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书面表达感悟高考Passage1 （2016年新课标1卷）假定你是李华，暑假想去一家外贸公司兼职，已写好申请书和个人简历（resume）。给外教Ms Jenkins 写信，请她帮你修改所附材料的文字和格式（format）。注意： 1. 词数100左右; 2. 可以适当增加细节，已使行文连贯。【答案】Dear Ms Jenkins,I am Li Hua. I am writing to tell you something about my plan for the coming summer vacation and I also want you to do me a favor.In order to get some practical experience, I am planning to take a part-time job in a foreign capital company. I have already finished my job application and personal resume. But this is the first time that I have written an application and the personal resume, so I dont even know if there are something to pay attention to. So, Im writing you the letter , hoping you can give me some help. I will be very grateful if you can help me.Looking forward to your reply. And Id be really thankful.Yours,Li Hua【亮点】 本文是一篇较为优秀的范文。格式正确，要点全面，语言通顺流畅，很好地完成了写作任务。在本文中开头提出写信的目的，然后具体讲述自己的困难，再提出请求，最后表达自己的感激之情。所以在内容上逻辑性较强。此外，作者还使用了不定式短语In order to get some practical experience, 现在分词短语hoping you can give me some help, 宾语从句if there are something to pay attention to等。经典句式this is the first time that I have written an application and the personal resume也是文章的亮点所在。Passage2（2016年浙江卷）“Planning is good , but doing is better”是一句英国名言。请以此为题用英语写一篇100120词的短文。要求如下： 1. 简述你对这句名言的理解； 2. 用一个具体事例加以说明； 3. 给出恰当的结尾。注意：1. 文章的标题已给出（不计词数）： 2. 文中不得以任何形式透露地区、学校、老师或同学姓名等真实信息，否则按作弊行为认定。Planning Is Good, But Doing Is Better_【答案】Planning Is Good, But Doing Is Better Planning is good as it decides in detail how we do what we want to do. However, a plan can bear no fruit without being actually carried out. My experience in the English speech contest last October is a case in point. A month before the event, I spent hours working out a schedule outlining my goals and practical steps. After that, I set out to read widely for an inspiring topic, wrote a speech, and practiced its delivery in beautiful pronunciation with good public speech skills. I finally came out of the contest as the first prize winner. I know how I achieved my success. It came from good planning and better doing combined.【解析】试题分析：本文为一篇开放式作文。题目给出标题和提纲。结合题目可判断出主要是介绍将计划付诸实施的重要性。围绕这个主旨去写，不能跑题。提纲部分还要求三个方面：1.简述你对这句名言的理解；2.用一个具体事例加以说明；3.给出恰当的结尾。这就确定了作文的结构框架。在主旨和结构确定下来后，还要注意文章应用第一人称和一般现在时和一般过去时。写作时发挥自己的想象，灵活运用英语知识，采用不同的表达方式将文章完整地表述出来。注意要主次分明、详略得当，语言力求准确、简洁，同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章自然连贯。最后要认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等。【名师点睛】本篇范文短小精悍，结构合理，语言简洁，时态、人称准确，很好地完成了写作任务。在文章开头，作者紧扣题目，提出自己对plan的理解，同时引出下文，然后用自己的亲身经历表明要将计划付诸实施非常重要。在文中，作者用到了短语in detail, bear no fruit, carry out, set out to等短语，避免了文章表达的单一。此外，还用到了宾语从句how we do和how I achieved my success, 以及句型It came from good planning and better doing combined等，这些都给文章增加了亮点。Passage3 （2016年北京卷）假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。你的英国朋友Jim 在给你的邮件中提到他对中国历史很感兴趣，并请你介绍一位你喜欢的中国历史人物。请你给Jim回信，内容包括：1. 该人物是谁； 2. 该人物的主要贡献； 3. 该人物对你的影响。 注意：1. 词数不少于50；2. 开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 Dear Jim, _Yours,Li Hua【答案】Dear Jim, Its great to hear from you. I feel proud knowing your interest in Chinese history. As for my favourite figure in Chinese history, it must be Wei Yuan, a great thinker in the late Qing Dynasty. He, in his book, Haiguo Tuzhi (Maps and Records of the World), introduced modern technologies and ideas to China. That opened our eyes to the world. In fact, he inspires me to major in English in college to be a bridge between China and the world. Interested in knowing more? I can find you some books! Just let me know. Cheers!Yours,Li Hua亮点说明：范文使用了词组hear from, As for, In fact和搭配inspire sb to do sth等，丰富了作文内容；范文注意上下文的语意连贯。 【名师点睛】本题偏向于信息介绍类的开放式写作，对于应用文格式的要求并不高，但对于语言组织和词汇积累的要求极高。本次应用文并没有限定考生必须写某一位历史人物，但是谈及人物的贡献和对自己的影响时，考生有可能会遇到大量的词汇障碍，故难度较去年明显提升。Passage4 （2015年新课标1卷）假定你是李华，你校英文报“外国文化”栏目拟刊登介绍美国节日风俗和中学生生活的短文。请给美国朋友彼得写信约稿，要点如下：1. 栏目介绍；2. 稿件内容；3. 稿件长度：约400词；4. 交稿日期：6月28日前。 注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯的；3. 开头语已为你写好。【答案】Dear Peter,Id like to ask you to write an article for our schools English newspaper.The “Foreign Cultures” section in our newspaper is very popular among us students. It carries articles written by foreign friends about the cultures of their home countries. Would you please write something about the culture in your part of the United States? And we would especially welcome articles about how Americans spend their holidays and festivals, and the life of American high school students. You can write anything relevant so long as it s interesting and informative. 400 words would be fine. Could we have your article before June 28?Im looking forward to hearing from you.Yours,Li Hua【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构。比如It carries articles written by foreign friends about the cultures of their home countries.运用了过去分词作后置定语， And we would especially welcome articles about how Americans spend their holidays and festivals, and the life of American high school students.运用了宾语从句。此外，文章还使用了大量习语和短语，如be popular among, so long as, look forward to , hear from等。Passage5 （2014年新课标2卷）一家英语报社向中学生征文，主题是“十年后的我”，请根据下列要点和你的畅想完成短文。1. 家庭：2. 工作：3. 业余生活。注意：1.词数100左右：2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯：3.开头语已为你写好。【答案】I often imagine what my life would be like in the future . I think my life will be very different in ten years .i will be twenty eight years old by then . I will have my own family, probably with a lovely child . I hope I will work in a computer company as a program designer . I will enjoy my work and get along well with my colleagues . Iwill do a good job in whatever I do .In my free time , I will continue to take regular exercise, such as swimming , running and various ball games . On my holidays , I will travel around the world .In a word , my life will be much richer and more colorful .【亮点说明】本篇范文短小精悍，要点全面，语言简练，时态人称准确，很好的完成了写作任务。在文章开头作者紧扣题目，提出自己对未来的畅想，然后从生活，工作，家庭三个方面描述了自己十年后的生活。在文中作者用到了短语In my free time , In a word , such as等介词短语，避免了文章句式的单一。此外，还用到了宾语从句in whatever I do、I will work in a computer company as a program designer等，这些都给朴素的语言带来了亮点。7
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