高三作文讲评课学案

高三作文讲评课学案学习目标：通过讲评学生学会修改和给作文润色。学习重难点：学生会美化自己的作文，给文章加分。前提测评作文讲评一 如何给作文定档：ASSESSMENTS (评价标准)Structure 框架结构Is the article divided into parts? Content 内容要点Are all the details stated? Are all the details to the point(切题)? Language语言表达 Does the writer use any linking words? Are there any mistakes? 表达错误 Is there any advanced vocabulary or sentence patterns (高级词汇和句式)?二 结合此次作文作文要点：1. Description （about 30words）Key words:in the early 1980sin the 1990saround 2000in 2014时间表达转换：_表达专业变迁或喜好：2. Analyze the reasons. (1-2points)3. Clarify your favourite major and reasons. (1-2points)三 书面表达普遍存在问题 审题不仔细，遗漏要点。 过渡不自然，单纯翻译。 逻辑不恰当，有悖常理。 表达不丰富，结构单调。 语言不地道，汉式思维。 用词不贴切，缺乏积累。 语法不正确，错误不断。 书写不规范，多词少句。四Language：Proper linking words (恰当的连词)时间顺序 first, second, then, finally , at last , soon , immediately, suddenly对称顺序for one thing, for the other thing, on one hand, on the other hand转折顺序but, yet, however, while, though, otherwise，in reality, instead , nevertheless, after all.因果顺序because, since, as, for, thanks to, as a result ,owing to, due to条件顺序as long as, on condition that, if, unless，only if，Provided/Providing/Suppose/Supposing that让步顺序though, as, even if/though, whether , wh- (what,when, where,how)+ever.递进顺序and, whats more, besides, in addition, furthermore, moreover, to make the matter worse, whats worse过渡性插入语I think, in my opinion, Im afraid, you know, As we all know, As is well known, in a word, to sum up五Language mistakes：1. There are many reasons account for/answer for the changes of popular university majors.2. Facing the graduation, in view of our majors, we are never careful enough to choose the right majors3. When it comes to why appear this phenomenon六Advanced sentence patterns: 1. 倒装句 2. 复合句（定语从句，名词性从句） 3. 强调句型 4. 感叹句 5. It 作形式主语，形式宾语的句型 6. 被动语态 7. 非谓语动词短语 8. 介词（如：with, on/upon doing ） 9. 固定句型（如，sothat ; There is no doubt that）10.谚语&名言七Have a try1) To his surprise, people tend to ignore the traffic rules.(主语从句)= _ people tend to ignore the traffic rules.2) He was delayed by the heavy traffic, so he was late for the party.（定语，表语从句）= _ he was late for the party _ he was delayed by the heavy traffic.3) Throwing rubbish at random caused many problems, and they have raised much concern. （非谓语）= The problems _ have raised much concern.4) As the problems were solved, the quality has been improved. （独立主格）= _, the quality has been improved.5) Although we are tired, we are still happy. （倒装）= _, we are still happy.6) The pollution was so serious that people dare not go out. （倒装）= _ people dare not go out.7) When we realize the importance of the environment, we will try to protect it.= _.8) He didnt realize what had happened until he got the news from others.（强调）=八Homework: Rewrite your composition and further improve it according to the assessment form, trying to make your final copy as neat as possible.