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单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,读后续写策略探究,宁波市鄞州中学,LMJ,读后续写策略探究 宁波市鄞州中学 L,读后续写的具体内容,提供一段,350,词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写（,150,词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。,读后续写的具体内容提供一段350词以内的语言材料，要求考生依,第五档：,21-25,第四档：,16-20,第三档：,11-15,第二档：,6-10,第一档：,1-5,第五档： 21-25,与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。,内容比较丰富，应用了,5,个以上短文所标出的关键词语。,所使用的语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达。,比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。,第四档：,16-20,与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。第四,第五档：,21-25,与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。,内容丰富，应用了,5,个以上短文中标出的关键词语。,所使用语法结构和词汇丰富，准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。,有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。,记叙文阅读理解能力,记叙文书面表达能力,第五档： 21-25与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语,读后续写过程中存在的问题：,续写内容与所给短文在叙述意图上不一致,续写内容与所给短文在相关细节上相矛盾,续写内容与所给短文在语篇结构上不连贯,（傅咏梅，,2017,）,读后续写过程中存在的问题：续写内容与所给短文在叙述意图上不一,读后续写的能力要求,一、记叙文阅读理解能力,二、由读到写的思维能力,三、记叙文书面表达能力,（徐青，,2016,）,读后续写的能力要求一、记叙文阅读理解能力（徐青，2016）,一、记叙文阅读理解能力,浅层的信息定位能力：,深层的文本分析能力：,what, when, where, who, why, how,等,厘清故事的发展线索,明确文本的主要矛盾,关注故事的语言风格,一、记叙文阅读理解能力浅层的信息定位能力：深层的文本分析能力,阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。,One weekend in July,Jane,and her husband,Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a,lake,in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp” and,walked,away.,With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had,climbed,to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.,“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”,No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.,Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (,滴落,) somewhere,at a distance,. Quickly she followed the sound to a,stream,.,To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.,As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a,helicopter,. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her,yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.,Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark._,ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup._,2016,年,10,月高考读后续写,阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。,Read for information,who:,what:,where:,Jane, Tom,Jane was lost.,in the forest,Read for informationwho:Jane,One weekend in July,Jane,and her husband,Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a,lake,in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp” and,walked,away.,With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had,climbed,to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.,“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”,No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.,Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (,滴落,) somewhere,at a distance,. Quickly she followed the sound to a,stream,.,To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.,As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a,helicopter,. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her,yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.,Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark._,ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup._,Read for the organization,In what order is the material developed?,One weekend in July, ,As night was beginning to fall, ,Jane rose at the break of the day, ,But and it was getting dark again.,It was daybreak when Jane woke up.,time sequence,Read for the organizationIn wh,Read for the plot,behaviors,feelings,para. 1,quarrel, walked away,angry,para. 2,was lost,frightened,regretful,confused,para. 3,cried,para. 4,kept moving, had to stop, wanted,para. 5,saw, drank, ate, felt stronger,joyful, hopeful,para. 6,heard, took off, thinking,hopeful, anxious,Read for the plotbehaviorsfeel,Beginning,Climax,Ending,quarrelled,got lost,cried,wanted,saw, drank, ate,heard, took off, thinking that .,angry,frightened,regretful,(helicopters),joyful,hopeful,no more helicopters,woke up,rescued?,feelings?,BeginningClimaxEnding quarr,Read for,the language,阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。,One weekend in July,Jane,and her husband,Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a,lake,in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp” and,walked,away.,With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had,climbed,to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.,“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”,No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.,Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (,滴落,) somewhere,at a distance,. Quickly she followed the sound to a,stream,.,To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.,As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a,helicopter,. