英语写作中高级句.ppt

英语写作中高级句式的应用 将乐一中巫瑶环 Howtowriteagoodcomposition 高考作文评分细则 第五档 21 25分 1 覆盖所有内容要点2 运用较多的语法结构和词汇3 有效地使用英语句子之间的连接成分 全文结构紧凑 Students homework 假如你是李华 最近 你的外国笔友戴维发来一封邮件 说他饮食不规律 缺乏锻炼 导致过度肥胖 经常被同学们嘲笑 为此他感到非常苦恼 特向你求助 请根据下面的写作提示给他写一封建议信 内容包括 1 对他表示同情 2 提出你的建议 3 希望情况好转 StudentA DearDavid Icanunderstandyourmood Don tbetoonervous takeiteasy Herearesomemyadvice First youshouldbemoreconfident Don tthinkabouttoomuch Second youcandosomeexercise Suchas running swimmingandsoon Finally yououghttohaveabalanceddiet eatmorevegetablesandfruits andeatlessmeat Youwillloseweight Ihopeeverythingwillbeok I mlookingforwardtoyourreply StudentB DearDavid becauseyou relaughedatbyyourclassmatesforbeingoverweight Therefore Iwillgiveyousomesuggestions Ithinkitisvitalforyoutoliveahealthylife First youshouldhaveabalanceddiet Second itwouldbeagoodideatohavethreemealsontime Lastbutnotleast you dbetterdosomeexerciseinthemorning becauseit shelpfultoloseweight Youcanrunaroundyourhouse whichisagoodwaytoloseweight Idohopemyadviceisusefultoyou Whowritesbetter Whowritesbetter StudentA 语法基本正确 句式单一 多为简单句 三档或四档 StudentB 句式变换丰富 语法运用正确并得体 如 It形式主语 强调句 非限制性定语从句上下文衔接词 如 therefore because lastbutnotleast五档 Comparison Sample DearDavid NowI dliketoofferyousomeadvice Ithinkit snecessaryforyoutoleadahealthylifestylenow First youshouldhavethreemealsontimeinsteadofeatingsnacksnowandthen Second itisagoodideatohaveabalanceddietthatincludesgrain meat milk fruitandvegetablestogetenoughenergy Third Isuggestyoushouldgetupearlyandtakephysicalexerciseeverymorning whichwillhelpyouloseweightandregainyourconfidence Ihopemyadvicewillbehelpfultoyou DearDavid NowI dliketoofferyousomeadviceIthinkit snecessaryforyoutoleadahealthylifestylenow First youshouldhavethreemealsontimeinsteadofeatingsnacksnowandthen Second itisagoodideatohaveabalanceddietthatincludesgrain meat milk fruitandvegetablestogetenoughenergy Third Isuggestyoushouldgetupearlyandtakephysicalexerciseeverymorning whichwillhelpyouloseweightandregainyourconfidence Ihopemyadvicewillbehelpfultoyou Whatwehavelearned Someusefulsentencepatterns 1 It s adj that vital important necessary etc It s adj forsb todo 2 It s apity shame pleasure that3 It sdone that4 Nounclauses objectiveclauses subjectiveclauses predicativeclauses etc 5 finditadj todo difficult possible interesting 6 It s 被强调 that 7 倒装句式 Notonly butalso Only 状语 部分倒装 So adj advthat8 Thereisnodoubtthat thereisnoneedtodo9 Which引导的非限制性定语从句 10 when while if although because引导的复合句 11 It snotuntil that12 Withsb sthdoing done todo Warminguptraining Translation 1 我们有必要在学习中探寻有效的办法 It snecessary 2 杭州如此迷人 以至于我决定明年再去参观它一次 so that 3 有人建议说父母应多陪伴孩子 It sdonethat 4 它不仅能够锻炼身体 而且还能减压 notonly butalso 5 作为老师 很难平衡工作和家庭生活 It shard 6 你必须遵守规则并举止得体 即使你觉得他们不公平 evenif 7 我宁愿呆在家里也不愿意到处闲逛 Wouldrather 8 只有用这样的办法 我们才能提前完成任务 Only adv 9 我每周运动三次 这对我的健康有好处 which 10 有这么多家务活要干 你周末最好呆在家里 with HangZhouissoattractivethatIdecidetovisititagain It ssuggestedthatparentsshouldaccompanychildren Itcannotonlybuildupourbodybutalsoreleasethestress It shardforteacherstobalanceworkandfamilylife It snecessaryforustoexploreefficientwaysinourstudy Youshouldobeytherulesandbehaveyourselfeveniftheyareunfair 7 Iwouldratherstayathomethanhangaround 8 Onlyinthiswaycanwecompleteourtaskaheadoftime 9 Idoexercisethreetimesaweek whichisbeneficialtoourhealth 10 Withsomuchhouseworktodo you dbetterstayathome 假如你是李华 是某国际学校的学生会主席 做家务有助于培养同学们独立生活的能力 构建融洽的家庭关系 现请用英语写一封倡议信 内容包括 1 青少年学会做家务的意义 2向同学们发出倡议 注意 词数100 Writing Discussioningroups Makinganoutline Structure Para1expresstopic opinion Para2thereasonsofdoinghousework threeorfourpoints Para3callingon Enjoythesample Dearschoolmates Manyteenagersarenotallowedtodohouseworkathomesothattheycanspendmoretimeontheirlessons However Ithinkweshouldsharehouseworkwithourparents It sknownthatsharinghouseworkbenefitsusgreatly First itstrenghtensourfamilybonds wecannotonlyenjoythepleasureofdoinghousework butalsocommunicatewithourfamilymembers Second doinghouseworkisakindofphysicalexercisewhichbuildsupourbody Moreimportantly wecanlearnsomebasiclivingskills whichenablesustoliveindependentlywhenwegrowup Onlyinthiswaywillweadaptourlife Solet ssetasidesometimeforhouseworkeveryday Let smakedoinghouseworkpartofourlife Conclusion Ifyouwanttoget25pointsincomposition youneedtouseadvancedsentencepatternsproperly 要想写出一篇有文采的英语作文 就需要巧妙运用高级句型 Goodlucktoyou Thankyou