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单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,二级,三级,四级,五级,县长在全县审计工作会议上的发言_1,县长在全县审计工作会议上的讲话,同志们:,县委、县政府决定召开审计工作会议,主要目的是进一步提高对审计工作的认识,把我们各部门、各单位、各街镇的思想统一到县委、县政府的要求上来,高度重视审计工作,主动配合审计工作,确保我们有限的财政资金能够用好,用出成效。这次会议的主要任务是总结近年来全县审计工作,安排部署今年审计工作任务。这次会议非常重要,在央要求转变工作作风,尽量压缩会议的大背景下,我们其他方面的业务会议都进行了认真整合、压缩、合并,就审计工作专门召开一次会议,这可见县委、县政府对审计工作的高度重视。刚才云生同志代表县委、县政府对审计工作作了认真的回顾总结,同时也安排了今年的审计工作任务,应该说云生同志的讲话不仅总结了我们这些年的审计工作,肯定了审计工作取得的成效、发挥的作用,同时实事求是地对我们这些年来审计部门在审计工作发现的问题进行了认真的梳理总结,对大家作了一些通报,希望全县各部门、各单位、各镇街以及学校、医院等单位,一定要认真贯彻好本次会议精神,回去以后要结合本单位工作实际,认真进行总结,认真进行整改。下面,我再讲四点意见:,一、充分肯定,课,后,续,写,公,开,读,县长在全县审计工作会议上的发言_1课后续写公开读,目录,如何,构思续写的内容,读后续写的高分攻略,2,1,目录如何构思续写的内容读后续写的高分攻略21,读后续写的,具体要求,提,供一段,350,词以内,的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写（,150,词左右,），将其发展成一篇与给定材料,有逻辑衔接,、,情节和结构完整,的短文。,读后续写的具体要求 提供一段350词以内的语言材料，要,1,如何,构思续写的内容,Step 1,Read for,elements,Step 2,Read for,plots,Step 3,Gather,ideas,Step 4,Make predictions,1如何构思续写的内容 Step 1 Step 2,阅读,下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。,Steve,was the most amazing person in all of Minneapolis, and he was my cousin. By the age of 19, Steve was a star baseball player at the University of Minnesota. I wanted to be exactly like him. So when Steve asked me to go with him on a spring fishing trip in northern Minnesota, I was excited!,After,planning the trip, we gathered,clothes,and,supplies, and began our great adventure. We reached the Superior National Forest in northern Minnesota by early evening. On our way to the,campsite, Steve pointed to a small house faraway in one of the mountains, saying that it was the ranger station (,护林站,) where the,forester,worked,.,阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整,Finally, after a long walk, we reached the campsite and set up the camp as the sun was setting. Steve knew all the tricks of an experienced wilderness camper. After we gathered enough wood from the,forest, he started the campfire using only stone and steel no matches. For supper we feasted on freeze-dried beef, wild rice and pea soup. I ate greedily after all that work.,Tired enough, we climbed into our sleeping bags early and talked about our plans for fishing the next day. We were still talking quietly when a sudden north wind picked up; the,temperature,dropped and it began to snow. Steve,found,a way to increase the temperature inside the tent. He dragged a log from the forest to the opposite side of the campfire. Then he wrapped aluminum foil (,铝箔,) around the log. The heat from the,fire,reflected off the foil and into the tent. Soon images of lake fish were filling my dreams.,Finally, after a long w,The snow had stopped, but sometime later a powerful wind must have kicked up the flames of our dying fire. I was suddenly awakened by Steve. Our tent was on fire.,Frightened, I ran out of the tent immediately. The tent collapsed (,倒塌,) with Steve inside. Without any thought of,endangering,myself, I reached into the burning tent and pulled him to the icy lake. Fortunately, we were not seriously hurt.,注意,:,1.,所续写短文的词数应为,150,左右；,2.,至少使用,5,个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；,3.,续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；,4.,续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语,。,The snow had stopped, b,Paragraph,1:,Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm,we considered our,difficult situation.,_,_,_,Paragraph,2:,Suddenly, we heard a noise in the forest.,_,_,_,Paragraph 1:,Step 1,Read for elements,Step 1 Read for elements,What,Where,When,Who,I, Steve, forester,In spring,In a forest,An,a,dventurous fishing trip,Elements,What WhereWhen Who I, Steve,Step 2,Read for plots,Step 2 Read for plots,Beginning,(character and setting),Process,Climax,(the main problem or conflict),Ending,(a,time to solve the,problem,/ how things end up),?,Story Mountain,Beginning Process,Beginning,Process,Climax,Ending,1,2,3,?,1.,Steve asked me to go,on,a spring fishing,trip.,2,.,We,reached the campsite and set up the,camp.3.,Our tent was on,fire and we escaped to,the icy lake.,4.,?,Beginning Process Climax Endi,Step 3,Gather ideas,Step 3 Gather ideas,Setting,(time / place),Time: spring,Place: Superior,National Forest in northern Minnesota,Characters,I, Steve, forester,Plot,Steve asked me to go on a spring fishing trip.,Problem,Our tent was on fire.,Ending,?,SettingTime: springCharactersI,信息整理：,体裁：,记叙文,时态：,一般过去时,原文,核心信息解读,：,“我”,和表哥去森林里露营，夜里下起了雪，天很冷，表哥生起了,篝火,，,“我们”,在温暖中入睡了。