第9周读后续写-2021名师指津-人教版课件

单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,2020/7/29,0,读后续写,第九周,读后续写第九周,1,三大原则,1.原文一致原则,内容要,前后衔接,，,上下连贯,语言表达,风格一致,。,2.正能量原则,故事内容一定要,正能量,，弘扬社会主义核心价值观。如迷路了但最终一定回到了家；失败了或遇到困难了，但最终一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定,是言归于好，,和睦相处,；犯错了，最后一定会改过自新，重新做人；贼逃了，最后一定是绳之以法，,等等。,3.曲折性原则,凡是,故事都应有,跌宕,起伏,，其中人物会遇到困难或问题，但,最终能解决,。,写作指导,三大原则1.原文一致原则写作指导,2,四个步骤,1,3,4,2,读懂大意，理清脉络,读所给的不完整故事，弄清大意和主题,，理清故事的主要,人物和事件。,细读首句，构思框架,仔细阅读所给两段的首句，结合正能量结尾，思考大致框架。,修改润色，整洁誊写,思考再三，把修正润色后的续写整洁地写入答卷。,增加细节，开始写作,依据情节发和常识，在确定的 框架内，可按“所见/遇所想，所为所感”等构思具体细节。,四个步骤1342读懂大意，理清脉络读所给的不完整故事，弄清大,3,阅读下面材料，,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为,150,左右。,读后续写,Ali and his younger sister,Zahra,lived with t,heir parents in a poor neighborhood.Their mothe,r was very sick and,their father,was struggling to find a job,an,d they,had only a little money,with which to buy food.As they had not paid the rent for several months,the landlord was breathing down their necks(,盯着他们,).,One day,Ali,took,Zahras shoes,to,a shoe repairman,to be fixed,but,he,lost them on the way home.,It wasnt until,he got home,that,he realized he had lost the shoes.,He,was afraid that,his parents would be angry and disappointed,so,he,begged his,sister to keep it secret.,阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一,4,Zahra,agreed and the two decided to share Al,is running shoes.Zahras school hours were in the morning,so,she would wear them first.After school,sh,e would rush back and give them to Ali.He could then run to hi,s school,which,began in the afternoon.,Although,he,ran,as fast as he could,Ali often,arrived late and was warned by the,school.,Ali,heard about,a long distance race,that,was held for the boys in the city.,When,he learned that the third prize was a new pair of shoes,he,decided to take part,.He,ran ho,me excitedly and,promised,his sister,that,he would win her the new shoes.,Zahra agreed and the two d,5,The day of rac,e arrived.,Ali,had a s,trong start,but,halfway,through the race he,began to get tired a,nd h,is legs began to ache,.,Getting more and more exhausted,(,筋疲力尽的,),he,thought o,nly of Zahra and his promise to her.,Dreaming of the new shoes,he would win for his sister gave him strength,and he stayed right behind the two fastest runners,determined to finish third.,Suddenly,as,the finish line drew near,another runner,collided(,碰撞,)with,Ali from behind and he,crashed to,the ground.,Paragraph 1,：,Ali looked up and saw the other boys rushing ahead.,Paragraph 2,：,Filled with pleasure,Ali walked home quickly.,The day of race arrived.A,6,读懂大意，理清脉络,主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，特别要弄清故事的,人物，时态,(通常是一般过去时)，,事件,(故事的起因和经过)，,语言特色,(以便在续写时语言特色前后一致，保持,不变,)，等等。