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高三英语复习写作讲评课高三英语复习写作讲评课Assessment&practice of WritingAssessment&practice of Writing高三英语复习写作讲评课12008年奥运会刚刚落幕，一家英文报刊在其网站上征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议假设你叫李华，是该报的一名读者，请给该报编辑部写一封信，谈谈你的建议和理由内容包括向公众开放，用于健身租给体育公司，创造经济效益开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客Dear editor,I am Li Hua,a reader of your paper.2008年奥运会刚刚落幕，一家英文报刊在其网站上征集奥运会后2内容内容语法语法思想思想框架框架-组织结构组织结构要点全，拓展有度，有效要点全，拓展有度，有效连接词，作文结构紧连接词，作文结构紧凑；凑；流畅流畅准确，复杂语法结构，准确，复杂语法结构，高级词汇，多种句型高级词汇，多种句型开放能引起读者的共鸣开放能引起读者的共鸣,灵魂灵魂评分的四大纬度内容语法思想框架-组织结构要点全，拓展有度3 1.单词拼写或用错：Give you some advise I just provide you my own suggests.They can attact visitors.advicesuggestionattract常见错误:1.单词拼写或用错：Give you som42.2.时态语态问题时态语态问题 We may given it to the PE company.We may given it to the PE company.We may We may give give it to the PE company.it to the PE company.3.3.主谓一致问题主谓一致问题 The sport stadiums is very great and is The sport stadiums is very great and is highly spoken of by the foreigners.highly spoken of by the foreigners.The sport stadiums The sport stadiums areare very great and very great and are are highly spokenhighly spoken of by the foreigners of by the foreigners.4.4.逐字翻译问题逐字翻译问题 The stadiums can open to people for do The stadiums can open to people for do exercise use.exercise use.The stadiums can The stadiums can be openedbe opened toto people for people for doing exercises.doing exercises.问题:2.时态语态问题4.逐字翻译问题55.5.词性混淆问题词性混淆问题It can creative money.It can creative money.It can create/bring in money.It can create/bring in money.Many people can use them to strong our body.Many people can use them to strong our body.Many people can use them to Many people can use them to strengthenstrengthen our our body.body.6.6.介词短语的运用问题介词短语的运用问题I am writing to make some advice for how to I am writing to make some advice for how to make full use of the sports stadium.make full use of the sports stadium.I am writing to make some adviceI am writing to make some advice on on how to how to make full use of the sports stadium.make full use of the sports stadium.问题:5.词性混淆问题67.7.句子结构不完整句子结构不完整8.8.Only make full use of them does it make Only make full use of them does it make sensesense.9.9.Only Only by makingby making full use of them does it full use of them does it make sense make sense 10.10.The 29th Olympic Games which hosted in The 29th Olympic Games which hosted in Beijing were held successfully.Beijing were held successfully.11.11.The 29th Olympic Games The 29th Olympic Games which were hostedwhich were hosted in in Beijing wereBeijing were held successfully.held successfully.问题:句子结构不完整71.审题审题2.列提纲列提纲/要点要点3.连词成句连词成句4.连句成篇连句成篇5.润色修正润色修正6.定稿定稿体裁体裁时态时态 结构结构要求要求字数内容1.审题写作步骤:体裁字数8信息信息2信息信息3信息信息4开头开头正文正文结尾结尾体裁体裁人称人称时态时态 要求要求结构结构字数字数内容内容一般现在时一般现在时Para.1Para.1Para.2Para.2Para.3Para.3抓要点抓要点,100-120数数信息信息1信息信息50808年奥运会刚刚落幕年奥运会刚刚落幕.征集奥运会后如何综合利征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议用体育场馆的建议.你想写一些建议你想写一些建议.向公众开放，用于健身向公众开放，用于健身总结，意愿总结，意愿书信格式书信格式租给体育公司，创造经济效益租给体育公司，创造经济效益开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客第一第一,三人称三人称信息2开头1.审题:体裁字数一般现在时Para.1抓要点,1908年奥运会刚刚落幕年奥运会刚刚落幕.征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议.你想写一些建议你想写一些建议 开头开头信息信息10808年奥运会刚刚落幕年奥运会刚刚落幕.征集奥运会后如何综征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议合利用体育场馆的建议.你想写一些建议你想写一些建议.Want to write some advice/Would like to give you some adviceContribute some suggestions to you.Collect some adviceHow to use/make use of/make the best of the stadiums.After the Olympic GamesAfter Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games.The 2008 Beijing Olympic/were over/finished/held successfully in Beijing.08年奥运会刚刚落幕.2.列提纲/要点开头信息108年10向公众开放，用于健身向公众开放，用于健身.租给体育公司，创造经济效益租给体育公司，创造经济效益.