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her,yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.,Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark._,ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup._,With no path to follow, Jane, she turned around, hoping to ,Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that ,Jane rose, hungry and thirsty.,If only she had not left her mobile phone ,Never in her life had she tasted anything better.,Read for 阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构,二、由读到写的思维能力,细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落的逻辑关系；,围绕划定的,10,个,关键词，合理创新故事情节。,Para. 1: Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark.,How did Jane feel then?,How did Jane struggle through the night?,Did she fall asleep?,Para. 2: ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.,Was Jane rescued?,Who rescued Jane?,How was she rescued?,How did she feel then?,二、由读到写的思维能力细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落的逻,The underlined words,where,02,03,04,yellow blouse,walked,Tom,helicopter,Jane,lake,stream,climbed,at a distance,to her great joy,The underlined words where0203,Classify 10 key words into different groups.,_: Jane, Tom,_: walked, climbed,_: helicopter, yellow blouse,_: lake, stream, at a distance,_: to her great joy,characters,behaviors,tools,places,feelings,Classify 10 key words into dif,三、记叙文书面表达能力,(,一,),语言的丰富性,(,二,),语篇的连贯性,三、记叙文书面表达能力(一) 语言的丰富性,(,一,),语言的丰富性,1.,词汇、句式、语法的多样性,2.,情感表达的多样性,3.,动词使用的丰富性,(一) 语言的丰富性1. 词汇、句式、语法的多样性,1.,词汇、句式、语法的多样性,简单句，复合句以及强调句、倒装句等特殊句式的使用情况。,主被动语态、非谓语动词、独立主格结构、,with,的复合结构、虚拟语气的使用情况。,常见初级词汇、高级词汇，以及不同词性的使用情况。,比喻、拟人、夸张等修辞格的使用情况。,句式结构：,语法结构：,词汇选择：,修辞手法：,1. 词汇、句式、语法的多样性简单句，复合句以及强调句、倒装,2.,情感表达的多样性,Janes,feelings,walked away, turned around, cried,Is that for me?,“Tom!”,“Help!”,Night was beginning to fall.,It was daybreak.,confused,hungry and thirsty.,walked away, turned around, cried,walked away, turned around, cried,actions,words,surroundings,thoughts,looks,2. 情感表达的多样性 Janes walked away,“Another race, another race!” said the little boy. The wise old man stepped forward and presented the little boy with two new challengers, an elderly weak lady and a blind man. “What is this?” said the little boy. “This is no race.” He said. “Race!” said the wise man. The race was started and the boy was the only finisher, the other two challengers left standing at the starting line. The little boy was excited. He raised his arms in delight. The crowd, however, was silent showing no sentiment toward the little boy. “What has happened? Why dont the people join in my success?” he asked the wise old man. “Race again.” said the man, “This time, finish together, all three of you, finish together,” said the wise man.,urged,askd,complained,replied,continued,3.,动词使用的丰富性,“Another race, another r,Use more specific words to replace “say”.,shout, scream,yell, roar, cry, whisper, interrupt, add, continue, tell, remark, predict, repeat,guess,imply,refuse, agree, admit, complain, smile, urge, apologize, sigh, beg, explain,，,promise, comfort, compromise,，,warn,ask,wonder,doubt,answer,reply,方式,态度,问答,Use more specific words to rep,God felt sad and sighed to the butterfly, “Do you regret for what you have done?” “No!” the butterfly said firmly, without hesitation. “He was your lover, but now he stays with another woman. Without you, he couldnt have recovered.” God said with pity. “I love him.” the butterfly said in a low voice, “although I cant be the one he loves, I want him to be happy. Never will I regret what I have done.” God smiled, “True love is the most invaluable thing in the world.” The butterfly then left the town with the best wishes for the man.,God felt sad and sighed to,firmly/excitedly/seriously/jokingly/sincerely,in,great surprise/a low voice/a soft voice,with,delight/excitement/embarrassment/,pride/respect/alarm/satisfaction/caution/ patience/certainty,Make your “say” more specific.,firmly/excitedly/seriously/jok,“Oh yes, Daddy, you know I love you,” the little girl said,sincerely,.,“Well, then, give me your pearls.”,“Oh! Daddy, not my pearls!” Jenny refused, shaking her head violently. “But you can have Rosy, my favorite doll. Remember her? You gave her to me last year for my birthday. And you can have her tea party outfit too. Okay?”,“Oh no darling, thats Okay.” Her father brushed her cheek with a kiss. “Good night, little one.”,eyes,hands,head,stare / glare at / look her in the eye /,with her eyes shining/ filled with tears,His eyes sparkle with excitement/ gratitude,pat him on the shoulder/head,grasp/hold ones hands,point to sb/sth,wave his hands,nod/shake his head violently,He thought for a moment,Make your narration more vivid with appropriate movement.,eyeshandsheadstare / glare at,But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again.,Amid the dreadful darkness, strange sounds of wild beasts were heard.,“,If it weren,t for that stupid quarrel, I wouldn,t be trapped here,”,she thought to herself, regretful tears clouding her eyes. Surrounded by the fear and tiredness,Jane,felt exhausted and finally slid into sleep. “,Tom, is that you?”she murmured.,“,Tom, help!,”,In her dream, she saw a man extending his arms towards her,at a distance,.,It was day break when