonFrom9to11 30a m Asforlunch Duringlunchtime Afterabusydayofstudy Whenyoufinishyourstudy Besides Inthemeanwhile Practice OursocialpracticeonfarmLastThursday we开班会讨论wheretogoforsocialpractice We提出几种方案suchashelpingtheold clearingtheboardsatbusstops andvisitingafarm Wedecidedtovisitafarm We很早在校门口集合and出发 Thefarmers热情地欢迎我们 Theheadofthefarmshowedusaround Howgladweweretoseethecropsandvegetablesgrowingwell Wehadapicniclunchinthesunshine We玩得很开心singing dancingandtellingjokesorstories Twoofusevenplayedagameofchess Wehadtosaygoodbyetotheworkers Keys heldaclassmeetingtodiscusscameupwithseveralchoicesmetattheschoolgateandsetoffgaveusawarmwelcomehadgreatfun hadagreattime Coherence 连贯性 OursocialpracticeonfarmLastThursday we开班会讨论wheretogoforsocialpractice We提出几种方案suchashelpingtheold clearingtheboardsatbusstops andvisitingafarm Wedecidedtovisitafarm 1 We很早在校门口集合and出发 Thefarmers热情地欢迎我们 Theheadofthefarmshowedusaround Howgladweweretoseethecropsandvegetablesgrowingwell Wehadapicniclunchinthesunshine We玩得很开心singing dancingandtellingjokesorstories Twoofusevenplayedagameofchess Wehadtosaygoodbyetotheworkers 2 3 4 5 6 7 OursocialpracticeonfarmLastThursday we开班会讨论wheretogoforsocialpractice We提出几种方案suchashelpingtheold clearingtheboardsatbusstops andvisitingafarm wedecidedtovisitafarm Thenextday we很早在校门口集合and出发soon thefarmers热情地欢迎我们 theheadofthefarmshowedusaround Howgladweweretoseethecropsandvegetablesgrowingwell wehadapicniclunchinthesunshine we很开心singing dancingandtellingjokesorstories Twoofusevenplayedagameofchess wehadtosaygoodbyetotheworkers Themomentwearrived Onourarrival thefarmersgaveusawarmwelcomeThentheheadofthefarmshowedusaroundAtnoonwehadapicniclunchAfterashortrestwehadgreatfunsingingTimepassedquickly TimeflewBeforeweknewit wehadtosaygoodbyetotheworkers Goodexpressions 记叙文 学校一日生活 1 It sonly5minutes ridefrommyhousetoschool soeverydaywegotoschoolbybike 黄琳玥Itisagoodchancetoenjoythescenery 韩昳琳It salsoagoodwaytobuildupourbody 安迪欣 1 bybike ThemorninginBeijingisverywonderfulwithcleanairandwarmsunshine So onyourwaytoschoolyoucanrelaxyourselfandpreparedforthenewday 曹洪宇Itisaconvenientwaytoschoolandalsohelpsuskeepfit 刘京 2 You llhaveChineseclasswhichistaughtbyaveryexperiencedteacherfrom9to11 30a m 李春光Theteacherisverykindtostudents Shecanhelpyouwhenyouhavedifficulty 崔旭郭冬梅Andyoucancommunicatewithmyclassmateswhoareverykind 2 Youwillhavetwoandahalfhourstolearnthebeautifullanguagewithus Allofourteachersarelearnedandpatient SoyouaresuretomakegreatprogressinChinese 康丽Hereyou lllearnmoreaboutChineseandhaveabetterideaofChineseculture 黄琳玥高雅坤 3 Youcanchoosewhateveryouliketoeatandchatwithmanynewfriends 马艺琳Itisagoodtimetomakesomenewfriendsandchatwiththem 王嘉琳刘彦强IthinkyouwilllikethedeliciousChinesefoodthereandalsoenjoytalkingwithfriends 丁珊 3 Afterclass wecanhaveavarietyofdeliciousChinesefoodinthediningroom Inthemeanwhile youcantalkwithsomestudents allofwhomarefriendly 郜佳琪Atnoonwewillhavelunchindiningroom wherenotonlycanwetastealotofdeliciousChinesefoodbutalsomakefriendsandchatwiththem 刘宇 3 Youcanchoosewhateveryoulikehere dumplings noodlesandmanykindsofsnacks I msurethatyouwillenjoyyourselfwithsomanydeliciousdishes Whenyoufinishyourstudy youcanrelaxyourselfbyplayingsportsattheplayground MaybeyouwillliketolearnhowtoplayPingpangwithourclassmates Itmustbeveryinteresting 孙波 4 Asthememberofourschooltabletennisteam IwillteachyoutoplayPingpangifyoulike 于浩You dbetterplaytabletennisbecauseitisverypopularinChina 刘彦强 4 Ithinkyouwillloveplayingtabletennis whichisoneofthespecialsportsinChina 高雅坤 whichwillbeapreciousexperienceforyou 安迪欣 4 Intheafternoon it stimeforsports It sreallyagoodchancetostretchyourarmsandlegsaftersittingintheclassroomforawholemorning Youcaneithercompeteintabletenniswithothersorenjoyyourtimeonthebasketballfield What smore