开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客.Use it as/be used for/as;take it as;open it forPlaces of interest/tourist attractionsAttract tourists/appeal to visitors/be attraction for visitorsGive to/Rentto/be rented toSport company/companies which organize matches/organizing matchesMake/create money;bring in money/make more profitsOpen/be opened to the people/public/open them to public.Be used for/as;be made to;Do some exercise/build our bodies/strengthen our bodies信息信息2信息信息3信息信息4向公众开放，用于健身向公众开放，用于健身租给体育公司，创造经济效益租给体育公司，创造经济效益开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客正正文文向公众开放，用于健身.2.列提纲/要点.Use it a11.信息信息5 总结，意愿总结，意愿结尾结尾In my opinion/as far as I am concerned./from my point of view.I would appreciateI would you will think of/takeinto consideration.2.列提纲/要点.信息5总结，意愿结尾In my op12 开头开头信息信息10808年奥运会刚刚落幕年奥运会刚刚落幕.征集奥运会后如何综征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议合利用体育场馆的建议.你想写一些建议你想写一些建议.The 2008 Beijing Olympic Games were The 2008 Beijing Olympic Games were over/finished.over/finished.The 29th Olympic Games were held successfully in The 29th Olympic Games were held successfully in Beijing.Beijing.Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games with a great success.Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games with a great success.The 29th Olympic Games The 29th Olympic Games were hostedwere hosted in Beijing in Beijing with a great success.with a great success.Beijing Beijing achieved its dream ofachieved its dream of hosting the 29th hosting the 29th Olympic Games successfully.Olympic Games successfully.Collect some adviceCollect some adviceHow to use/make use of/make the best of the How to use/make use of/make the best of the stadiums.stadiums.After the Olympic GamesAfter the Olympic GamesAfter Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games.After Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games.You are collecting some advice You are collecting some advice on how to make use ofon how to make use of the the stadiums after Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games.stadiums after Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games.I hear you are collecting some advice I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the on how to make the best ofbest of the stadiums after Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic the stadiums after Beijing hosted the 29th Olympic Games successfully.Games successfully.Want to write some advice/Would like to give you Want to write some advice/Would like to give you some advicesome adviceContribute some suggestions to you.Contribute some suggestions to you.I I would like towould like to give you some advice.give you some advice.I would like to I would like to contribute contribute the following suggestions the following suggestions to to youyou 开头信息108年奥运会刚刚落幕.3.连词成句The 13 4.Use it as/be used for/as;take it as;open it forPlaces of interests/tourist attractionsAttract tourists/appeal to visitors/be attraction for visitors3.Give to/Rentto/be rented toSport company/companies which organize matches/organizing matchesMake/creat mony;bring in money/make more profits信息信息2信息信息3信息信息4向公众开放，用于健身向公众开放，用于健身租给体育公司，创造经济效益租给体育公司，创造经济效益开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客正正文文2.Open/be opened to the people/public/open them to public.2.Open/be opened to the people/public/open them to public.Be used for/as;be made to;Be used for/as;be made to;Do some exercise/build our body/strengthen our bodiesDo some exercise/build our body/strengthen our bodies2.The stadiums can be opened to the public.The public can build their bodies/strengthen their bodies 3.The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches.It can bring in more money/make more profits4.They can be used as tourist attraction.It can attract many visitors.4.Use it as/be used for/as;ta14.信息信息5 总结，意愿总结，意愿结尾结尾In my opinion/as far as I am concerned./from my point of view.I would appreciateI would you will think of/takeinto consideration.In a wordFrom my point of view,we should do what we can to make full use of the stadium.I would appreciate it if you would take my advice into deep consideration.