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高三复习写作讲评课Assessmenttakeitas;openitforPlacesofinterest/touristattractionsAttracttourists/appealtovisitors/beattractionforvisitors,Giveto/Rentto/berentedtoSportcompany/companieswhichorganizematches/organizingmatchesMake/createmoney;bringinmoney/makemoreprofits,Open/beopenedtothepeople/public/openthemtopublic.Beusedfor/as;bemadeto;Dosomeexercise/buildourbodies/strengthenourbodies,信息2信息3信息4,向公众开放，用于健身,租给体育公司，创造经济效益,开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客,正文,2.列提纲/要点,.,信息5,总结，意愿,结尾,Inmyopinion/asfarasIamconcerned./frommypointofview.IwouldappreciateIwouldyouwillthinkof/takeintoconsideration.,开头信息1,08年奥运会刚刚落幕.征集奥运会后如何综合利用体育场馆的建议.你想写一些建议.,.,3.连词成句,The2008BeijingOlympicGameswereover/finished.The29thOlympicGameswereheldsuccessfullyinBeijing.Beijinghostedthe29thOlympicGameswithagreatsuccess.,The29thOlympicGameswerehostedinBeijingwithagreatsuccess.Beijingachieveditsdreamofhostingthe29thOlympicGamessuccessfully.,CollectsomeadviceHowtouse/makeuseof/makethebestofthestadiums.AftertheOlympicGamesAfterBeijinghostedthe29thOlympicGames.,YouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakeuseofthestadiumsafterBeijinghostedthe29thOlympicGames.IhearyouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthestadiumsafterBeijinghostedthe29thOlympicGamessuccessfully.,Wanttowritesomeadvice/WouldliketogiveyousomeadviceContributesomesuggestionstoyou.,Iwouldliketogiveyousomeadvice.Iwouldliketocontributethefollowingsuggestionstoyou,4.Useitas/beusedfor/as;takeitas;openitforPlacesofinterests/touristattractionsAttracttourists/appealtovisitors/beattractionforvisitors,3.Giveto/Rentto/berentedtoSportcompany/companieswhichorganizematches/organizingmatchesMake/creatmony;bringinmoney/makemoreprofits,信息2信息3信息4,向公众开放，用于健身,租给体育公司，创造经济效益,开辟成旅游景点，吸引游客,正文,3.连词成句,2.Open/beopenedtothepeople/public/openthemtopublic.Beusedfor/as;bemadeto;Dosomeexercise/buildourbody/strengthenourbodies,2.Thestadiumscanbeopenedtothepublic.Thepubliccanbuildtheirbodies/strengthentheirbodies,3.Thestadiumscanberentedtosportcompanywhichorganizematches.Itcanbringinmoremoney/makemoreprofits,4.Theycanbeusedastouristattraction.Itcanattractmanyvisitors.,.,信息5,总结，意愿,结尾,Inmyopinion/asfarasIamconcerned./frommypointofview.IwouldappreciateIwouldyouwillthinkof/takeintoconsideration.Inaword,3.连词成句,Frommypointofview,weshoulddowhatwecantomakefulluseofthestadium.Iwouldappreciateitifyouwouldtakemyadviceintodeepconsideration,4.连句成篇,Para.1:The29thOlympicGameswerehostedinBeijingwithagreatsuccess.Ihearyouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthestadiums.Iwouldliketocontributethefollowingsuggestionstoyou.,Para.2:Thestadiumscanbeopenedtothepublic.Thepubliccanbuildtheirbodies/strengthentheirbodies.Thestadiumscanberentedtosportcompanywhichorganizematches.Itcanbringinmoremoney/makemoreprofits.Theycanbeusedastouristattraction.Itcanattractmanyvisitors.,Para.3:Frommypointofview,weshoulddowhatwecantomakefullusethestadium.Iwouldappreciateitifyouwouldtakemyadviceintodeepconsideration,4.连句成篇,Para.1:The29thOlympicGameswerehostedinBeijingwithagreatsuccess.Ihearyouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthestadiums.Iwouldliketocontributethefollowingsuggestionstoyou.,Para.1:Ihearyouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthestadiumsafterthe29thOlympicGameswerehostedinBeijingwithagreatsuccess.HereIwouldliketocontributethefollowingsuggestionstoyou.,4.连句成篇,Para.2:Thestadiumscanbeopenedtothepublic.Thepubliccanstrengthentheirbodies.Thestadiumscanberentedtosportcompanywhichorganizematches.Itcanbringinmuchmoreprofits.Theycanbeusedastouristattraction.Itcanattractmanyvisitors.,Para.2:Firstofall,thestadiumscanbeopenedtothepublic.Thepubliccanstrengthentheirbodies.Secondly,Thestadiumscanberentedtosportcompanywhichorganizematches.Itcanbringinmuchmoreprofits.lastbutnotleast,Theycanbeusedastouristattraction.Itcanattractmanyvisitors.,FirstofallFirstly,Tobeginwith,Inaddition,Besides,Moreover,Whatsmore,Finally,Whatsworse,使用恰当的连接词,first;firstly;second;secondly;lastbutnotleast,and;too;aswellas;alongwith;togetherwith,forexample;forinstance;like;suchas;asto,but;however;while;though;onthecontrary,because;since;thanksto;asaresult/consequence(of);thus;therefore,inaword;inshort;tosumup;inconclusion,whatsmore;besides;tomakemattersworse;whatsworse;worsestill;furthermore,4.