wehaveaswimmingpooloncampus It sagoodideatorelaxyourselfinit 黄琳玥 开头 HereIwilltellyouwhatourschooltimewillbelikeduringyourstayhere 黄琳玥YouwillleadacolorfullifeinourschoolwhilestudyingChinesehere Itiscertainthatyouwillhaveagoodtimeontheone daytriptoourschool 结尾 We lltryourbesttomakeyouhaveapleasantexperienceinBeijing 丁珊IhopeyouwillbehappywhileyouareinBeijing 韩昳琳Ibelieveitwillbethegreatestmemoryinyourlife 储元Afterawholeday youwon tfeellonelyanymorebecauseyouhavelotsoffriendsandanewschoollife 王潇潇李璇 话题 句型 记叙文 看图 1 Getpleasure benefits You llfeelamazedatthebeautyoftheChineselanguageandChineseculture ItisagreatchancetomakenewfriendswhileenjoyingdeliciousChinesefood 句1 be feelamazedat struckbybe feelpleasedthat句2 Itisagreatchancetodo giveusa chancetodo TheGreatWall Snacks theSummerPalace PekingOpera 1 be feelamazedatbe feelpleasedthat2 Itisagreatchancetodo giveusa chancetodo StandingontheGreatWall HavingbeentoldaboutthehistoryoftheGreatWall Ifeltamazedattheworldwonder WewatchedPekingOpera whichgaveusawonderfulchancetoexperiencearealChineseartandculture TheGreatWall PekingOpera Snacks theSummerPalace 1 be feelamazedatbe feelpleasedthat 2 Itisagreatchancetodo giveusa chancetodo WestrolledthroughtheFlavorStreet whichisagreatchancetoexperiencewonderfulChinesefoodandculture StrollingaroundtheSummerPalace wewereamazedat struckbytheuniquebeautyofancientChineseRoyalgardening Snacks theSummerPalace 和平友谊 夏令营活动 姓名 王姗性别 女年龄 16岁学校 北京阳光中学其他 爱好音乐 摄影 善于与人交流 乐于助人 热爱自然 热爱和平 参加夏令营的目的 结交朋友 了解外国文化 IwouldliketojointhePeace FriendshipSummerCampsinceitwouldbeagreatopportunitytomakefriendswithyoungpeoplefromdifferentcountriesandlearnabouttheircultures Duringthistime you llfindhowinterestingChineseis YoucanlearnmoreaboutourChinesespecialculture YouaresuretogettoknowChineseculturebychattingwithothersandmakingmanyfriends Ithink feelitagoodideatocommunicatewithothersinChineseduringlunchtime 句3 learnmoreabout gettoknow bydoing句4 think feelitgreattodo think feelitagoodidea choicetodo Chinesebuilding architecture Chinesecultureandhistory adigitalfilm typicalplacesofinterestinBeijing make create DIYarea WelearnedmoreaboutthedevelopmentofourChinesespecialarchitecture WegottoknowourbrilliantChinesecultureandhistorybywatchingadigitalfilmontypicalplacesofinterestinBeijing WegottoknowourfolkculturebymakingwhateverwelikeinDIYarea Ithink feelitgreattocreatemanynewthingsinDIYarea Althoughtired wewerehappyandexcitedbecausewehadgainedsomuchknowledge 太泛 Throughtheactivities wecametorealizethespiritsofLeifeng 更多句式 句5 Weenjoy somuchthat wefelthappy that because 句6 bring giveus arouseourinterest desire Ending1 Weenjoyedsomuchthatwecouldn thelptalkingaboutwhatwehadexperienced Ending3 TheactivitygavemeasenseofprideasaChinese Moreimportantly itarousedourgreatexcitementandinterestinourtraditionalcultureandcustom Ending2 Wefelthappyandexcitedbecausewehadlearntbetteraboutourcultureandhistoryaswellashavelotsoffun Timeflew Beforeweknewit wehadtosaygoodbyetotheworkers We Timeflew Beforeweknewit wehadtosaygoodbyetotheworkers Wefeltsohappyandexcitedthatwecouldn thelptalkingaboutwe dexperienced Timeflew Beforeweknewit wehadtosaygoodbyetotheworkers Wefeltsohappyandexcitedabouttheunforgettableexperience 话题 句型 记叙文 看图 2 Helpothers contributions Gifts Agooddeed 假设你是红星中学高三一班的李华 上周你们班组织了一次感谢恩师的活动 请根据下面图示 为学校网站写一篇英文稿件 叙述这次活动从准备到结束的完整过程 Evaluation 1 是否覆盖了内容要点 2 是否运用的句式和词汇基本 能够满足任务要求 3 是否语法和用词方面有一些错误 但不影响理解 Mark Correct Examplepassage StudentVolunteersBroughtSunshinetotheElderlyOnMayDay LiYueandZhangHua studentsfromClassThree GradeTwo wenttoSunshineNursingHomeanddidsomevoluntarywork Upontheirarrival LiYueandZhangHuawerewarmlywelcomed Andrespectfully theypresentedtheelderlywithflowersandfruits whichwouldbegoodfortheirhealth Then theystartedworkingatonce