作文“六步法”教学.doc

作文“六步法”教学Step1 仔细审题 Step2. 理清要点Step3. 译写单句 Step4. 连句成篇Step5. 检查润色 Step6. 定稿誊写范例1题目：Mr. Smith and Mr. Green used to be neighbors for years. One morning Mr. Smith called at Mr. Greens. The following is their conversation. S: Good morning.G: Good morning.S: I havent seen your son Tom for a long time. Has he made great achievements?G: Oh, I dont know if he is successful, but I know that he has drawn the governments attention and the police are searching for him.要求： 1、用间接引语描述如上 幽默故事。 2、词数为80100。分析：题目不难，但要完成两件事情：一是要把要点表达清楚，要传神、达意；二是要把直接引语转换成间接引语。第一步：仔细审题情景提供的方式是对话，题材是故事。内容是两个邻居之间的一段幽默对话，涉及到的词汇有：used to ，call on，hesitate，make achievements，etc, 涉及的句子有简单句、并列句、和复合句。词数为80100。第二步：理清要点本文是一篇记序文，发生的时间是一天下午，地点是Mr.Green家,人物有Mr.Smith和Mr.Green，事件是谈论Mr.Green的儿子，故事以Mr. Green一段幽默的话结尾。所以，本文要点如下： 1、Mr. Smith和Mr.Green是曾是多年的邻居。 2、一天上午，Mr.Smith去Mr.Green家拜访。 3、他们互致问候早上好。 4、Mr. Smith说他已多年不见Mr.Green的儿子Tom了，相知到他是否已取得了很大的成就。 5、Mr.Smith踌躇了一会儿，说不知道儿子是否取得成就，但政府很重视他，警察也在全国各地找他。第三步：译写单句1.Mr. Smith and Mr. Green used to be neighbors for many years.2.One morning, Mr.Smith called on Mr.Green at his house.3.They said good morning to each other.4.Mr. Smith said that he had not seen Mr.Greens son, Tom for several years. He asked if he had made great achievements.5.Mr.Green hesitated for a moment. He said he did not know if made any achievements. He said he knew that the government said that his son was very important. The police were after him everywhere in the country.第四步：连句成篇Mr. Smith and Mr. Green used to be neighbors for many years. One morning, Mr.Smith called on Mr.Green at his house.They said “good morning” to each other.Then Mr. Smith said that he had not seen Mr.Greens son, Tom for several years. He asked if he had made great achievements.Mr.Green hesitated for a moment. He said he did not know if made any achievements. He said he only knew that the government said that his son was very important, for the police were after him everywhere in the country第五步：检查润色Mr. Smith and Mr. Green used to be neighbors for many years. One morning, Mr.Smith called on Mr.Green at his house. First, they greeted each other ( said “good morning” to each other),then they talked about Mr.Greens son, Tom. Mr. Smith said that he had not seen Mr.Greens son, Tom for several years and wondered (. He asked) if he had made great achievements.Mr.Green hesitated for a moment. Then he said he did not know if made any achievements, but he said he only knew that the government thought (said) that his son was “very” important, for the police were after him everywhere in the country.第六步：定稿誊写范例2题目：根据以下提示，用英语写一篇介绍香港的短文，字数100字左右。 香港位于中国的东南部，面积1045平方公里，人口600多万，被称为“东方明珠”。1842年鸦片战争后，当时的中国政府被迫将香港割让给英国。1997年她已回到祖国的怀抱，其前景会更美好。 参考词汇：明珠 pearl，鸦片 opium第一步：仔细审题本文属说明性文章。第二步：理清要点1、香港的地理位置、面积和人口。2、鸦片战争后香港的处境。3、1997年她回到祖国的怀抱。4、其前景会更美好。第三步：译写单句1. Hong Kong lies in the southeast of China. Her area is 1,045k. Her population is more than 6 million.2. She was given up to Britain after the 1842 Opium War.3. In 1997, she returned to motherland.4. Her future is very beautiful.第四步：连句成篇Hong Kong lies in the southeast of China. Her area is 1,045k and (. Her) population is more than 6 million. She was given up to Britain after the 1842 Opium War.In 1997, she returned to motherland and (. Her) future is very beautiful.第五步：检查润色1Hong Kong lies in the southeast of China. she has an area of( Her area is)1,045k and (. Her) has a population of more than 6 million ( population is more than 6 million). She is well-known as “the Pearl of the East”. In 1842,She was given up to Britain by the then Chinese government after the 1842 Opium War, and the people in Hong Kong lived a hard life . In 1997, she returned to motherland and the people of Hong Kong are and will be working hard to make her more beautiful. (. Her) future is very beautiful.第五步：检查润色1之后的文章Hong Kong lies in the southeast of China. she has an area of1,045k and has a population of more than 6 million. She is well-known as “the Pearl of the East”. In 1842,She was given up to Britain by the then Chinese government after the 1842 Opium War, and the people in Hong Kong lived a hard life . In 1997, she returned to motherland and the people of Hong Kong are and will be working hard to make her more beautiful.第五步：检查润色2Hong Kong lies in the southeast of China. she has an area of1,045k and has a population of more than 6 million and(. She) is well-known as “the Pearl of the East”. In 1842, the then Chinese government was forced to give up Hong Kong to Britain ( She was given up to Britain by the then Chinese government) after the Opium War, and the people in Hong Kong suffered a lot ( lived a hard life) . After the return of Hong Kong to China in 1997 ( In 1997, she returned to motherland and the people of Hong Kong are and), the people of Hong Kong are united more with the Chinese people in mainland China, and they will work hard ( will be working hard) to make her more beautiful.第五步：检查润色2之后的文章Hong Kong lies in the southeast of China. she has an area of1,045k and has a population of more than 6 million and is well-known as “the Pearl of the East”. In 1842, the then Chinese government was forced to give up Hong Kong to Britain after the Opium War, and the people in Hong Kong suffered a lot . After the return of Hong Kong to China in 1997, the people of Hong Kong are united more with the Chinese people in mainland China, and they will work hard to make her more beautiful.第六步：定稿誊写Homework:请以记者的身份,根据案件登记卡所提供的情况，用英语写一篇新闻报导稿。字数：100词左右。INFORMATION ABOUT THE CASETIME4:55 p.m. yesterday, just before the class time.PLACE bank in the Park StreetWEATHERraining hard ,little trafficHappens: Two young men with mask rushed in, threatened the clerk with gun,put the money in the bags,rushed out and droved away with about 20,000 dollars. Nobody was killed or wounded. The police are searching for the robbers.Possible version: Yesterday afternoon, a robbery happened in a bank in the Park Street. According to the witnesses statements, it was five minutes to 5:00 pm, just before the closing time of the bank. And it was raining heavily, with little traffic on the road outside. Suddenly, two young men with masks rushed in and threatened the clerks with guns. Then they put the money in bags,rushed out and droved away with about 20,000 dollars. All the things lasted for only a few minutes. fortunately, there was nobody killed or wounded in the robbery.The police are searching for the robbers, hoping whoever gets the connected information calls them up as soon as possible. Possible version: Yesterday afternoon, a robbery happened in a bank in the Park Street. According to the witnesses statements, it was five minutes to 5:00 pm, just before the closing time of the bank. And it was raining heavily, with little traffic on the road outside. Suddenly, two young men with masks rushed in and threatened the clerks with guns. Then they put the money in bags,rushed out and droved away with about 20,000 dollars. All the things lasted for only a few minutes. fortunately, there was nobody killed or wounded in the robbery.The police are searching for the robbers, hoping whoever gets the connected information calls them up as soon as possible.