连句成篇,Iheardyouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthestadiumsafterthe29thOlympicGameswerehostedinBeijingwithagreatsuccess.HereIwouldliketocontributethefollowingsuggestionstoyou.Firstofall,thestadiumscanbeopenedtothepublic.Thepubliccanstrengthentheirbodies.Secondly,Thestadiumscanberentedtosportcompanywhichorganizematches.Itcanbringinmuchmoreprofits.lastbutnotleast,Theycanbeusedastouristattraction.Itcanattractmanyvisitors.Frommypointofview,weshoulddowhatwecantomakefullusethestadium.Iwouldappreciateitverymuchifyouwouldtakemyadviceintodeepconsideration,5.润色修正,二.使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档,三.巧用倒装增强句子表现力,四.尝试多样化表达方式,5.润色修正方式,一.使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力,强调句,With短语复合结构,定语从句,名词性从句(主宾表同从句),各种状语从句,被动语态,1.Manypeoplewanttovisitthestadium.2.Thestadiumisuseful.,Manypeoplearedyingtovisitthestadium.(唐珊）,Thestadiumisofgreatvalue.(王淑敏),一.使用较高级词汇使文章增加吸引力,5.润色修正,1.The29thOlympicGamesweresuccessfullyended.Itleftmanystadiumsunused,The29thOlympicGamesweresuccessfullyended,leavingmanystadiumsunused（孙诒）.,二.使用非谓语动词使句子简洁高档,5.润色修正,1.wecanletstadiummakesenseOnlywhenwemakefulluseofthestadium2.Thestadiumscanberentedtothephysicalcompanytocreatemoreeconomicprofits.theycanbetheplacestoappealvisitorstopayavisit.,Onlywhenwemakefulluseofthestadiumcanweletstadiummakesense(张文雪).,Notonlycanthestadiumsberentedtothephysicalcompanytocreatemoreeconomicprofits,butalsotheycanbetheplacestoappealvisitorstopayavisit.(张蕾),5.润色修正,三.巧用倒装增强句子表现力,WeshouldtaketheOlympicstadiumsintoconsiderationafterBeijinghostedthegamessuccessfully.The29thOlympicGameswereendedsuccessfully.westarttalkingabouthowtousethestadiumsproperlyforourdailylives,ItistheOlympicstadiumsthatweshouldtakeintoconsiderationafterBeijinghostedthegamessuccessfully.,Withthe29thOlympicGamesendedsuccessfully,westarttalkingabouthowtousethestadiumsproperlyforourdailylives.,5.润色修正,四.尝试多样化表达方式,强调句,With短语复合结构,Youcanopenthemforthepublic.Thestadiumscanbeusedtotakeexercise.,Youcanopenthestadiumswhichcanbeusedtotakeexerciseforthepublic.(高玉华).,5.润色修正,四.尝试多样化表达方式,定语从句,各种状语从句,我们锻炼的越多，我们就越健康。,Themoreexerciseswetake,thehealthierwewillbecome.,被动语态,Weshouldpaymoreattentiontothestadiums.,Moreattentionshouldbepaidtothestadiums.(潘畅),Iheardyouarecollectingsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthestadiumsafterthe29thOlympicGameswerehostedinBeijingwithagreatsuccess.HereIwouldliketocontributethefollowingsuggestionstoyou.Firstofall,thestadiumscanbeopenedtothepublic.Thepubliccanstrengthentheirbodies.Secondly,Thestadiumscanberentedtosportcompanywhichorganizematches.Itcanbringinmuchmoreprofits.lastbutnotleast,Theycanbeusedastouristattraction.Itcanattractmanyvisitors.Frommypointofview,weshoulddowhatwecantomakefullusethestadium.Iwouldappreciateitverymuchifyouwouldtakemyadviceintodeepconsideration,5.润色修正,高考书面表达各档次的给分范围和要求,第五档（21-25分）完全完成了试题规定的任务:准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容，要点无遗漏应用了较多的语法结构和词汇语法结构和词汇有少许错误，但为尽可能使用较复杂表达方式所致；具备较强的语言应用能力有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑完全达到了预期的写作目的。,第四档（16-20分）完成了试题规定的任务:比较准确、清楚地表达了短文的内容应用语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求语法结构和词汇应用基本准确，少许错误主要是因为尝试较复杂语言结构或词汇所致应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑达到了预期的写作目的。,Withthe29thOlympicGamesendedsuccessfully,Whatweshoulddonowishowtomakefulluseofthestadiums.Iheardyouaredyingforsomeadviceonhowtomakethebestofthem.HereIwouldliketocontributethefollowingsuggestionstoyou.Firstofall,thestadiumscanbeopenedtothepublic,wheretheycanstrengthentheirbodiesconveniently.Secondly,Thestadiumscanberentedtosportcompanieswhichorganizematches,thusbringinginmuchmoreprofits.lastbutnotleast,Theycanbeusedastouristattraction.BecausemanyofthemaresowelldesignedwithstrongChinesefeaturesthattheywillsurelybeattractionsforvisitorsfromallovertheworld.Frommypointofview,weshoulddowhatwecantomakefulluseofthestadiums.Onlywhenwetakeactionscanwebringabrightfuturetotheirvalue.Iwouldappreciateitverymuchifyouwouldtakemyadviceintodeepconsideration,润色修正,你班同学参加了一场讨论。讨论的主题是：城市内是否可以养宠物（狗和猫）。请你根据下表所提供的信息，写一篇作文并说明自己的观点和建议。,注意：词数100左右。内容要点：1污染环境2吵闹，伤人3安慰孤寡老人4和谐相处，生活情趣5观点、建议,Homework,Thanksforlistening,
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