[教育]掌握写作技巧增添表达亮点

教育掌握写作技巧增添表达亮点,2009年山东省高考英语作文各档次的给分范围和要求,第一档（优秀）26分-29分,紧扣主题；覆盖所有要点，内容充实；语法结构多样，词汇丰富，有效使用连接成分，显示出较强的语言运用表达能力；语言小错不超过4个，不能有一处大错。,第二档（良好）22分-25分,紧扣主题，覆盖所有要点，内容较充实，语言有少量错误，但基本不影响意思表达；大错不超过3个。,第三档（一般）18分-21分,紧扣主题，基本覆盖所有要点，能够表达基本内容；语言错误已影响了部分意思的表达，但多数句子基本正确。,2,淘花/百度专用,Dear Tom,It has been a long time since I met you last time,.,I miss you very much.How are you?,Im very grateful to you for your help with my English,when I studied in your country.,I wouldnt speak English so fluently now without you,.,So now,I cant thank you enough,.,By the way,do you,keep in touch wit,h,Mr.Smith?Is he fit?,Im very concerned about him,.If you could visit him,please remember me to him,.,Furthermore,would you mind making me know how to contact him?,Eventually,Im glad to tell you our Spring Festival,the most important one in China,is coming.And I remember you once told me you like China.,Would you like to come here and enjoy the Chinese traditional customs and culture?,I will,expect your coming,.,Best wishes!,Yours,Li Hua,3,淘花/百度专用,Group,I like reading while my brother,likes,watching television.,I like reading while my brother,enjoys,watching television.,Group,There will be an increase in the number of peoples jobs,There will be an increase in the number of jobs,for people in Beijing.,available,4,淘花/百度专用,Group,It will have an,important,effect on the development of Beijing.,It will have a(n),effect on the development of Beijing.,Group,It is,very useful,to practise English every day.,It is,to practise English every day.,of great value/of great help/of great importance,significant/far-reaching/profound/vital,of great/vital use,5,淘花/百度专用,Group 5,He told me that the question was now,being discussed.,He told me that the question was now,.,Group 6,Suddenly I,had,a good idea.,Suddenly I,a good idea.,A good idea,me.,came up with,occurred to,under discussion.,under repair/control/,consideration/construction,6,淘花/百度专用,Group 7,He has,decided,to be a teacher when he grows up.,He has,to be a teacher when he grows up.,Group 8,Last Sunday we,had a good time,in the park,Last Sunday we,in the park,enjoyed ourselves/had fun,made up his mind/determined,7,淘花/百度专用,At noon we had a picnic lunch in the sunshine.,Then we had a short rest.,Then we sang and danced.,We played happily.,At noon we had a picnic lunch in the sunshine.,After a short rest,we had great fun singing and dancing.,have fun doing,8,淘花/百度专用,2.他站在那儿，什么也不干。,He stood there,doing nothing.,He stood there and(he)did nothing.,9,淘花/百度专用,3.,人们说,中国每年有,成千上万,的人,死于吸烟,.,People say that,t,ens of thousands of people die from smoking every year in China.,（宾语从句）,Tens of thousands of people,are said to,die,from smoking every year in China.,（被动语态）,Its said that,tens of thousands of people die from smoking every year in China.,（主语从句）,10,淘花/百度专用,4.青岛是一个美丽的城市,它,有百年的历史,.,Qingdao is a beautiful city,and it has a history of one hundred years,.,（并列句）,Qingdao is a beautiful city,which has,a,history of one hundred years.,（非限制性定语从句）,Qingdao is a beautiful city,with,a history of,one hundred years.,（with+宾语）,Qingdao is a beautiful city,（,dating back to/,dating from),one hundred years ago.,（,非谓语）,11,淘花/百度专用,Voices from experts,阅卷老师在评阅时最注重的是文章中的亮点，根据语言使用情况，亮点的多少而定出档次，所以考生在书面表达上的亮点是取得优秀的关键，亮点主要包括：一、语言地道、词汇丰富；二、语法结构多样；三、文章连贯自然。,12,淘花/百度专用,*不要刻意追求高级词汇和复杂结构。,注意,Experts:,个别考生片面追求花哨文字，结果造出一些错误百出的句子，这是写作的一大忌。高考写作时应尽可能运用自己熟悉的词汇和句式，尽量避免错误的出现。一篇文章即便用的词汇再高级、语法结构再复杂，若是满篇小错，阅卷老师也不会给文章一个较高档次的分值的。,13,淘花/百度专用,the China Pavilion,14,淘花/百度专用,2010年世博会将于5月1日-10月31日上海召开，请根据以下要点描述上海有关情况。（请用一句话描述每一个要点）,1、上海是一座有着700多年历史的城市，,占地面积,为6340平方公里，是我国最大的城市。,2、上海位于黄埔江畔，交通便利。,3、中国馆由中国国家馆、中国地区馆、港澳台馆三部分组成，是世博园中,最引人注目,的建筑。,4、上海,市民,正,积极准备迎接,全世界人民的到来。,参考词汇：,世博园：the Expo Site 中国馆：the China Pavilion,中国国家馆:theChineseNationalPavilion,中国地区馆:the ChineseProvincesPavilion,港澳台馆:the Pavilion0fHongKong、MacaoandTaiwan,市民：citizen,15,淘花/百度专用,1、上海是一座,有着700多年历史,的城市，,占地面积,为6340平方公里，是我国,最大的,城市。,Shanghai,the largest city of China,which covers an area of,6,340 square kilometers,has a history of,more than 700 years.,16,淘花/百度专用,2、上海,位于,黄埔江畔，交通便利。,Shanghai,lies on,the Huangpu River,making/which makes,it convenient for people to arrive.,Shanghai,lies on,the Huangpu River,with,a convenient transportation.,17,淘花/百度专用,3、中国馆,由,中国国家馆、中国地区馆、港澳台馆三部分,组成,是世博园中最引人注目的建筑。,The China Pavilion,the most attractive building,in the Expo Site,is made up of,/,consists of,/,comprises,the Chinese National Pavilion、the Chinese Provinces Pavilion and Hongkong,Macao andTaiwan.,18,淘花/百度专用,4、上海市民正,积极准备迎接,全世界人民的到来。,Shanghai citizens are doing,what they can to,welcome the people from all over the world.,Shanghai citizens are doing,all/everything they can to,welcome the people from all over the world.,19,淘花/百度专用,2009 陕西卷,假定你是李华。在一个英文网络论坛上，你看到一个名叫Grown-up 中学生发帖（post）寻求帮助。请根据帖子内容、写作要点和要求回帖。,Grown-up Post at 18-5-2009 20:08 1,Hi,everyone,Im 17 years old and I am going to university this autumn.But my mother continues to treat me as a seven-year old kid.,What should I do?TOP,(last topic/next topic)+Reply+New,写作要点：,1、告诉,Gr