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写作提高三步阶梯,MyViewonOpportunity,Directions:Forthispart,youareallowed30minutestowriteacompositiononthetopicMyViewonOpportunity.Youmustbaseyourcompositiononthefollowinginstructions(giveninChinese):有的人认为机会是极少的，另一些人则认为人人都会有某种机会。你的看法如何？写出你的理由并且适当举例。在你的文章结尾处不要忘记写出你的结论。Yourcompositionshouldbenolessthan120words.Remembertowriteitneatly.,经典议论文的布局模式一般为：引言论点论证结论。那么模仿此法，这篇文章也可以划分为四个段落。第一段为引言段，在此段中只需写出这两种相反的观点就可以了。在第二段中提出自己的看法，并稍加说明。举例论证可作为第三段单独成段，充分、生动地论证自己的观点。最后在结论段中，回应主题，结束作文。,TS:Differentopinionsonopportunity.SomethinkOthersthink初稿：(1)Somepeoplethinkthattheopportunityisveryfew,becausetheyhavenevermetthechance.(2)Butothersthinkthatthereareopportunitieshereandthere.(3)Everyonemaymeetsomekindofopportunitiessometimes.,点石成金：(1)Peoplehavedifferentopinionsuponopportunity.(2)Somepeopleregardopportunityararethingthatisdifficulttoget.(3)Butotherpeoplethinkthateveryonehassomekindofopportunitiesfromtimetotime.锦上添花：(1)Thereisnoconsensusofopinionamongpeopleastohowtoviewopportunity.(2)Somepeoplesuggestthatopportunityissorarethatonlytheluckiestpersonscanobtainthem,whilesomeotherpeoplearguethatinasenseeveryonehassomekindofopportunityfromtimetotime.,点评：第一段先概述人们对于机会的一般看法，提出积极的和消极的两种，为后文埋下伏笔。积极的看法为我所用，大书特书；消极的看法当作“靶子”，大批特批。因而，看似闲笔，实则有用；貌似松散，实则紧凑。,TS:Iamforthelatteropinion.“Everydoghasitsday.”Thosewhoclaimthattheyareunlucky,初稿：(4)Iamforthelatteropinions.(5)Thereisawesternsaying“Everydoghasitsday.”(6)Thereareopportunitiesforeverybody.(7)Everybodyhasopportunitiestogetsuccess.(8)Thereisnoexceptiontothisrule.(9)Peoplewhoclaimthattheydonthavegoodluckmaybethosewhoarenotabletotakeopportunities.(10)They,maybe,areunabletorecognizeorusethem.(11)Wemusttrytofinditandmakeuseofit.,点石成金：(4)Asforme,Ipreferthelatteropinion.(5)Awesternsayingtellsus,“Everydoghasitsday.”(6)Everybodyhasopportunitiestobesuccessful.Infact,noonecanbedeniedbyopportunities.(7)Thosewhoclaimthattheydonthavegoodluckjustcantrecognizeormakegooduseofopportunity.(8)Wemusttryourbesttofinditandmakeuseofit.,锦上添花：(3)AsfarasIamconcerned,Iagreewiththelatteropiniontosomeextent.(4)Asawesternsayinggoes,“Everydoghasitsday,”whichmeanseverybodyhasopportunitiestobesuccessfulinhisorherlife.(5)Infact,noonecanbedeniedaccesstoopportunity.(6)Thosewhoclaimthattheyhavebeenoutofluck,justcantrecognizeormakegooduseofopportunities.(7)So,wemusttryourbesttosearchforandcreatemoreopportunities.,点评：第二段正面提出个人观点。先用谚语说明、再作具体分析。然后批判那种说自己运气不好的人，一针见血地指出其要害所在。有破有立，批评消极观点是为了反衬正面看法，最后总结我们今后应该怎么做。,TS:Awisemanisalwayscreatinghisopportunity.Forexample.Somethinglearnedfromthestory.,初稿：(12)Forexample,mostpeoplesawanapplefallingdownfromanappletree,butonlyNewtondiscoveredthelawofgravity.点石成金：(9)Forexample,beforeNewtonalmosteveryonehadseenanapplefallingdownfromatree,butonlyNewtondiscoveredthelawofgravity.(10)Thereasonisthathehaddevelopedagoodhabitofthinkingoveranswerstoproblemsandstucktohisstudiesinspiteofdifficulties.,锦上添花：(8)LetstakeNewton,theworld-famousscientist,asanexample.Beforehimalmosteveryonehadseenanapplefallingfromatree,butonlyNewtondiscoveredthelawofgravity.(9)Thereasonisthathehaddevelopedagoodhabitofthinkingoveranswerstoproblemsandstucktohisstudiesinspiteofdifficulties.(10)Thisstorytellsusthatawisemanisalwayscreatinghisopportunityratherthanwaitingforit.,点评：第三段，空洞的说理是不能服人的，于是此段以大科学家牛顿发现万有引力为例，通过讲故事，指出故事包含的道理，读起来意味深长，论证了作者观点的正确性，增强了说服力。,初稿：(13)So,wecanconcludethattherearemanyopportunitiesaroundusandeveryoneisequalinfrontofthem.(14)Thosewhomakepreparationscangraspopportunities.点石成金：(11)Inaword,Ibelievethatopportunitiesarearoundusinoursocietyandeveryoneisequalforthem.(12)Onlythepreparedandqualifiedcancatchthem.,锦上添花：(11)Inconclusion,Ibelievethatopportunitiesareabundantinoursocietyandeveryoneisequalforthem.(12)Wecanacquirethemonlyifwearewellpreparedandqualified.(13)Asaproverbsays,“Opportunitiesarewellonlyforthepreparedmind.”,点评：第四段总结全文，重申自己的观点：机会是很多的，且对每个人都是公平的，只有当我们有准备、有能力时才会抓住机遇。最后用谚语结束全文，为整篇文章画上了一个漂亮的句号，使文章增色不少。,归纳总结常用套路：so;inaword;insum;insummary;tosumup;thus;inconclusion;inshort;finally;therefore;then;hence;atlast;ingeneral;inbrief;afterall,
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