信息5总结，意愿结尾In my opinion/a15Para.1:The 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success.I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums.I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you.Para.2:The stadiums can be opened to the public.The public can build their bodies/strengthen their bodies.The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches.It can bring in more money/make more profits.They can be used as tourist attraction.It can attract many visitors.Para.3:From my point of view,we should do what we can to make full use the stadium.I would appreciate it if you would take my advice into deep consideration4.连句成篇Para.1:The 29th Olympic16Para.1:The 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success.I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums.I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you.Para.1:I hear you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success.Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you.4.连句成篇Para.1:The 29th Olympic17Para.2:The stadiums can be opened to the public.The public can strengthen their bodies.The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches.It can bring in much more profits.They can be used as tourist attraction.It can attract many visitors.Para.2:First of all,the stadiums can be opened to the public.The public can strengthen their bodies.Secondly,The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches.It can bring in much more profits.last but not least,They can be used as tourist attraction.It can attract many visitors.First of all Firstly,To begin with,In addition,Besides,Moreover,Whats moreFinally,Whats worse,4.连句成篇Para.2:The stadiums can 18使用恰当的连接词使用恰当的连接词逻辑角度逻辑角度合适的过渡性词汇合适的过渡性词汇排序关系排序关系 并列关系并列关系举例关系举例关系转折关系转折关系因果关系因果关系归纳总结归纳总结递进关系递进关系first;firstly;second;secondly;last but not least and;too;as well as;along with;together withfor example;for instance;like;such as;as to but;however;while;though;on the contrarybecause;since;thanks to;as a result/consequence(of);thus;therefore in a word;in short;to sum up;in conclusionwhats more;besides;to make matters worse;whats worse;worse still;furthermore使用恰当的连接词逻辑角度合适的过渡性词汇排序关系 19 I heard you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success.Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you.First of all,the stadiums can be opened to the public.The public can strengthen their bodies.Secondly,The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches.It can bring in much more profits.last but not least,They can be used as tourist attraction.It can attract many visitors.From my point of view,we should do what we can to make full use the stadium.I would appreciate it very much if you would take my advice into deep consideration4.连句成篇 I heard you ar20二二.使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档三三.巧用倒装增强句子表现力巧用倒装增强句子表现力四四.尝试多尝试多样化表达方样化表达方式式一一.使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力强调句强调句With短语复合结构短语复合结构定语从句定语从句名词性从句名词性从句(主宾表同从句主宾表同从句)各种状语从句各种状语从句被动语态被动语态二.使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档三.巧用倒装增强句子表现21 1.Many people want to visit the stadium.2.The stadium is useful.Many people are dying to visit the stadium.(唐珊唐珊）The stadium is of great value.(王淑敏王淑敏)一一.使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力 1.Many people want to visi221.The 29th Olympic Games were successfully ended.It left many stadiums unusedThe 29th Olympic Games were successfully ended,leaving many stadiums unused（孙诒）（孙诒）.二二.使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档1.The 29th Olympic Games were 231.we can let stadium make sense Only when we make full use of the stadium 2.The stadiums can be rented to the physical company to create more economic profits.they can be the places to appeal visitors to pay a visit.Only when we make full use of the stadium can we let stadium make sense(张文雪张文雪).Not only can the stadiums be rented to the physical company to create more economic profits,but also they can be the places to appeal visitors to pay a visit.(张蕾张蕾)三三.