高三一轮复习写作指导

单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,高三一轮复习之写作指导韩 彦 瑾,沈阳二中,How to improve writing?,第五档（很好）,（,2125分,完全完成了试题规定的任务。,覆盖所有内容要点。,应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。,语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或高级词汇所致；具有较强的语言运用能力。,有效地使用了句间的连接成份，使全文结构紧凑。完全达到了预期的写作目的。,第四档（好）,（,16-20分）,完全完成了试题规定的任务。,虽然漏掉一、二个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。,应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的需要。,语法结构会词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试叫复杂语法结构或词汇所致。,应用简单的语句间的连接成份，使全文结构紧凑。,达到了预期的写作目的。,第三档（适当）,（,11-15分）,基本完成了试题规定的任务。,虽然漏掉了一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。,应用的语法结构或词汇能满足任务的要求。,有一些语法结构或方面的错误，但不影响理解。,应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文连贯。整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。,第二档（较差）（6-10分）,未恰当完成试题规定的任务。,漏掉或未描写清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容。,语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。,有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。,较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。,信息未能清楚地传达给读者。,第一档,（,差）,（,1-5分）,未完成试题规定的任务。,明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未能理解试题要求。,语法结构单调，词汇项目有限。,较多语法或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解。,缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯。,信息未能传达给读者。,0分,未能传达给读者任何信息；内容太少，无法评判。写的内容均与所要求的内容无关或所写内容无法看清。,比较优秀的作文;条理清晰,用词得当,结构合理,书写很好;得,23,分,语言表达流畅;层次分明;连接不够;得,19,分.,语言不地道;中文式思维;词汇错误;卷面有涂改;得,14,分.,卷面不整洁;涂改较多;语言错误多;层次不清;得,11,分,用词不当;语句毛病多;大小写;标点符号;书写不清等等;得,6,分.,兴奋点,1.语言简洁,层次清晰.,2.选词准确,句式多变.,3.内容连贯,表达地道,无明显错误.,4.书写规范,卷面整洁.,阅卷老师的厌倦点和兴奋点,厌倦点,1语言层次不清,令人感到单调乏味.,2.词汇有错误,句子结构单一.,3.表达不地道,汉语味太浓.,4.书写潦草,令人无法辨认,得分较低的作文：,1.,词汇错误;语言不地道,中文式思维,2.语句毛病多;层次不清,3.段落层次不分明;连接不够;,4.书面不整洁,较优秀的作文：,语言表达流畅;层次分明,条理清晰,用词得当,结构合理,书写很好,Words problems,Sentences problems,Paragraphs problems,Handwriting problems,Problems,of,writing,Part one,Diction writing,(the choice and use of words),1 选择适当的词汇:,1 The child likes _(seeing,watching,looking),TV.,2 The rain _(had,caused,led)a lot of effect on,the crops.,3 In area China is the third largest _(state,nation,country)in the world.,4 I will have a/an _(date;appointment),with Professor Liu this afternoon on my term paper.,5 Finally,our class _(won,beat)their class.,watching,had,country,appointment,beat,2 选择具体的词汇,3.He is a,good,man.,He is a _,_man.(具体词汇),kind/honest/generous/brave,/selfless/warm-hearted,2 The food is,wonderful.,The food is,_,_.(,具体词汇,),tasty/delicious,fresh/appetizing,1.It is often,bad,here in spring.,It is often _ here in spring.(具体词汇),windy and dusty,一般词汇,(words with a,general meaning),具体词汇,(words with a,specific meaning),“走出房间”,，,general,的词是:,walk,out of the room,但是小偷走出房间应该说:,slip,out of the room,小姐走出房间应该说,：,sail,out of the room,小孩走出房间应该说,：,dance,out of the room,老人走出房间应该说:,stagger,out of the room,3 选择书面的词语,1 It is hard to get the general idea of this article.(口),It is _to _ the general idea of this (书),2 A friend is a guy you can depend on when you are,in trouble.(口),A friend is a _ you can depend on when you,are in trouble.(书 ),3 A teacher is someone/somebody who helps with,your studies.(口),A teacher is a _who helps with your studies.(书),difficult,grasp,person,person,4.不要用中文的思维来写英语词汇:(chinglish),1 新年就要到了.The New Year is going to arrive.,2 光阴似箭!Time is like an arrow!,3接电话receive the phone,4人山人海 people mountain people sea,5.好好学习,天天向上 Good good study,day day up,The New Year is around the corner.,Times flies!,Answer the phone,hundreds of thousands of people,Study hard and youll make progress every day.,Part two,Sentence writing,1 句子要简洁,不要啰嗦,1 Mr.Smith usually likes to drink all kinds of wines that,are produced in France.(wordy),Mr.Smith _(concise),2 When I pushed the door open,I saw a group of young,people.(wordy),_,I saw a group of,young people.(concise),3 She is attractive in appearance,but she is a rather,foolish person.,She is_,but _,prefers French wine.,Pushing the door open,attractive,rather foolish.,2 句子符合语法规则,不要犯语法错误,1There are 40%of the students are against this opinion.,2 Seeing from the top of the mountain,the city is nice.,3 He worked hard,therefore,he was a good student.,4 Only in this country you can find such a social custom.,5 His left eye is blind.,Seen,and,can you,He is blind in the left eye.,句子与句子间的衔接:,注意:别将moreover,therefore,however,nevertheless,for example,for instance 等副词性的连接词当作连词,使用,否则就会犯堆砌句子的错误.,He worked hard,therefore,he was a good student.,He worked hard,and therefore,he was a good student,.,He worked hard,;therefore,he was a good student.,He worked hard,.,Therefore,he was a good student.,1 a)Its too late to go to the cinema now.,b)I have an important meeting to attend after lunch.,Its too late to go the cinema now._I have an important meeting to attend after lunch.,2.,a)Go to see the doctor at once.,b)Your cold may get worse.,Go to see the doctor at once,_ your cold may get worse.,3.a)He saw the boy in the street.,b)He stopped to speak to him.,c)He gave him a penny.,_the boy in the street,he stopped to speak to him_ gave him a penny.,句与句的衔接,Besides,or/otherwise,Seeing,and,Part three,Paragraph,writing,_ Jenny is a Canadian girl.We have been pen friends for more than three years._ I found her information when I was reading an English magazine and _ I wrote to her soon.In my first letter I introduced myself and told her something about my family.We keep in touch with each._,We also talk about our school life and our future.She will visit our city this summer.,A.,Believe it or not B.Of course,C.As you know D.Whats more,Questions:Where you should put them?,W