高考英语作文的润色与提高

高 考 英 语 作 文 的 润 色 与 提 高以应用文为主 专 题 一 ： 优 秀 作 文 的 基 本 特 征 优 秀 高 考 英 语 作 文 的 六 个 基 本 特 征1、 层 次 不 乱 2、 句 式 多 变3、 亮 点 若 干 3、 巧 妙 串 联4、 蠢 错 不 犯 6、 整 洁 卷 面 层 次 不 乱 开 头 ： 引 出 话 题 （ 第 一 段 ）主 体 ： 陈 述 观 点 或 给 出 建 议 （ 第 二 段 ）结 尾 ： 呼 应 、 总 结 （ 第 三 段 ） 题目：假设你是李华，你的朋友Liz刚刚进入高中，在交友上面存在一些问题，请你根据如下提示，帮她度过难关。1.要交朋友首先要做一个朋友。2.要和朋友同甘共苦；患难之中的朋友才是真的朋友。3.友谊需要时间和投入(effort). Dear Liz, _ Yours, Li Hua 层 次 不 乱 开 头 ： 引 入 话 题主 体 ： 陈 述 观 点 或 给 出 建 议结 尾 ： 呼 应 、 总 结通 常 只 需 要 2-3句 话 。 提 出 话 题 ，并 说 明 你 有 建 议 。 第 一 段 ： 引 出 话 题 通 常 只 需 要 2-3句 话 。Im sorry to hear that you have trouble in making friends. As far as im concerned/For my part/In my opinion, there are some ways to solve this problem. 层 次 不 乱 开 头 ： 引 入 话 题主 体 ： 陈 述 观 点 或 给 出 建 议结 尾 ： 呼 应 、 总 结通 常 只 需 要 2-3句 话 。 提 出 话 题 ，并 说 明 你 有 建 议 。每一个观点或建议之间要保持层次清晰，加上适当的过渡词语。 第 二 段 ： 陈 述 观 点 或 建 议To begin with, you should be a friend. Then, you need.Lastly, it is also important to do.First and foremost, you should be a friend. Secondly, you need. Last but not least, it is also important to do. 层 次 不 乱 开 头 ： 引 入 话 题主 体 ： 陈 述 观 点 或 给 出 建 议结 尾 ： 呼 应 、 总 结通 常 只 需 要 2-3句 话 。每一个观点或建议之间要保持层次清晰，加上适当的过渡词语。总 结 ， 并 提 出 美 好 愿 景 。 第 三 段 ： 呼 应 、 总 结 ， 或 者 表 达 愿 景 。 All in all/ In short/ In conclusion/ In a word, you can improve your present situation. And i believe , with your trying, you can overcome. Dear Liz, Im sorry to hear that you have trouble in making friends. As far as im concerned/For my part/In my opinion, there are some ways to . First and foremost/ To begin with, you should be a friend. Secondly, you need. Last but not least, it is also important to do. All in all/ In short/ In conclusion/ In a word, you can improve your present situation. And I believe , with your trying, you can overcome. Yours, Li Hua 句 式 多 变 长 短 变 化主 、 被 动 变 化主 语 变 化同 义 词 变 化同 功 能 句 型 变 化横 向 比 较 变 化 亮 点 若 干 高 中 词 汇高 中 常 见 短 语高 级 句 型 各 种 复 合 句倒 装 句强 调 句 型虚 拟 语 气 句 型非 谓 语 动 词 结 构 巧 妙 串 联 起 ： first of all, to begin with, above all.承 ： in addition, besides.转 ： however, on the other hand.合 ： in my opinion, all in all, in a word. 蠢 错 不 犯 ： 初 中 二 年 级 学 生 就 应 该 掌 握 的基 本 语 言 表 达 能 力 。1. I very like the book. 2. He was very angrily. 3. There have many student in the classroom. 4. The car is yellow color. 整 洁 卷 面 英 文 书 写 大 方 、 圆 润 、 自 然 ；词 与 词 间 距 适 当字 母 大 小 适 当无 大 面 积 涂 改不 影 响 交 际 专 题 二肃 清 基 础 语 言 错 误 中 学 生 英 语 写 作 中 常 见 的 14种 语 言 错 误 ：1.主 谓 不 一 致My father and I likes going fishing by the lake. Large quantities of soil has been washed away. 2.时 态 、 语 态 混 用Last night, I had enjoyed a party. The painting on the wall damaged seriously. was 3.句 子 成 分 残 缺I stood up and saw there a boy. The young man running in the street. was was 4.习 惯 搭 配 误 用I once heard from the animal like this.We passed away the building. ofby 5.名 词 单 、 复 数 不 分I made many friend in the summer camp. We can get some informations from the Internet. 6.动 词 单 、 复 数 不 分Our teacher often say that success lie in hard work.Mr. Smith, together with some students, are coming to our school. 7.赘 词 现 象 多 发I hope you can return back to our school soon. Well hold a party on next Sunday. 8.近 义 词 的 误 用The school requests that all the students should wear the school uniform. I quarreled with my teacher about my grades. 9.基 本 词 汇 拼 写 错 误I flied to New York directly from Beijing. This will be done immediatly. 10.前 后 人 称 不 一 致The boy was born in a poor family but she works hard. We watched a few movies and we loved it. 11.动 词 原 形 作 主 语 /宾 语Take a walk after dinner is very good for you. At that moment, I didnt feel like take a walk. 12.逻 辑 主 语 与 主 句 主 语 不 一 致Preparing dinner, the doorbell rang. Walking in the street, a car hit an old man. 13.一 个 简 单 句 出 现 两 个 谓 语There was no work to do, he went back home. I received your email, I was very excited. beingWhen and 14.