巧用倒装增强句子表现力巧用倒装增强句子表现力1.we can let stadium make sens24We should take the Olympic stadiums into consideration after Beijing hosted the games successfully.The 29th Olympic Games were ended successfully.we start talking about how to use the stadiums properly for our daily livesIt is the Olympic stadiums that we should take into consideration after Beijing hosted the games successfully.With the 29th Olympic Games ended successfully,we start talking about how to use the stadiums properly for our daily lives.四四.尝试多样化表达方式尝试多样化表达方式强调句强调句With短语复合结构短语复合结构We should take the Olympic sta25You can open them for the public.The stadiums can be used to take exercise.You can open the stadiums which can be used to take exercise for the public.(高玉华高玉华).四四.尝试多样化表达方式尝试多样化表达方式定语从句定语从句各种状语从句各种状语从句我们锻炼的越多，我们就越健康。我们锻炼的越多，我们就越健康。The more exercises we take,the healthier we will become.被动语态被动语态We should pay more attention to the stadiums.More attention should be paid to the stadiums.(潘畅潘畅)You can open them for the publ26 I heard you are collecting some advice on how to make the best of the stadiums after the 29th Olympic Games were hosted in Beijing with a great success.Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you.First of all,the stadiums can be opened to the public.The public can strengthen their bodies.Secondly,The stadiums can be rented to sport company which organize matches.It can bring in much more profits.last but not least,They can be used as tourist attraction.It can attract many visitors.From my point of view,we should do what we can to make full use the stadium.I would appreciate it very much if you would take my advice into deep consideration I heard you are coll27高考书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求高考书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求第五档（第五档（21-2521-25分）分）完全完成完全完成了试题规定的任务了试题规定的任务:l准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容，要点无遗漏准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容，要点无遗漏l应用了较多的语法结构和词汇应用了较多的语法结构和词汇l语法结构和词汇有少许错误，但为尽可能使用较复杂表达方式语法结构和词汇有少许错误，但为尽可能使用较复杂表达方式 所致；具备较强的语言应用能力所致；具备较强的语言应用能力l有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑完全达到了预期的写作目的。完全达到了预期的写作目的。第四档（第四档（16-2016-20分）分）完成完成了试题规定的任务了试题规定的任务:l比较准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容比较准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容l应用语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求应用语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求l语法结构和词汇应用基本准确，少许错误主要是因为尝试较复语法结构和词汇应用基本准确，少许错误主要是因为尝试较复 杂语言结构或词汇所致杂语言结构或词汇所致l应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑达到了预期的应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑达到了预期的写作目的。写作目的。高考书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求第五档（21-25分）28 With the 29th Olympic Games ended successfully,What we should do now is how to make full use of the stadiums.I heard you are dying for some advice on how to make the best of them.Here I would like to contribute the following suggestions to you.First of all,the stadiums can be opened to the public,where they can strengthen their bodies conveniently.Secondly,The stadiums can be rented to sport companies which organize matches,thus bringing in much more profits.last but not least,They can be used as tourist attraction.Because many of them are so well designed with strong Chinese features that they will surely be attractions for visitors from all over the world.From my point of view,we should do what we can to make full use of the stadiums.Only when we take actions can we bring a bright future to their value.I would appreciate it very much if you would take my advice into deep consideration With the 29th Olympic29你班同学参加了一场讨论。讨论的主题是：城市内是否可你班同学参加了一场讨论。讨论的主题是：城市内是否可以养宠物（狗和猫）。请你根据下表所提供的信息，写一以养宠物（狗和猫）。请你根据下表所提供的信息，写一篇作文篇作文并说明自己的观点和建议。并说明自己的观点和建议。反反对饲养养宠物的同学物的同学认为支持支持饲养养宠物的同学物的同学认为1造成造成环境境污染染 2吵吵闹声，甚至声，甚至伤人人 1安慰孤寡老人安慰孤寡老人 2 人与人与动物和物和谐相相处，增添生活情趣增添生活情趣注意：注意：词数词数100左右。左右。内容要点：内容要点：1污染环境污染环境 2吵闹，伤人吵闹，伤人 3安慰孤寡老人安慰孤寡老人 4 和谐相处，生活情趣和谐相处，生活情趣 5观点、观点、建议建议Homework你班同学参加了一场讨论。讨论的主题是：城市内是否可以养宠物（30Thanks for listening31