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7步成文第五步靓词佳句升级完，衔接顺畅“修一番”习作的润色主要包括两方面，一是词句的美化，着眼于句子内部；二是语句的衔接，着眼于句子与句子之间、段与段之间。一篇100词左右的文章，几个衔接词看似微不足道，其实不然，缺乏有效衔接的文章就如同缺乏粘合的墙壁一样松散、易垮。一、“四档”“五档”差在哪典例感悟(2018浙江高考写作)假定你是李华，你校英语协会招聘志愿者，接待来访的国外中学生。请你写信应聘，内容包括：1口语能力；2.相关经验；3.应聘目的。注意：1.词数80左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。“冤屈的”四档作文(得分11分)升格后的五档作文(得分14分)Dear Sir/Madam，Ive learned that the English Association of our school is now in need of some volunteers to receive foreign students visiting our school. Im writing to apply to join it, thinking that Im well qualified for the job.I have developed fluency in spoken English. I have no difficulty municating with them. I have accumulated related experience by working parttime in a travel agency, acpanying some foreign tourists. I treasure this as a good chance to broaden my perspective as well as improve my spoken English.Looking forward to your reply at your convenience.Yours，Li HuaDear Sir/Madam，Ive learned that the English Association of our school is now in need of some volunteers to receive foreign students visiting our school. Im writing to apply to join it, thinking that Im well qualified for the job.For one thing, I have developed fluency in spoken English. As a result, I have no difficulty municating with them. For another, I have accumulated related experience by working parttime in a travel agency, acpanying some foreign tourists. More importantly, I treasure this as a good chance to broaden my perspective as well as improve my spoken English.Looking forward to your reply at your convenience.Yours，Li Hua名师点评左栏的文章运用了现在分词作状语、宾语从句、非谓语动词等；in need of, be well qualified for, develop fluency in, accumulated, broaden my perspective, as well as等的应用也恰到好处；文章采用了三段式，分段合理，总体来说是一篇不错的作文。但美中不足的是缺少了语句间的连接成分，感觉好像只是一些句子的简单堆砌，使得文章读起来稍欠流畅，故勉强归入四档。右栏的作文加上一些连接词后使文章结构紧凑，过渡自然，从而上升了一个档次，从四档跨入了五档。二、如何由“四档”升“五档”四档作文与五档作文在衔接过渡方面的差别在于：一个是应用简单的语句间的连接成分；一个是有效地使用了语句间的连接成分。一个“简单”，一个“有效”，凸显写作功底、凸显档次差别。有效地使用语句间的连接成分巧妙地衔接过渡，利用好“起、承、转、合”四种方法使文章流畅自然，是考生书面表达跨进五档线的必备条件。常用开头词汇表示“起”的词汇常用在段落或文章的开头，用于开篇引出扩展句。常见的词汇有：first, firstly, first of all, at first, in the first place, above all, to begin/start with, today, now, nowadays, at present, currently, recently, generally speaking, according to等。First, I think everyone needs friends and is eager to get friendship.First of all, we must make full use of every 45minute lesson.Nowadays/Recently, people in many big cities are plaining about the heavy traffic.To begin/start with, smoking should be banned in public areas.Generally speaking, the more you practise, the more skillfully you can write in English.常用开头句式As the proverb says/As the saying goes, “Time is money.”With the development of the Internet, puters play an important role in peoples life.It goes without saying that it pays to keep early hours.There is no denying that successful business lies in a healthy body and mind.It is wellknown that an elephant is a very kind and gentle animal.Im excited to learn that we are going to start a magazine.满分作文选粹Generally speaking, your arrival shouldnt be later than the fixed time.(2018全国卷书面表达)For one thing, I have developed fluency in spoken English.(2018浙江高考写作)Now Im writing to tell you the plan for the next class.(2017全国卷书面表达)Im happy to receive your letter and know youre ing to China.(2017北京高考书面表达)As is indicated in the graph, the boxoffice ine of Chinese films increased constantly from 2012 to 2015.(2017江苏高考书面表达)常用顺承词汇表示“承”的词汇常用于承接主题句或第一个扩展句。常见的词汇有：second/secondly, also, besides, in addition, soon afterwards, after that, whats more, furthermore, moreover, whats worse, still less, to make matters worse, worse still, for example, in other words, especially, particularly, obviously, meanwhile, at the same time等。Also, do let me know if you need more information.Secondly, we should get up early to memorize idioms and useful expressions.Obviously, a good learning habit can help us to speed up to reach our destinations.Besides, developing a good habit of learning can help you improve your learning effectively.Whats more, good books can help us to develop good characters.In addition, we shouldnt neglect that everyone wants a friendly and peaceful society.Meanwhile/At the same time, I will regard it as my duty to keep our environment clean and tidy.常用顺承句式Take Beijing for example, it is one of the biggest cities in the world.What is more serious is that we dont cherish wildlife.As far as I am concerned, they stand for love, friendship and unity.满分作文选粹Whats more, it is big enough to hold all the teachers and students in our school.(2018全国卷书面表达)What I want to stress is that our group is looking for new members right now.