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荒野冒险读 后 续 写 步 骤 1 概 括 已 知 信 息 ： 标 明 核 心 词 、 核 心 句 ， 梳 理 语 篇 内 容 的 推 进 方 向 。Jane and her husband, Tom,driven three hours to campa lake in the forest.quarrel walked awayloststop for the nightrose at the break of dayto a streamdrank and ate a few berrieshope it would lead her to the lakeheard a helicopterUnfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see herA few minutes later, another helicopter yellow blouse汉 语 ： 驱 车 野 营 生 嫌 隙 ， 迷 失 山 林 心 焚 急 ；挨 饿 恐 惧 度 长 夜 ， 两 架 飞 机 失 机 会 。 步 骤 2 按人物、环境、情节动词等分类划线词：K inds Underlined key words and phrasesCharacterActionPlaceConcrete ThingsAbstract步 骤 3 紧 扣 语 境 构 思 情 节 ， 分 析 ：1. 据 第 一 段 开 头 ” dark” 可 知 ， -2. 据 第 二 段 开 头 ” woke up” 可 知 ， -。3. 第 二 段 情 节 可 能 ： -Jane, Tom,walked, climbedlake, stream,Helicopter, yellow blouse,To her great joy, at a distance 情 节 1（ 搭 建 本 段 空 白 处 前 后 桥 梁 ）情 节 2步 骤 3 紧 扣 语 境 构 思 情 节 ， 分 析 ：1. 据 第 一 段 开 头 DARK可 知 ，2. 据 第 二 段 开 头 WOKE UP可 知 ，3. 第 二 段 情 节 可 能 ：又 要 在 荒 野 再 过 一 晚 。 环 境 描 写 。 大 量 心 理 活 动 ， 后 悔 ？想 念 ？ 期 待 ？ 坚 持 ？ 夜 里 有 没 有 遇 到 蛇 、 老 虎 、 狮 子 ？第 一 段 应 有 JANE入 睡 的 情 节 。醒 来 看 到 TOM； OR醒 来 在 医 院 ； OR贵 人相 助 OR直 升 机 救 援 ； OR独 自 找 到 湖 。dark again. -Jane tired, hungry-frightened-thought to herself-if only-miss Tomtomorrow guide the helicopter-lie beside the stream-tigers-hold her breathquietsleptIt was day break when Jane woke up. -ate berries and drank some water-catch sight of a fisherman at a distance-climbed to an open area together- To her great joy-helicopteryellow blouse-rescuers-the warmest hug-smile satisfied smiles 步 骤 4 (分 析 原 文 写 作 风 格 ， 特 殊 语 法 结 构 有 时 间 状 语 从 句 ， 结 果 状 语 从 句 ，条 件 状 语 从 句 ， 宾 语 从 句 ， DOING,直 接 引 语 ， 虚 拟 语 气 ， 倒 装 ， 疑问 句 ， 感 叹 句 ， 介 词 短 语 等 )初 稿 1 But no more helicopter came and it wasgetting dark again.Janewassotiredandhungrythatshedidnthaveanypoweratall.Whatsworse,shewasextremelyfrightened.Shethoughttoherself,“IfonlyIhadnotquarrelledwithTom.WhereisTom?Hemusthavemadetheemergencycall.WhatIneedisenoughcourage.IfIcontinuemyspiritstomorrow,Iwillbelikelytoguidethehelicopter.”Lyingbesidethestream,shefellasleepverysoon.Suddenly,shewaswokenupbythewildshoutsofseveraltigers,whichmadeherscaredtodeath.After sheheldherbreathforafewminutes,graduallyeverythingwasquietagain.Intheterribledarkness,shesleptagain. It was daybreak when Jane woke up. 除 使 用 原 文 已 有 从 句 等 复 杂 语 法 结 构 外 ，还 使 用 主 语 从 句 ， 定 语 从 句 等 复 杂 语 法 结 构 。Shecaughtsightofafishermanatadistance.Walkingnearer,shetoldhimthewholestory.Together,theyclimbedtoanopenarea.Tohergreatjoy， ahelicopterflewoverheadjustatthatmoment.Thefishermanhelpedherflagheryellowblousewildly.Thisdidcatchthehelicoptersattention!Janewasrescued.Burstingintotears,shetoldTomthatshemissedhimsomuch.Neverwouldshedosuchafoolishthing.Tomgaveherthewarmestandlongesthugshehadeverreceived.Peoplearoundsmiledsatisfiedsmiles. 步 骤 5 核 查 字 数 、 下 划 线 标 明 原 文 给 出 的 5 个 以 上 关 键 词 语 、 连 接词 、 标 点 、 语 法 可 能 能 版 本 (2 0 1 words)删 词 ， 尽 量 不 减 少 特 殊 语 法 结 构 。 But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again. Jane was so tired, hungry, and extremely frightened. She thought to herself, “If only I had not quarreled with Tom. Where is Tom? He must have made the emergency call. What indeed is enough courage. If I continue my spirits tomorrow, I will be likely to guide the helicopter.” Lying beside the stream, she fell asleep very soon. Suddenly, she heard the shouts of tigers, which made her scared to death. After she held her breath for a few minutes, everything was quiet again. In the terrible darkness, she slept again. It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Shecaughtsightofafishermanat a distance,withwhosehelpsheclimbed toanopenarea.To her great joy,ahelicopterflewoverheadjustatthatmoment.Thefishermanhelpedflagheryellow blousewildly.Thisdidcatchtherescuersattention!Janewasrescued.SeeingTom,shetoldhimhowmuchshemissedhim.Neverwouldtheybeawayfromeachother.Tomgaveherthewarmestandlongesthugshehadeverreceived.Peoplearoundsmiledsatisfiedsmiles. (174 words) （ 砍 柴 老 人 ， 湖 泊 ， 直 升 机 ） But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again. The temperature got lower at night than in the daytime. Jane put on her yellow blouse. At that moment, tiredness surrounded her. She felt exhausted both physically and emotionally. But she continued walking forward because she really wanted to meet Tom as soon as possible. She walked slowly and carefully in darkness. Following the stream for about two hours, Jane couldnt support her physical strength, so she found a flat ground to spend the long and hard night. It was daybreak when Jane woke up. She felt hungry and tired. After a short adjustment, she began the hard trip. A few hours later, she caught sight of an old man cutting woods. To her great joy, the old man, who was very familiar with the geographical characteristics, informed her of the way to the lake. Seeing the lake meant seeing hope in the air. Fortunately, a helicopter flew overhead just at that moment. Jane flagged her yellow blouse wildly. This time, the helicopter found her and took her to her husband. They gave each other the warmest hug they had ever received. (1 7 0 words)
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