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Click to edit Master title style,Click to edit Master text styles,Second level,Third level,Fourth level,Fifth level,11/7/2009,#,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,*,专题十一 夹叙夹议作文,话题类书面表达中夹叙夹议类作文应该注意以下几点：,第一，根据话题内容叙事，向读者描绘某事物的样子、声音、味道等等。作者可以通过外表、行动或变化用语言描绘一个人，一个物体，一个地方或一个场面。,第二，发表议论，不同人对事件的不同看法，或正反观点的对比。发表议论的过程要紧扣材料中心确立论点，论据要真实可信，论证过程要有说服力和感染力。,第三，发表自己的观点，同时对文章作出总结。,（2010浙江）,最近，李越被评为你们班的“每周之星”。请你根据她的事迹(在上周六下午，不顾天气炎热，为班级选购歌咏比赛服装)，用英语为班级板报写一篇l00120词的短文。,你的文章应包括下列要点：,1.李越的事迹及其对同学的影响；,2.你的评论。,注意：1.文章的标题和开头已给出(不计词数)。,2.参考词汇：singing contest 歌咏比赛,costume 服装,Star Student of the Week,Li Yue has been awarded the title of“Star Student of the Week”for what she did for our class.,_,1.文体信息：,文体：夹叙夹议文；,语体：正式语体；,人称：第三人称和第一人称；,中心大意：介绍李越的事迹及其对同学的影响，给出自己的观点。,2.主导时态：一般过去时。,3.内容要点：,李越被评为你们班的“每周之星”；,李越的事迹；,对同学的影响；,发表自己的看法。,4.温馨提示：语言要正式，在有限的空间内传达丰富的内容。,Li Yue has been awarded the title of“Star Student of the Week”for what she did for our class.On last Saturdays afternoon,Li Yue went to buy the class costumes for the singing contest,despite the fact that it is so hot.Besides,it was a day,when everyone had a good time,but she was willing to seek the right costume from one shop to another.,Its her behaviour that moved us deeply.Encouraged by her spirit,the whole class made efforts to train.,At last our effort paid off and we won the first prize.,Li Yue is warm-hearted and has changed our class with her behaviour.Since then each of us voluntarily does something for others.,There is no doubt that she is worth the title,.,这是一篇夹叙夹议类，文章中心突出，层次清楚，记叙事件简明扼要，作者对所有的要点都进行了恰当的扩展，语句简洁表达丰富。句式多变，如：强调句，倒装句和非谓语动词结构。高级词汇也用的恰如其分，如：be willing to,make efforts,pay off等。是一篇不错的文章。,如能把下列句子加以优化则文章能更上一个档次：,1.On last Saturdays afternoon,Li Yue went to buy the class costumes for the singing contest 改为 Saturday is a day for us to relax and enjoy ourselves,but just On last Saturdays afternoon,Li Yue voluntarily went to select the right costumes for the singing contest,2.Li Yue is warm-hearted and has changed our class with her behaviour.改为 Li Yue is always warm-hearted and cares a lot about the class.Besides,she often devotes her spare time to helping others.She has set a good example for us.,常用句式：,1.So hot though it was that day,she had no complaint at all.,天气是那么的热，她却一点也不抱怨。,2.Its what she has done that not only moves us but set a good example for us.,就是她做的事不仅感动了我们而且还为我们树立了好榜样。,3.Therefore,she deserves the honor and we should learn from her.,因此，她值得尊重，我们应该向她学习。,Star Student of the Week,Li Yue has been awarded the title of“Star Student of the Week”for what she did for our class.On the hot afternoon of last Saturday,Li Yue went downtown and walked from one store to another,looking for the costumes we would wear in the singing contest.While the rest of us were enjoying our leisure time in cool and comfortable rooms,she spent the whole afternoon searching and selecting.Finally,she found the right clothes.Deeply moved by her efforts,we tried our best and won the first prize in the contest.,Li Yue is always warm-hearted and cares a lot about the class.Besides,she often devotes her spare time to helping others.She has set a good example for us.Therefore,she deserves the honor and we should learn from her.,假如你叫李华，作为校学生会主席，最近组织了一次60人次的家庭调查，询问家长最关心学生在校的几个问题。主要包括学习焦虑，交友困惑，生活习惯的养成等问题。其中45名家长关心学习焦虑，约占75%；30名家长关心学生的交友问题，占50%；只有15名家长关心学生生活习惯的养成，占15%。陈述调查情况并汇报调查结果，然后谈谈你的看法。,注意：1.字数：120词左右；,2.可适当发挥，以使行文连贯；,3.文章的开头已给出（不计词数）。,I made a family survey among 60 parents in our neighborhood about what parents are most concerned about as to their children while at school.,_,One possible version:,I made a family survey among 60 parents in our neighborhood about what parents are most concerned about as to their children while at school.,75 percent of the 60 parents focus their attention on the students learning anxiety.It worries them that the children have to stand more stress.,50 percent of the parents are afraid that the students may fall into early confusion about making friends.Many students cant well deal with the relationship between classmates.,Another problem that some people,25 percent of the parents,are concerned about is the living habits of the students.They find that their children havent developed good habits in their life.,To my mind,the problems that the parents worry about do exist.As students,we must try our best to develop our learning and living habits.We cant make our parents and teachers anxious about us.,内容总结,专题十一 夹叙夹议作文。话题类书面表达中夹叙夹议类作文应该注意以下几点：。1.李越的事迹及其对同学的影响。中心大意：介绍李越的事迹及其对同学的影响，给出自己的观点。4.温馨提示：语言要正式，在有限的空间内传达丰富的内容。就是她做的事不仅感动了我们而且还为我们树立了好榜样。_,
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