英语-志勇-作文讲解课件

单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,Composition,2016.1.15,梁志勇,北京高考作文,15 +20,假设你是红星中学的学生李华。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，为校刊”英语园地“写一篇短文，讲述上学期你参加英语演讲比赛的过程。词数不少于60.,标准范文,Last term an English speech contest was held in our school. Seeing the notice, many students took interest in it. My English teacher thought it was a good chance for me to improve my English and encouraged me to take part. So I decided to have a try. During the preparation, my teacher offered me great help. She not only polished my speech draft but also corrected my pronunciation. As a result, my speech improved greatly. Then the day for the competition came. I did a good job and got the first prize! I owed it all to my teacher. Without her help, I wouldnt have got such a good result.,高考作文高分卷的特点,外在美,：第一印象很重要！书写清楚，字母匀称，词、行间距适当，卷面整洁。,结构美,：有合理的段落层次，多为,3,段式，条理清晰；每段有每段的主题。,词汇美,：,词汇反映你知识贮存量的多少，也是衡量英语水平的一个重要标志。,like,be fond of, be addicted to help,do sb a favor,句式美,：,运用得当的,高级句式结构,可以给文章增色不少，从而使整篇文章因此而生辉 。,衔接美,：,使用恰当的,连接词,，对写一篇有“英语味”的文章很重要，能使文章上下衔接自然、条理清晰。,结合生活中的一个事例，用英语写一篇短文，谈谈微笑的作用。,内容包括：,(1)你是如何看待微笑的作用的；,(2)谈谈你所经历的让你最感动或给你印象最深刻的一次微笑；,(3)你对微笑的感悟。,Which composition feels more attractive, why?,Discussion- 找出这篇作文的错误并改正,People often say,A smile can make you ten years younger. Not only smile can help us forget the unhappy things, but also it help us keep good mood. Once I failed in my history exam. I are very sad. Later, I tell my grandma this thing say I hard-working history every day,but history still not good. I didnt know what I could do. Finally, I passed the exam becuase of her smile and encouragement.You dont give up becuase failure is the mother of success. my grandma said . I know the kindness smile is likes the sun, can warmed our heart.,你校英语社团部要组织一次英语赛， 就“是否应该缩短中学生在校时间为,8,小时”这一论题进行辩论，请你作为正方代表，写一份发言稿，内容要点如下：,1.,保证充足睡眠,2.,提高学习效率,3.,增加自主学习时间 注意：,1.,词数,100,左右,2.,可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯,3.,辩论稿的开头已为你写好（不计入总词数）。,As a senior high student, I strongly recommend that,语法篇,I strongly recommend that should shorten school time into eight hours.,I strongly recommend that the time students devoted to studying in school should be reduced to eight hours a day. The main reasons accounting for it are as follows.,你再看这开头,Short students time in school can have a good effect on study, it can important for students study xiaolu, and increase students own time.,In my opinion, we must have enough time to study, but we also should keep enough time to relax and sleep, either of them are important. Because of we have time to relax, we can study energetic. Reduce study time also can improve the quality of our school life.,你再看这词汇,欣赏一下这篇文章的句式结构,If equal amount of work have to be accomplished with a declined school time, study efficiently is expected to be enhanced. Moreover, extra-curricular time will make up more of the students schedule. That is to say, chances are we can make a better use of our time.,卷面篇,太挤了,太乱了,太空了,太潦草了,太花了,太没谱了,标点呢？段呢？,工整的字体难掩你每句都错的事实啊！,别抄阅读理解！,过长,答题不可越界,作文五档：（ 从教师阅卷印象角度划分）,漂漂亮亮 （,1720,分）,有模有样 （,1416,分）,马马虎虎 （,1114,分）,稀里糊涂 （,610,分）,一塌糊涂 （,05,分）,生活中，你自己或他人曾有过物品不慎丢失而又找回的经历，其间有烦恼、有惊喜、有感慨,请就此写一篇英语短文。,主要内容包括：1)丢失的物品；,2)物品失而复得的经过；,3)你的感想。,注意：1. 词数不少于120个；,2. 不能使用真实姓名和学校名称。,Practice,【,审题,抓准信息,快速推断,】,项目,结论,体裁,_,话题,_,时态,_,人称,_,记叙文,物品失而复得的经过和感想,一般过去时为主,第一人称,writing,(1)我仍然记得上学期我在学校的那一天,(,2,)我丢了眼镜。,(3)一个下雨的下午，我来到学校图书馆，希望去消磨时间。,(4) 我一意识到(丢眼镜)就返回去，结果发现图书馆关门了。,(5)第二天我返回图书馆时发现眼镜不见了。,(,6,)我感到烦恼,。,(,7,)我的同班同学也帮忙了,.,(,8,)一会儿之后，一位老师打电话告诉了我一个好消息。,(,9,)没有人会知道那时我多么高兴。,(,10,)我体会到，一方面，今后我应该更加细心，另一方面，我们应该乐于助人,(3)一个下雨的下午，我来到学校图书馆，希望去消磨时间。,(4) 我一意识到(丢眼镜)就返回去了，结果发现图书馆关门了。,(5)第二天我返回图书馆时发现眼镜不见了。,(,8,)一会儿之后，一位老师打电话告诉了我一个好消息。,come to. to do/ doing.,kill time,hardly .when.,only to find.,the next day,。