Jane woke up.,After a washing, Jane continued to force her way ahead. In the boundless search, she found it impossible to find a way out, which threw her into desperat,ion,. Fortunately, a,helicopter,flew overhead just at that moment. In no time did Jane rush to the rock and,climb,onto it. She waved her,yellow blouse,madly to the passing helicopter.,To her great joy, this time, the helicopter,spotted,her. The moment Jane was reunited with her husband, her tears clouded her vision. They hugged each other tightly in the warm light of the setting sun.,words,surroundings,thoughts,looks,But no more helicopter,(,二,),语篇的连贯性,1.,内容连贯,故事大意一致，写作意图一致,(二) 语篇的连贯性 故事大意一致，写作意图一致,2.,语句连贯,衔接词的准确使用,but/however,nevertheless,whereas,although,though,unfortunately,instead,on the contrary,besides,moreover furthermore,whats more whats worse worse still,so,thus,therefore,hence,consequently,accordingly,as a result,2. 语句连贯 衔接词的准确使用but/however,One weekend in July,Jane,and her husband,Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a,lake,in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp” and,walked,away.,With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had,climbed,to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.,“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”,No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.,Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (,滴落,) somewhere,at a distance,. Quickly she followed the sound to a,stream,.,To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.,As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a,helicopter,. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her,yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.,Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark._,ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup._,3.,语言连贯,语言风格一致,3. 语言连贯 语言风格一致,But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again.,Amid the dreadful darkness, strange sounds of wild beasts were heard.,“,If it weren,t for that stupid quarrel, I wouldn,t be trapped here,”,she thought to herself, regretful tears clouding her eyes. Surrounded by the fear and tiredness,Jane,felt exhausted and finally slid into sleep. “,Tom, is that you?”she murmured.,“,Tom, help!,”,In her dream, she saw a man extending his arms towards her,at a distance,.,It was day break when Jane woke up.,After a washing, Jane continued to force her way ahead. In the boundless search, she found it impossible to find a way out, which threw her into desperat,ion,. Fortunately, a,helicopter,flew overhead just at that moment. In no time did Jane rush to the rock and,climb,onto it. She waved her,yellow blouse,madly to the passing helicopter.,To her great joy, this time, the helicopter,spotted,her. The moment Jane was reunited with her husband, her tears clouded her vision. They hugged each other tightly in the warm light of the setting sun.,But no more helicopter,One weekend in July,Jane,and her husband,Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a,lake,in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp” and,walked,away.,With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had,climbed,to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.,“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”,No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.,Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (,滴落,) somewhere,at a distance,. Quickly she followed the sound to a,stream,.,To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.,As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a,helicopter,. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her,yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.,Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark._,ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup._,3.,语言连贯,语言风格一致,With no path to follow, Jane, she turned around, hoping to ,Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that ,Jane rose, hungry and thirsty.,If only she had not left her mobile phone ,Never in her life had she tasted anything better.,3. 语言连贯 语言风格一致With no path,But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again.,Amid the dreadful darkness, strange sounds of wild beasts were heard.,“,If it weren,t for that stupid quarrel, I wouldn,t be trapped here,”,she thought to herself, regretful tears clouding her eyes. Surrounded by the fear and tiredness,Jane,felt exhausted and finally slid into sleep. “,Tom, is that you?”she murmured.,“,Tom, help!,”,In her dream, she saw a man extending his arms towards her,at a distance,.,It was day break when Jane woke up.,After a washing, Jane continued to force her way ahead. In the boundless search, she found it impossible to find a way out, which threw her into desperat,ion,. Fortunately, a,helicopter,flew overhead just at that moment. In no time did Jane rush to the rock and,climb,onto it. She waved her,yellow blouse,madly to the passing helicopter.,To her great joy, this time, the helicopter,spotted,he
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