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2013年12月大学英语四级考试真题(二)Part 1 writing (30 minutes) For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay based on the picture below. You should start your essay with a brief account of the increasing use of the mobile phone in peoples life and explain the Consequence of overusing it. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.People are crossing the street looking at their cell phones and using walking sticks in order to see.从批改网中选取的学生高分作文，希望同学们比较，鉴别，学习。Excessively Utilizing Cell PhonesAs is revealed in the graph, it is a plain truth that people are crossing the street looking at their cell phones and utilizing walking sticks in order to see. Consequently, there is no doubt that the phenomenon arouses public concern regarding this issue. To some extent, it is an undeniable fact that the cell phones is indispensable to our lives and works. For instance, it is no exaggeration to say the cell phones undoubtedly shorten the distance of communication among people. On the contrary, the issue that people place more emphasises on the cell phones also exerts negative impacts on their lives. On the one hand, it is universally acknowledged that excessively utilizing cell phones is detrimental to the eyesight. On the other hand, excessively utilizing the cell phones imposes restrictions on daily life, which will make us pour more attentions to it instead of working. In my humble opinion, it is absolutely essential to take measures to alleviate this issue. Undoubtedly, what the most crucial thing we should bear in mind is that advantages far outweigh disadvantages. To summarize, laying more emphasises on the merits of the cell phones which will facilitate your life. (196 words) 计算机 田文雨 90分(最高分) 批改网评语：作者学术词汇使用比较准确，词汇表达较丰富，但仍需增加词汇积累；作者句法基础不错，可适当增加复杂句的使用；行文稍欠流畅，应适当增加连接词的使用；请提高文章内敛性，段落和句子要围绕主题展开The increasing use of the mobile phone in peoples lifeFrom the picture we can see that People are crossing the street looking at their cell phones and using walking sticks in order to see, which gives a big concern and discussion in the society. We can draw a conclusion that people are so rely on their mobile phone that they can not leave it. A great number of factors can account for the phenomenon, but the following maybe the essential ones. First of all, with the development of economy, everyone can purchase a mobile phone. It is widely acknowledged that the master phone has a great many of functions, such as FeiXin and QQ and so on. Secondly, with the development of technology, people can obtain the information they need on the internet. There is no denying that people can be addicted to games. As a consequence, they are indulged in network. Last but not least, a majority of people have little consciousness of self-control, in the meantime, their families and friends can not afford enough time to supervise them. From my perspective, it is indispensable for us to have a phone, by which we can communicate with others and can relieve our pressure. It is more important take measures to improve our ability to have a healthy lifestyle. Only one is aware that his life is being threatened would he starts to cultivate the conscious of self-control.（229 words） 政治高珊珊，89分，批改网评语：词文章词汇表达丰富，学术词汇积累做的也很棒；作者有一定功底，可在平时练习中增加长难句的记忆；全文结构较为严谨The overuseing of the cellphoneThis picture portrays an ironic situation, on the road, stands a man, who is completely concentrating on his cell phone whereas using a stick for direction, which implies the unprecedented popularity or even overusing of cell phones nowadays. Exaggerated as the picture is, the phenomenon behind it is rather thought-procking. With the development of high-tech equipment, especially smart phones, people in growing numbers tend to become addicted to the excessive use of them. According to a survey carried out in China Daily several days ago, almost 47% of citizens explain that they would experience certain kind of anxiety without cellphones at hand. Meanwhile, the overusing of cellphones, firstly, would exert detrimental impact on the health of us. Whats worse, it would perform a negative character in interpersonal relationship since we have less time to communicate. Judging from the evidence above, certain measures should be taken. Firstly, certain institutions in China should launch relevant campaigns to limit the excessive oust of cellphones. Moreover, we, as college students, should put emphasis on it right from ourselves as a start. (176 words) 电气 王科 90分(最高分) 批改网评语：文章用词灵活多样，学术词汇使用也比较准确；能够很好的使用长难句且句法很棒；过渡词和衔接词使用的比较不错The overusing of cell phonesThis picture shows: on the road, stands a man, who is completely focus on his cellphone whereas using a stick for direction, which implies the unprecedented popularity or even overusing cell phones nowadays. Exaggerated as the picture is, the phenomenon behind it is rather thought-provoking. With the development of high-technology equipment, especially smart phones, people in growing numbers tend to become addicted to the excessive use of them. According to a survey carried out in China Daily several days ago, almost 48% of citizens explain that they would experience certain kind of anxiety without cellphones at hand. Meanwhile, the overusing cellphones, firstly would exert detrimental impact on the health of us. Whats worse, it would perform a negative character in interpersonal relationship since we have less time to communicate. Judging from the evidence above, measures should be taken. Firstly, certain institutions in China should launch relevant campaigns to limit the excessive use of cellphones. Moreover, as college students, we should put emphasis on it right from ourselves as a start. (169 words) 电气, 陶吉省, 89分，批改网评语：文章用词灵活多样，学术词汇使用也比较准确；使用了部分简单的长难句，可适当增加一些复杂的长句；过渡词和衔接词使用的比较不错Excessive use of mobile phoneAs we all know mobile phones are the main invention of modern technology. They are completely part of our daily lives If we look at our society, we can see that all kinds of people are using mobile phones. Maybe they have many advantages, but they also experience drawbacks. Exaggerated as the picture is, the phenomenon behind it is rather thought-procking. With the development of high-tech equipment, especially smart phones, people in growing numbers tend to become addicted to the excessive use of them. According to a survey carried out in China Daily several days ago, almost 47% of citizens explain that they would experience certain kind of anxiety without cellphones at hand. Meanwhile, the overusing of cellphones, firstly, would exert detrimental impact on the health of us. Whats worse, it would perform a negative character in interpersonal relationship since we have less time to communicate. Science and technology and modern tools should be served as an angel to improve our living standard, rather than a devil to disturb our normal life and communication. Just imagine, live one day without mobile phone, will you be relaxed? (185 words)电气, 高頌, 89分，批改网评语：用词灵活多样，也能较灵活地使用一些学术词汇；作者有一定功底，可在平时练习中增加长难句的记忆；全文结构较为严谨3
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