不见了（be gone/ missing,）,a piece of good news,Instructions,I still remember a day last term when I was in our school. I lost my glasses,.,One rainy afternoon, I came to the school library, hoping to kill time.,hardly had,I noticed it,when,I returned, only to find the library closed. The next day when I went back to the library, I found they were gone. I was worried. My classmates also,helped me,.,A short while later, a teacher called me and told me a piece of good news.,No one could tell how delighted I was at that time. From the experience, I learned that on the one hand, I should be careful enough in future, and on the other hand, we should be ready to help each other and care for each other.,【成篇衔接过渡，连句成篇】,书面表达有方法,三段结构把架搭,十句中文心中划,主谓时态要一致,每句短语，句型化,特殊句型锦添花,Conclusion,高考英语写作中,怎样使用复杂结构,1.,适当的语态,2.,使用不定式,3.,使用过去分词,4.,使用,V.+ing,形式,5.,使用名词性从句,6.,使用定语从句,7.,使用虚拟语气,8.,使用倒装句,感叹句,怎样运用复杂结构：,怎样运用复杂结构：,1.,主动转被动,People suggest that the conference be put off. (,一般,),that the conference be put off.,(,高级,),The advisor is expected to work,4 hours a week .,We expect the advisor to work 4 hours a week .,It is suggested,2.,使用不定式,3.,使用过去分词,In order to earn money by myself and broaden my horizons,She walked out of the room and many students followed her. (,一般,),she,walked out of the room,.,(,高级,),，,I intend to look for a part-time job as a salesman.,（为了独立赚钱和拓宽视野）,Followed by many students,4.,使用,v-ing,形式,2,）,Ill,visit some famous scenic spots such as Mount Tai during the vacation.,（天气允许的话）,1,）,Now our school has three teachers. They teach 48 pupils. (,一般,),Now our School has three teachers,，,Weather permitting,teaching,48 pupils,.,伴随状语,What is the most important is that,5.,使用名词性从句,2,.,I can help children improve their English.(,最为重要的是,),1.I am sorry. I didn,t reply without delay.,I am sorry that I didn,t reply without delay.,6.,使用定语从句,1,）,The girl is spoken highly of. Her composition was well written. (,一般,),The girl,was,highly,spoken of.,(,高级,),2,),maybe I will work as a volunteer for a school as a teaching assistant_.(,这将丰富我的生活,),which is able to enrich my life.,which will make my life colorful.,whose composition was well written,enriching my life,7.,使用虚拟语气,我相信如果你是我，你也会做出同样的选择。,I believe that,if you were me, you would make the same choice.,8.,使用倒装句、感叹句,earn money by myself, but also it will broaden my horizons.,(,我不仅能独立赚钱,),1.,I would read and reply your email as soon as I received it.,(,我多么希望,),2. not only,but also,引起的倒装,How I wish,Not only can I,高考英语写作中,要,学会使用恰当的关联词,III.,常用的,连接词,1.,表示递进,;,在同一话题上补充内容,另外，还有,：,whats more; besides;,also; moreover; in addition,2.,表示转折关系,但是， 然而， 相反,：,but; however; yet;,instead; on the other hand;,on the contrary.,3.,表示因果关系,因为，因此，所以,:,since; as;,because (of ); so; thus; therefore; as a result;,4.,表示条件关系,如果，只要,:,if ;on condition ( that );,as long as,除非,:,unless,否则,:,or else,5.,表示时间关系,当,的时候,:,when ; while,在,之后,:,after,在,之前,:,before,直到,:,until,直到,才,:,notuntil,一,就,:,as soon as,后来， 然后,:,later;,afterwards,不久,:,soon,近来,:,lately;,recently,自从, :,since,从那时起,:,from then on,6.,表示特定的顺序关系,首先,:,firstly,最主要的,:,above all,其次,:,secondly,然后,:,then; next,最后,:,finally; in the end,7.,换一种方法表述,换句话说,:,in other words;,that is to say;,8.,进行举例说明,例如，比如,:,for instance; for example;,like; such as,that is to say, namely, actually, and so on, believe it or not,to tell you the truth, for this reason,9.,用于陈述事实,实际上,:,in fact; actually;,as a matter of fact,跟你说实话,:,to tell you the truth,10.,对一个话题进行总结,总而言之，总的来说,:,on the whole; in short; all in all; in general; in a word,finally, in conclusion, generally speaking, as you know, in the end ,其它常用到的副词,therefore ; otherwise ; finally ;,furthermore ;Thus ; namely ;,although ; afterwards ; personally;,12.,表示结果：,thus, therefore, so, as a result, seeing that, luckily, unfortunately,13,.,表示强调：,above all, indeed, surely, certainly, of course, after all, without any delay, at least, at most ,most important, undoubtedly,背诵一些题材的常识性语句,授之以鱼不如授之以渔,