,人物时态和事件 语言特色不要变,1,读懂大意，理清脉络主要是根据记叙文的六要素弄清文章大意，特别,7,characters,Ali,Zahra,Ali,s parents,another runner,tense,simple past tense,events,Ali and his younger sister,Zahra,lived,with t,heir parents,in a poor neighborhood.,One day,Ali took Zahras shoes to be fixed,but he,lost them,on the way home.He shared his shoes with Zahra to go to school.,Ali,decided to take part in a long distance race to win Zahra new shoes.,In the race,Ali got tired soon,but he dreamed of the new shoes for his sister that,he determined to finish third.,Suddenly,another runner collided with Ali and Ali crashed to the ground.,characters Ali,Zahra,Alis,8,事件,梳理,阿里和他的妹妹萨拉和他们的父母非常贫穷，生活拮据。,一天，,阿里拿萨拉的鞋子去修补，但是在回家的路上弄丢了。,他把自己的鞋子借给妹妹一起穿。,为了给妹妹赢得作为奖品的新鞋，,阿里决定参加长跑。,在比赛中，阿里很快就累了，但他为了妹妹的新鞋，,决心要拿第三名。,突然，,另一个跑步者与阿里相撞，阿里摔倒在地。,事件阿里和他的妹妹萨拉和他们的父母非常贫穷，生活拮据。,9,语,言,特,色,1.,关联词语,文中使用了,so,but,suddenly,等连接词语。,2.,分词短语,Getting more and more exhausted,(,筋疲力尽的,),he thought only of Zahra and his promise to her.,Dreaming of the new shoes，,he would win for his sister.,Filled with pleasure,Ali walked home quickly.,3.,强调结构,It wasnt until,he got home,that,.,4.,各类从句,让步,状语从句：,Although,he ran,as fast as he could,.,时间状语从句：,When,he learned that.,定语从句：,.a long distance race,that,was held for the boys,.,宾语从句：,.,promised,his sister,that,he would win.,语1.关联词语2.分词短语3.强调结构4.各类从句,10,细读首句，构思框架,由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的框架。,2,两段首句定一框,二框二首正能量,第二段的框架，由第二段首句与正能量结尾来确定。,细读首句，构思框架由续写的第一段首句与第二段首句确定第一段的,11,Ali looked up and,saw the other boys rushing ahead,.,（,阿里抬起头，看见其他男孩,跑,在前面。,）,Filled with pleasure,Ali walked home,quickly,.,（阿里满心欢喜地快步走回家。）,第9周读后续写-2021名师指津-人教版课件,12,Paragraph 1：,1.,由续写的第一段,首句,“,saw the other boys rushing ahead,”可知，,在阿里摔倒的时候，其他男孩都已经超越他了。,2,.,由第二段首,句,“,Filled with pleasure,Ali walked home,quickly,.”,可知,，,下段比赛已经结束，阿里开心地快步走回家，证明应是得到了想要的奖品。,本段,写阿里在比赛中的所想、所做和所遇。,注意结尾要与下段语义衔接。,构思框架,两段首句定一框,Paragraph 1：构思框架两段首句定一框,13,由第一段框架可知，第一段中坚持完成比赛的阿里得到了奖品。那本段应是阿里赶着回家把鞋子送给妹妹，兄妹俩的所说、所做、所感。,Paragraph,2,：,1.,由续写的第二段首句,“,Filled with pleasure,”,可知，阿里赢得了他想要的奖品，急着回家送给妹妹。,2.,由正能量结尾可知，,阿里实现了当初对妹妹的承诺。要写出妹妹等待礼物时的紧张，兄妹俩对得到奖品的激动之情，突出哥哥对妹妹的承诺和爱。,构思框架,二框二首正能量,由第一段框架可知，第一段中坚持完成比赛的阿里得到了奖品。那本,14,增加细节，开始写作,在已定框架范围内，依据情节发展和生活常识，推断故事中人物,所见、所闻、所思、所说、所做,等给每段增加5至8个具体细节，我们称之为“58细节添加法”。,3,增加细节，开始写作在已定框架范围内，依据情节发展和生活常识，,15,Paragraph,1,Ali looked up and saw the other boys rushing ahead.,（阿里抬起头，看见其他男孩跑在前面。）,构思,从所给材料结尾和本段首句可知，在他摔倒时大家已经冲到前面,;,从下段首句,Filled with pleasure,说明阿里在比赛结束时是开心的，而且想快点回家说明好消息,，所以本段应是写,阿里在比赛中的所想、所做