高考英语作文的润色与提高.ppt

高考英语作文的润色与提高,以应用文为主,专题一：优秀作文的基本特征,优秀高考英语作文的六个基本特征,1、层次不乱 2、句式多变 3、亮点若干 3、巧妙串联 4、蠢错不犯 6、整洁卷面,层次不乱,开头：引出话题 （第一段）,主体：陈述观点或给出建议 （第二段）,结尾：呼应、总结（第三段）,题目： 假设你是李华，你的朋友Liz刚刚进入高中，在交友上面存在一些问题，请你根据如下提示，帮她度过难关。 要交朋友首先要做一个朋友。 要和朋友同甘共苦；患难之中的朋友才是真的朋友。 友谊需要时间和投入(effort).,Dear Liz, _ Yours, Li Hua,层次不乱,开头：引入话题,主体：陈述观点或给出建议,结尾：呼应、总结,通常只需要2-3句话。提出话题， 并说明你有建议。,第一段：引出话题,通常只需要2-3句话。,Im sorry to hear that you have trouble in making friends. As far as im concerned/For my part/In my opinion, there are some ways to solve this problem.,层次不乱,开头：引入话题,主体：陈述观点或给出建议,结尾：呼应、总结,通常只需要2-3句话。提出话题， 并说明你有建议。,每一个观点或建议之间要保持层次清晰，加上适当的过渡词语。,第二段：陈述观点或建议,To begin with, you should be a friend. Then, you need.Lastly, it is also important to do First and foremost, you should be a friend. Secondly, you need. Last but not least, it is also important to do,层次不乱,开头：引入话题,主体：陈述观点或给出建议,结尾：呼应、总结,通常只需要2-3句话。,每一个观点或建议之间要保持层次清晰，加上适当的过渡词语。,总结，并提出美好愿景。,第三段：呼应、总结，或者表达愿景。,All in all/ In short/ In conclusion/ In a word, you can improve your present situation. And i believe , with your trying, you can overcome.,Dear Liz, Im sorry to hear that you have trouble in making friends. As far as im concerned/For my part/In my opinion, there are some ways to First and foremost/ To begin with, you should be a friend. Secondly, you need. Last but not least, it is also important to do. All in all/ In short/ In conclusion/ In a word, you can improve your present situation. And I believe , with your trying, you can overcome. Yours, Li Hua,句式多变,长短变化,主、被动变化,主语变化,同义词变化,同功能句型变化,横向比较变化,亮点若干,高中词汇,高中常见短语,高级句型,各种复合句,倒装句,强调句型,虚拟语气句型,非谓语动词结构,巧妙串联,起：,first of all, to begin with, above all.,承：,in addition, besides.,转：,however, on the other hand.,合：,in my opinion, all in all, in a word.,蠢错不犯：,初中二年级学生就应该掌握的 基本语言表达能力。,1. I very like the book. 2. He was very angrily. 3. There have many student in the classroom. 4. The car is yellow color.,整洁卷面,英文书写大方、圆润、自然；,词与词间距适当,字母大小适当,无大面积涂改,不影响交际,专题二 肃清基础语言错误,中学生英语写作中常见的14种语言错误：,1.主谓不一致,My father and I likes going fishing by the lake. Large quantities of soil has been washed away.,2.时态、语态混用,Last night, I had enjoyed a party. The painting on the wall damaged seriously.,was,3.句子成分残缺,I stood up and saw there a boy. The young man running in the street.,was,was,4.习惯搭配误用,I once heard from the animal like this. We passed away the building.,of,by,5.名词单、复数不分,I made many friend in the summer camp. We can get some informations from the Internet.,6.动词单、复数不分,Our teacher often say that success lie in hard work. Mr. Smith, together with some students, are coming to our school.,7.赘词现象多发,I hope you can return back to our school soon. Well hold a party on next Sunday.,8.近义词的误用,The school requests that all the students should wear the school uniform. I quarreled with my teacher about my grades.,9.基本词汇拼写错误,I flied to New York directly from Beijing. This will be done immediatly.,10.前后人称不一致,The boy was born in a poor family but she works hard. We watched a few movies and we loved it.,11.动词原形作主语/宾语,Take a walk after dinner is very good for you. At that moment, I didnt feel like take a walk.,12.逻辑主语与主句主语不一致,Preparing dinner, the doorbell rang. Walking in the street, a car hit an old man.,13.一个简单句出现两个谓语,There was no work to do, he went back home. I received your email, I was very excited.,being,When,and,14.中式英语,Next week have a party. I sorry you I cant with you go Beijing.,有则改之，无则加勉； 用心则易，无心则难。,专题三：第一反应与克制第一反应,他是个好人。,第一反应测试：,He is a good man.,generous, humorous, interesting, smart, gentle, warm-hearted, hospitable, easy-going, devoted, open-minded, modest, friendly,对不起，我不能和你一起去北京了。