《广州一模作文讲评》PPT课件.ppt

广州一模英语作文讲评,基础写作评分说明,基础写作主要考查学生语言结构的应用能力：能够用正确、规范的语言表达特定的内容。本试题要求考生使用5个句子表达写作内容中所提供的全部内容，能够-,1-适当使用定语从句或者同位语结构表述同一事物的几项相关信息,e.g.1.WhiteTea,whichgetsitsnamefromitssilver-whitecolor,isregardedasoneofthesixmajortypesofteainChina.,e.g.2.WhiteTea,oneofthesixmajortypesofteainChina,getsitsnamefromitssilver-whitecolor.,2-适当使用分词短语,e.g.2.DatingbacktotheBeisongDynasty,WhiteTeahasalonghistoryanditismainlygrowninFujianandTaiwan.,e.g.1.Namedforitssilver-whitecolor,WhiteTeaisregardedasoneofthesixmajortypesofteainChina.,e.g.3.WhiteTeaisgoodforhealthifdrunkfrequentlyandcanbeusedinpreventingdiseaseslikehighbloodpressureandhelpingrelievethepainoftoothacheandfever.,3-正确使用thethe比较结构,4-能将多项并列的内容用简单、清晰的结构表达出来,5-巧妙运用不同词汇或短语表达合适的意义e.g.befamousfor/isfamedfor/isbest(well)knownfor,e.g.WhiteTeaisfamousforitsbeautifulsilver-needle-likeshape,itssweettasteanditsmedicinaleffects.,Thelongeritispreserved,thebettereffectithas.,评分时，应注意以下几个方面：,1.按照评分标准，实行分析法评分：按语言、内容和连贯分别给分；2.在语言方面，重点评判句子的语法结构是否正确、用词是否规范；考生是否使用了合适的句子结构；3.在内容方面，重点评判考生是否表达了所提供的全部信息；如果考生在表达完整的内容时，适当添加一些内容，不扣分；4.在连贯方面，重点评判5个句子是否构成一篇连贯的短文。,参考范文Whitetea,whichgetsitsnamefromitssilver-whitecolor,isregardedasoneofthesixmajorChineseteatypes.DatingbacktotheBeisongDynasty,WhiteTeahasalonghistoryanditismainlygrowninFujianandTaiwan.WhiteTeaisfamousforitsbeautifulsilver-needle-likeshape,itssweettasteanditsmedicinaleffects.Thelongeritispreserved,thebettereffectithas.WhiteTeaisgoodforhealthifdrunkfrequentlyandcanbeusedinpreventingdiseaseslikehighbloodpressureandhelpingrelievethepainoftoothacheandfever.,读写任务评分说明,读写任务是有材料作文：要求考生在阅读的基础上写一篇相关主题的作文；主要考查考生的语篇概括和语言表达能力。本试题要求学生就“节俭”的话题谈谈看法，内容包括：,1概要：要求能概括短文三个部分的主要内容，并在概要中有条理地整合以下要点：第一部分：familyneverlikedtowastemoney;第二部分：wasdeeplyindebt;第三部分：beingthriftyisbeingsmartwithyourmoneyfindwaystodoeverythingforless.,2正文：写作内容应包括：,对节俭的理解；对节俭的重要性的论述；就生活中如何做到节俭提出建议。,评分时应注意几个方面,1，按照评分标准，实行分析综合法评分。2，概括应包括上述要点，并且用适当的方式进行信息整合。3，写作的内容应该对应回答以下三个问题：1）Whatsbeingthrifty?/whatdoesthriftinessmean?/Whatdoesathriftypersondo?2)Whyisbeingthriftyimportanttoyou?3)Whatshouldwedotobethrifty?/Whataresomethriftytips?,参考范文Version1Inthepassage,thewriterdescribeshowheforgothisfamilysthriftytraditionandeventuallymetwithfinancialdifficulty.Thishelpedhimrealizetheimportanceofthriftinessandstarttopractisethriftinessagain.Tome,beingthriftymeansvaluingmoney,makingthemostwhatIhaveandtryingnevertospendbeyondmybudgetoronunnecessarythings.Thriftisanoldanddatedconcepttomanyyoungpeople.Aslifehasbecomealoteasier,peopletendtoindulgeinaluxuriouslifestyle.ThatswhyIregardthisnearlyforgottenpracticemoreimportantnowthaneverbefore.,Actually,tobethriftycanbereallysimple.Mostofthetime,itssimplyamatterofbeingmorethoughtfulinoureverydaylife:turningofflightswhenleavingtheroom,notusingtheair-conditionersunlessnecessary,bringingourwaterbottlefromhomeratherthanspendingmoneyonsoftdrinks,usingpublictransportstoavoidneedlessdrivingandparking,orderingjustenoughfoodwheneatingoutandsoforth.Todothesemightmeandoingthingsotherswontdoandcontrollingourdesires.Butremember,asmartpersonisnotonewhoalwaystriestoimpressothersbyshowingofftheirwealth,butonewhosparesnoefforttosaveforthefutureandforothers.,Version2Thewriterrecallsthestressandeconomicproblemshehadaftermovingtoabigcity,forgettingthethriftyhabitsofhisyouthandwastingallhismoney.Atlast,helearnedhislessonandbecamethriftyoncemore.,Ithinkathriftypersonissomeonewhousesonlywhattheyneedandavoidswaste.Beingthriftycansaveusmoney,butmoreimportantly,itisnecessaryifwewanttosaveourplanet.Inthefaceofgrowingenvironmentalproblems,Ibelieveitismorenecessarythanevertoreducetheamountofrubbishandpollutioneachindividualproduces.Ifwefailtocontroltheamountofwasteweproduce,oursocietyandourplanetaredoomedandthisconcernmustoverweighanyshort-termsatisfactionwegetfrombuyingandconsumingmore.,ItisforthisreasonthatIbuyasmuchfreshfoodaspossible,ratherthanpackagedfood,whichrequiresmuchmoreenergytoproduceandaddstoourpollutionproblems.IalsotrytocycleorwalkeverywhereIgo,oratleastusepublictransportratherthangettingataxiordependingonaprivatecar.Actionslikethesekeepmefitandhealthy,helptheenvironmentandleavemewithmoremoneyinmypocket!Whydontyoutrythesetoo?Youmightreallyenjoytheresults.,