中 式 英 语Next week have a party. I sorry you I cant with you go Beijing. 有 则 改 之 ， 无 则 加 勉 ；用 心 则 易 ， 无 心 则 难 。 专 题 三 ： 第 一 反 应 与 克 制 第 一 反 应 他 是 个 好 人 。第 一 反 应 测 试 ：He is a good man. generous, humorous, interesting, smart, gentle, warm-hearted, hospitable, easy-going, devoted, open-minded, modest, friendly 对不起，我不能和你一起去北京了。Im sorry that I cant go to Beijing with you. Would you accept my heartfelt apology that I cant make it to Beijing with you as we have planned? I sorry you I cant with you go Beijing. 存 点 钱 是 很 重 要 的 。There is no denying/ It is beyond any dispute that depositing some money in the bank is crucial. Sometimes, whether you have money at hand means the difference of life or death for a loved one. 专 题 四 ： 打 动 人 心 的 句 型 和 打 翻 人 胃 的 句 型 审题： “十年后的我” - “感性的、充满想象的”切忌：套用了太多所谓的“万能句式” ，破坏了这种“感性”，使之变得“太理性”、“太刚”了： （1）运用了大量的表示顺序的词句(太过理性)： Firstly, secondly, thirdly, finally; To start with；Last but not least; My future life is as follows. 审题： “十年后的我” - “感性的、充满想象的”切忌：套用了太多所谓的“万能句式” ，破坏了这种“感性”，使之变得“太理性”、“太刚”了： （1）运用了大量的表示顺序的词句(太过理性)： Firstly, secondly, thirdly, finally; To start with；Last but not least; My future life is as follows. （2）运用了大量的表达强烈观点句式（语气太刚）： I hold the point of view that There is no doubt that I strongly believe that I am firmly convinced that (there will be exciting and wonderful changes in /it gives me a strong body) It goes without saying that What I want to stress is that (health is very important to us) （3）运用了大量的总结、转换、强调、转折等语气、句式，不够得体。 All in all, / Generally speaking, As a matter of fact, As for my spare time, As far as I am concerned, I hope become a doctor. When it comes to my own family, it occurs to me that I will have 2 children. It is known to us that family is the most important thing in our life. On the one hand, on the other hand 注意：在结构清楚，逻辑通顺的基础上，要注意句型的多变，句子的优美。 （1）运用大量的强调句和倒装句，给人非常生涩的感觉。 In my spare time, so active am I that I will go fishing with my family. It is after ten years that（2）在同一篇短文里，堆砌了大量同样的句式： Its I that want to be a teacher; It is I that am fond on children. It is I that like making a lot of friends. It is famous city that Ill go to（3）中式英语，意思相差较大,或完全不达意。 Lover Organize a family I hope my will be little speak English. 那些能稍微充满想象的句子，就显得难能可贵：My two sons surrounding me smile like sunshine.On weekends, I will take my family to the beach to have a rest, enjoying the sun rises. go out for a picnic, hugging the nature and strengthening our emotionclever and optimistic, my daughter is going to be the sort of girl who spread sunshine to others through her smile.Love can add delightful color to life. My Chinese Dream To make our motherland become more and more powerful, teenagers should play a role in realizing Chinese dream. Recently, our class has held a meeting about this. There I will discuss how I understand Chinese dream. Maybe everyone has a dream, whatever it is. Dream is like water, which can water our heart; dream is like sunshine, which can melt the snow; dream is like wind, which can blow away fog in front of our eyes. When I was a child, I wanted to be a doctor, who can save the dying people. And now I want to make my fanily live a better life. O n my way to dream, I know there will be some troubles. However hard the situation is, whatever I do in the future, I wont give up. As the saying goes, “Where there is a will, there is a way.” We cant change the past, but, we can change our future. Dear Liz, Im sorry to hear that you have trouble in making friends. As far as im concerned/For my part/In my opinion, there are some ways to . First and foremost, you should be a friend. Secondly, you need. Last but not least, it is also important to do. All in all/ In short/ In conclusion/ In a word, you can improve your present situation. And I believe , with your trying, you can overcome. Yours, Li Hua Thank You!