(2018天津高考书面表达)In addition, there are famous artists who will perform how to cut paper on the spot.(2017全国卷书面表达)At the same time, we will divide the members into several groups to practice at 5：00 pm after school.(2017全国卷书面表达)As far as Im concerned, every summer I stay at my uncles house in the country for three weeks and enjoy a wonderful life there.(2016四川高考书面表达)常用转折过渡词汇表示“转”的词汇常用来表示不同或相反的意见或情况。常见的词汇有：but, yet, however, while, otherwise, or (else), on the contrary, on the other hand, contrary to, in any case, though, although, as, even if/though, despite, in spite of, regardless of等。But unfortunately I mind my own business without considering my parents.However, not until the match was over did we realize that we became the loser.On the other hand, online shopping also has many disadvantages.On the contrary, the volunteers always claim that they are tired of the life on earth.Contrary to what I had originally said, the trip turned out to be fun.常用转折过渡句式Whatever/No matter what you say, he wont believe you.Whether you believe it or not, it is true.As a matter of fact, I didnt agree with you.满分作文选粹There is no denying that such ratings might bring convenience to consumers, but they are often misleading and unreliable.(2018江苏高考书面表达)However, the film market may witness a slowdown in the near future.(2017江苏高考书面表达)常用结尾词汇表示“合”的词汇常用于小结段落中上文的内容，引导最后一个扩展句或引导结尾句表示段落的结束。常见的词汇有：finally, last but not least, in short, in brief, in conclusion, in a/one word, to sum up, all in all, on the whole, in general等。All in all, traveling is the best choice to recharge ourselves and get ready for the new challenges.In conclusion, a good citizen should observe traffic regulations.On the whole, I find a bike more enjoyable than a motorcycle.In a word, success is important, and so is failure, because its the mother of success.To sum up, environmental protection is of great importance, which can make us live more fortably and healthily.常用结尾句式Id appreciate it if you could deliver them as soon as possible.Only with bined efforts can we expect our hometown to take on a new look in the near future.We can, therefore, e to the conclusion that nothing is so precious as peace in the world.From what has been discussed above, we may draw the conclusion that you must have selfconfidence if you want to achieve something.满分作文选粹Therefore, we should give a second thought to these ratings whenever we go shopping.(2018江苏高考书面表达)In a word, I like everything in spring, especially the feelings bathed in the rain and sunshine.(2016四川高考书面表达)In short, Internet voting, to some extent, is unfair, if not immoral, and cannot be trusted.(2016江苏高考书面表达)课堂应用体验 .用过渡词汇或句式补全句子1First_of_all/To_begin_with (首先), the most significant thing is to set a goal, work out a plan and carry out your plan step by step.2As_far_as_I_am_concerned (就我而言), I love wealth, but I value health more.3As_a_matter_of_fact/In_fact (事实上), advertisement plays an informative role in our daily life.4Besides/In_addition/Whats_more/Moreover (况且), listening to some soft music does relax your mood and give you a new start.5I lost my way in the forest and to_make_matters_worse/worse_still (更糟的是), it got dark.6Therefore (因此), I suggest we live in harmony with the nature.7In_a_word/In_conclusion/In_short/In_brief (总之), changes in our life in the past twenty years have brought us fort and convenience.8Its_(high)_time_that (到了的时候了) we took some measures to solve the problem.9We_can_draw_a_conclusion_that (我们可以得出一个结论) our society is progressing and people are living a better life than ever before.10From_this_experience,_I_learned_that (从这次经历中，我了解到) being careful is very important and that we cant be too careful, especially in examinations.篇章训练阅读下面短文，选择适当的过渡词或短语填空in my opinion， recently， worse still， on the one hand， on the other hand， however现在很多学校严禁学生上学带手机，但是仍有许多学生把手机带到学校。请你结合此现象谈谈你的看法，并给校报英语专栏投稿。内容要点如下：1简述该现象；2谈谈带手机上学的弊端；3阐述你的观点。注意：1.词数100左右；2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。参考范文：Recently many schools have taken tough measures to forbid students to bring their mobile phones to school.However, some students break this rule and some even play with their mobile phones in class.The disadvantages of students bringing mobile phones to school are obvious.On_the_one_hand, mobile phones can distract students attention.On_the_other_hand, some students may get access to some unhealthy websites, which are bad for their development.Worse_still, some students are likely to pare the brands of their mobile phones with their classmates.In_my_opinion, I strongly support banning mobile phones in schools.Only in this way can we devote more energies to our study and achieve our goals.
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