睡着后，帐篷起火了，“我们”匆忙逃了出来，但帐篷烧毁了,信息整理：体裁：记叙文,Step,4,Make predictions,Step 4 Make predictions,可用于续写的已知信息：,划线词,Character,Steve, forester,Setting,clothes, supplies,campsite,forest, fire,Action,found, endangering,Mood,frightened,段首句,Para. 1:,Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our,difficult situation,.,(,续写部分可详细描写具体困境，比如衣服等物品烧毁，在森林中远离人烟，无法求助等。,),Para. 2:,Suddenly, we heard a,noise,in the forest.,(,续写部分可写声音的来源，发出声音者可以是提供救助的人。,),可用于续写的已知信息：划线词CharacterSteve,写作思路：,“我们”在荒芜人烟的森林深处，孤立无援，随身物品也都随着帐篷一起烧毁了，正当不知道该怎么办的时候，林中传来了声响，发现是护林人开着车过来了。原来护林人看到了火光，过来一探究竟，结果“我们”得救了。,构思的理由：,文章中出现过,forester (,护林人,),，这是极其有用的信息，另外根据常识可知，护林人最重要的工作之一就是侦查火情，所以森林中有火情的话，护林人一定会一探究竟。,写作思路： “我们”在荒芜人烟的森林深处，孤立无援,One,possible version:,Paragraph,1:,Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our difficult situation.,Our,campsite,was in the deep of the,forest, really far away from the highway. We were in the middle of nowhere, wearing only underwear, with our,supplies,burnt into ashes, including our cellphones. Even,Steve,was unsure what to do next. The only thing we could do was just sit in the cold air and wonder how to get out of the forest,.,One possible version:Paragraph,Paragraph,2:,Suddenly, we heard a noise in the forest.,Anxiously we listened and stared into the darkness. A jeep appeared. A,forester,had spotted the light from the fire and had come to have a check. We jumped into the warm vehicle and the forester drove us to the ranger station, where we were given clothes and were able to call our parents. Steve and I had many more camping adventures from then on, but it was on this trip that Steve began to treat me more like a friend rather than a younger cousin. Our friendship continues to this day.,Paragraph 2: Suddenly,2,读后续写,的高分攻略,评,分,标,准,第五档：,21,分,-25,分,第四档：,16,分,-,20,分,第三档：,11,分,-15,分,第二档：,6,分,-10,分,第一档：,1,分,-5,分,2读后续写的高分攻略评第五档：21分-25分,第五档：,21,分,-25,分,与所给短文,融洽度高,，与所提供各段落开头语,衔接合理,。,内容丰富，应用了,5,个以上,短文中标出的关键词语。,所使用,语法结构和词汇丰富，准确,，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。,有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文,结构紧凑,。,第五档： 21分-25分与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开,与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。,内容比较丰富，应用了,5,个以上短文所标出的关键词语。,所使用的语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达。,比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。,第四档：,16,分,-20,分,与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。第四,第三档（,11,分,-15,分,）,与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接；,写出了若干有关内容，应用了,4,个以上短文中标出的关键词语；,应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求，虽有一些错误，但不影响意义的表达；,应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。,第三档（11分-15分）与所给短文关系较为密切，与所提供各段,第二档（,6,分,-10,分）,与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供各段落开头语有一定程度的衔接；,写出了一些有关内容，应用了,3,个以上短文中标出的关键词语；,语法结构单调、词汇项目有限，有些语法结构和词汇方面的错误，影响了意义的表达；,较少使用语句间的连接成分，全文内容缺少连贯性。,第二档（6分-10分）与所给短文有一定的关系，与所提供各段,第一档（,1,分,-5,分）,与所给短文和开头语的衔接较差；,产出内容太少，很少使用短文中标出的关键词语；,语法结构单调、词汇项目很有限，有较多语法结构和词汇方面的错误，严重影响了意义的表达；,缺乏语句间的连接成分，全文内容不连贯。,第一档（1分-5分）与所给短文和开头语的衔接较差；,续写中常出现的问题,一,、,书写,潦草,，卷面,涂改,；,二、,上下文的,连贯性,差,；,三,、,错词错句多，好词好句,少；,四,、,没有,丰富和生动的细节,推动情节,的,发展；,五,、,与所给短文及段落开头语的,衔接程度,差,；,六、没有,使用,5,个或,5,个以上,原文中的划线词语,，没有,划出,所,用,的划线,词语。,续写中常出现的问题一、书写潦草，卷面涂改；,获得高分的写作技巧,Tip 1:,故事要围绕着主要人物展开。,Tip 2:,详细刻画角色及其情感。,Tip 4:,使用恰当,的修饰词,以,使描写更加生动。,Tip 3:,使用恰当的衔接词以使故事更有连贯性。,Tip 5:,做到首尾呼应以使故事更加有条理。,Tip 6:,确保第二段和第一段的衔接有逻辑。,获得高分的写作技巧Tip 1: 故事要围绕着主要人物展开。T,阅读,下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事,。