cleaningthewindowsandsweepingthefloorsothattheywouldliveinatidyenvironment Everythingdone theysatintheyardchattingwiththeelderlypeople sharinginterestingstoriesandbringingthemlaughter Whenitwastimeforthevolunteerstoleave theelderlypeoplethankedthemfortheirkindness Theysaiditwassuchabeautifuldaythattheywouldrememberitforever LiYueandZhangHuafeltveryhappytolearnwhatresponsibilitymeans Whattheydidhasbroughtjoytoothersandenrichedtheirownlivesaswell ByChenJie SchoolNewspaper 活动 送水果 打扫 聊天 Upontheirarrival LiYueandZhangHuawerewarmlywelcomed Andrespectfully theypresentedtheelderlywithflowersandfruits whichwouldbegoodfortheirhealth Then theystartedworkingatonce cleaningthewindowsandsweepingthefloorsothattheywouldliveinatidyenvironment Everythingdone theysatintheyardchattingwiththeelderlypeople sharinginterestingstoriesandbringingthemlaughter Upontheirarrival LiYueandZhangHuawerewarmlywelcomed Andrespectfully theypresentedtheelderlywithflowersandfruits whichwouldbegoodfortheirhealth Then theystartedworkingatonce cleaningthewindowsandsweepingthefloorsothattheywouldliveinatidyenvironment Everythingdone theysatintheyardchattingwiththeelderlypeople sharinginterestingstoriesandbringingthemlaughter 主题 tothepoint 和连贯性 coherence 活动 送水果 打扫 聊天 简短评论 Whenitwastimeforthevolunteerstoleave theelderlypeoplethankedthemfortheirkindness Theysaiditwassuchabeautifuldaythattheywouldrememberitforever LiYueandZhangHuawereveryhappy Whattheydidhasbroughtjoytoothersandenrichedtheirownlivesaswell Whenitwastimeforthevolunteerstoleave theelderlypeoplethankedthemfortheirkindness Theysaiditwassuchabeautifuldaythattheywouldrememberitforever LiYueandZhangHuafeltveryhappytolearnwhatresponsibilitymeans Whattheydidhasbroughtjoytoothersandenrichedtheirownlivesaswell 立意 whattheactivitymeans 简短评论 Ifyouwanttowriteagoodpassage youshould Givefulldetailstothepoint Useproperconjunctionsandconjunctsentences 第二档 15 17分 完全完成了试题规定的任务 覆盖了所有内容要点 运用的句式和词汇能满足任务的要求 语法和用词基本准确 少许错误主要为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致 使用了简单的语句间连接成分 所写内容连贯 达到了预期的写作目的 Enrich Improve Possibleversion Lastweekourclassorganizedanactivitytothankourteachersbeforegraduation OnThursdaywehadaclassmeetingtodiscusswhattodo Wecameupwithmanygoodideas Thenwedecidedtosendthemgiftsanddosomegooddeeds Thenextdaywecarriedoutourplan Someofuscleanedtheteachers officeanddecorateditwithpotsofflowerssothatitwouldbemorecomfortablefortheteacherstoworkin Othershelpedwashthecarsorbikes Andstillothersgavewell preparedgiftstotheteachers showingourdeepadmirationandthankstoourlovedteacher Weallfelthappyaboutwhatwehaddoneforourteachers Itishightimeforustopaybackourteachersfortheirgreatefforts Thankyou DearHarry Howarethingsgoingwithyou TodayI mwritingtoyouaboutthechangesthathavetakenplaceinourlifesincethepolicy Reduceunnecessaryburdenformoreeffectivelearning wascarriedout Classesusedtobeginveryearlyinthemorningsowehadtogotoschoolwithoutbreakfast whichmoreorlessaffectedourhealthandstudiesinclass Butnowwegetupathalfpast6andhaveenough 东城09一模 减负增效 timetohavebreakfast Nowwehaveanhourforsportseachday Wecantakewhateverexercisesorsportwelike Afterthatwefeelrelaxedandveryenergeticinclass Apartfromthat wealsohaveavarietyofout of classactivitiessuchasgoingmountainclimbing orholdinganartfestivalinwhichgiftedstudentssinganddanceorplayadrama Furthermore asunnecessaryburdenisreduced wehavelesshomeworktodointheevening so 东城09一模 减负增效 asaresult wehavetimetodowhateverweareinterestedin suchassurfingtheInternetforusefulinformation playingsomecomputergamesforrelaxation Nolongerdowehavetostayuplate andwecangotobedat11 Oh it stimeforbed soIhavetostophere Lookingforwardtohearingfromyou YoursLiHua 东城09一模 减负增效 StandingontheGreatWall Ifeelamazedattheworldwonder WewatchedPekingOpera whichgaveusawonderfulchancetoexperiencearealChineseculture 西城09一模 游览北京