,Im sorry that I cant go to Beijing with you.,Would you accept my heartfelt apology that I cant make it to Beijing with you as we have planned?,I sorry you I cant with you go Beijing.,存点钱是很重要的。,There is no denying/ It is beyond any dispute that depositing some money in the bank is crucial.,Sometimes, whether you have money at hand means the difference of life or death for a loved one.,专题四：打动人心的句型 和 打翻人胃的句型,审题： “十年后的我” - “感性的、充满想象的” 切忌：套用了太多所谓的“万能句式” ，破坏了这种“感性”，使之变得“太理性”、“太刚”了： （1）运用了大量的表示顺序的词句(太过理性)： Firstly, secondly, thirdly, finally; To start with；Last but not least; My future life is as follows.,审题： “十年后的我” - “感性的、充满想象的” 切忌：套用了太多所谓的“万能句式” ，破坏了这种“感性”，使之变得“太理性”、“太刚”了： （1）运用了大量的表示顺序的词句(太过理性)： Firstly, secondly, thirdly, finally; To start with；Last but not least; My future life is as follows.,（2）运用了大量的表达强烈观点句式（语气太刚）： I hold the point of view that There is no doubt that I strongly believe that I am firmly convinced that (there will be exciting and wonderful changes in /it gives me a strong body) It goes without saying that What I want to stress is that (health is very important to us),（3）运用了大量的总结、转换、强调、转折等语气、句式，不够得体。 All in all, / Generally speaking, As a matter of fact, As for my spare time, As far as I am concerned, I hope become a doctor. When it comes to my own family, it occurs to me that I will have 2 children. It is known to us that family is the most important thing in our life. On the one hand, on the other hand,注意：在结构清楚，逻辑通顺的基础上，要注意句型的多变，句子的优美。,（1）运用大量的强调句和倒装句，给人非常生涩的感觉。 In my spare time, so active am I that I will go fishing with my family. It is after ten years that （2）在同一篇短文里，堆砌了大量同样的句式： Its I that want to be a teacher; It is I that am fond on children. It is I that like making a lot of friends. It is famous city that Ill go to （3）中式英语，意思相差较大,或完全不达意。 Lover Organize a family I hope my will be little speak English.,那些能稍微充满想象的句子，就显得难能可贵： My two sons surrounding me smile like sunshine. On weekends, I will take my family to the beach to have a rest, enjoying the sun rises. go out for a picnic, hugging the nature and strengthening our emotion clever and optimistic, my daughter is going to be the sort of girl who spread sunshine to others through her smile. Love can add delightful color to life.,My Chinese Dream To make our motherland become more and more powerful, teenagers should play a role in realizing Chinese dream. Recently, our class has held a meeting about this. There I will discuss how I understand Chinese dream. Maybe everyone has a dream, whatever it is. Dream is like water, which can water our heart; dream is like sunshine, which can melt the snow; dream is like wind, which can blow away fog in front of our eyes. When I was a child, I wanted to be a doctor, who can save the dying people. And now I want to make my fanily live a better life. On my way to dream, I know there will be some troubles. However hard the situation is, whatever I do in the future, I wont give up. As the saying goes, “Where there is a will, there is a way.” We cant change the past, but, we can change our future.,Dear Liz, Im sorry to hear that you have trouble in making friends. As far as im concerned/For my part/In my opinion, there are some ways to First and foremost, you should be a friend. Secondly, you need. Last but not least, it is also important to do. All in all/ In short/ In conclusion/ In a word, you can improve your present situation. And I believe , with your trying, you can overcome. Yours, Li Hua,Thank You!,