,(2016,年,10,月浙江高考试题,),One,weekend in July,Jane,and her husband,Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the,lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom,“Im,going to find a better spot for us to,camp”,and,walked,away,.,With,no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time.,After,she had,climbed,to a,high,place, she,turned,示例,阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整,around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost,.,“,Tom!” she cried. “Help!”,No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom,and her family,.,She wanted to hold him,and tell,him how,much she loved him,.,Jane,rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty.,She could,around, hoping to see the lake,hear,water,trickling (,滴落,) somewhere,at a distance,. Quickly she followed the sound to a,stream,.,To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the,lake.,As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another,helicopter,flew overhead. Jane took off her,yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.,hear water trickling (滴落) some,注意,：,1.,所,续写短文的词数应为,150,左右；,2,.,应,使用,5,个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词；,3,.,续,写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；,4,.,续,写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语,。,Paragraph 1,：,But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again,. _,_,Paragraph,2,：,It was daybreak when Jane woke up,.,_,_,注意：,The underlined words,Character:,Tom, Jane,Setting:,yellow house, stream, lake, helicopter, at,a,distance,Action:,walked, climbed,Mood:,to her great joy,The underlined words Character,Beginning,Climax,Ending,quarrel,吵架，生气离开,看见直升飞机,angry,(helicopters),rescued,?,被救？,Process,l,ost,迷路,confused,，,tired,BeginningClimaxEnding q,构思,细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落的逻辑关系；,围绕划定的,10,个,关键词，合理创新故事情节。,Para. 1: Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasdark.,续写部分：,简当时的感受？,简是如何过夜的？,简,睡着,了,吗？,Para,. 2: ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.,续,写部分：,简获救了吗？,谁救了简？,怎么救的？,她当时的感受？,构思细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落的逻辑关系；Para.,注意,一、所,续写短文的词数应为150左右（词数,少于130,的，,从,总分中减去,2分,）；,二、应,使用,5个,以上短文中标有下划线的关键词,语，少用,1,个扣,1,分,，,少用,2,个扣,2,分,，,少用,3,到,4,个扣,3,分,；,三、续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语，,少划,1,个不扣分，少划,2,个到,3,个扣,1,分，,少划,4,个扣,2,分,。,注意一、所续写短文的词数应为150左右（词数少于130的，,第,五档续写例文,But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again,.,Feeling disappointed,Jane,had to stay alone for another night. After,walking,a long distance again, it occurred to her that she had a box of matches with her. She was wild with joy and used them to burn some branches so that she could get some warmth. Staring at the jumping fire, Jane thought of all the things that she and,Tom,had experienced together. Only in this way could Jane feel better and fall asleep.,第五档续写例文 But no more hel,It was daybreak when Jane woke up.,Feeling refreshed, she continued to walk along the,stream,to find the way out. At noon,to her great joy, she finally caught sight of a wide water surface,at a distance,. It was the,lake,! Also she spotted a crew of policemen seeking along the bank! It seemed that they also spotted her because they were moving towards her! It was Tom who called the police. Finally, they led her to her husband. And the minute they met, they hugged together firmly as if they would never separate again. They got home and have led a happy life ever since.,It was daybrea,【,点评,】,该文为最高档五档作文,22,分。,第一,、,续写部分和原文及首句的融,合,度高,。,第一段开头,Jane had to stay alone for another night,一句中的,another night,说明作者理解了原文中,Jane,已经度过了一夜的事实，又为下文她睡着了埋下了伏笔，从而和第二段又,衔接,上了。第二段开头作者说，,Jane,感觉精力恢复了，与段首所说的醒来呼应。,【点评】 该文为最高档五档作文22分。,【,点评,】,第二,、,该文内容,丰富,。,增加了,a,box of,matches,和,jumping fire,，,极有画面感；同时，在第二段，,Jane,看到了平静的湖面、警方的活动和他们见面后的喜悦等细节都描写,得,很生动,。,另外，在情节的推进方面，作者在第一段续,写,“,生火,”,和,第二段续写的,开头,“,继续前行,”,使,故事复杂化，,然后,完成故事,（,看到湖面、警察和,Tom,）。,【点评】 第二、该文内容丰富。增加了a box of mat,第,三、,该,文基本没有语言错误，,达到了语法和词汇的准确性；,在词汇和语法的丰富,性上，作者使用,了,occur,，,wild,with,joy,，,refresh,，,caught,sight,of,，,spot,，,the minute,等,词汇,；在,语法结构上，作者使用了现在,分词,feeling disappointed,，,staring,at the jumping,fire,，,主语,从句,it,occurred to her,that,和,it,seemed,that,，,as,if,引导,的状语从句，,倒装,only,in this way could Jane,.,，,在续写中体现出了较高的语言运用水平,。最后,，在,连贯,性,方面,，作者使用,了,and,，,also,，,after,等,词将上下文的逻辑体现了,出来。,【,点评,】,第三、该文基本没有语言错误，达到了语法和词汇的准确性；在词汇,
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