专四便条写作-NoteWriting.ppt

EnglishWritingIVLectureThreeNoteWriting便条写作 SECTIONBNOTE WRITING 10MIN WriteonANSWERSHEETTWOanoteofabout50 60wordsbasedonthefollowingsituation Yourclassmate Jimmy isheadoftheuniversity sswimmingclub Hehasinvitedyoutojointheclub butyoulikesomeothersport Writehimanote declininghisinvitationandexplainingwhy Markswillbeawardedforcontent organization grammarandappropriateness SectionB Note Writing Note Writing 便条写作 满分为10分 评分标准主要参照该文是否格式完整 结构合理 内容表达清楚 行文连贯 能否实现应用文的交际功能等方面 LayoutofNotes 日期 Date 称谓 salutation 内容 Body 署名 Complimentaryclose BasicRequirements 1 Correctinform Correctarrangementororganizationofrelevantinformation Date Salutation Details Thecomplimentaryclose Signature punctuation Observethemodelnotes2 Completeincontent Understandingtheinstructions Understandingthesituation Coveringthegist mainpoints Dictationofsomemodelnotes 3 Appropriateinlanguage Isthenotequiteformal informalorcolloquialinlanguage Usedifferentstylesondifferentoccasionsanddisplayyourabilitytouselanguageappropriately Avoidgrammaticalerrors Ensurethatnodifficultyisexperiencedbythereader I 格式 1 日期 正确的写法 June24th 2003 June10 2003 June24th June24 6 24 2003 24 6 2003 位置在右上角 2 称呼 正确的写法 DearJack DearJack Jack Jack 位置在日期下面一行左侧 3 结尾 正确的写法 Yourssincerely Yourstruly yours sincerely Truly yours Sincerely Sally 注意此处不能用汉语拼音或打叉XXX 位置在便条结尾的右下方 如果上述各项都按左对齐 不扣分 如 DearJack Ihave SincerelyYours sally II 内容 按便条具体内容的各项功能给分 以2002年的便条要求为例 Youhaveheardthatyourfriend Jack wishestosellhiswalkman Writehimanoteexpressingyourinterestinit askinghimaboutitsconditionandofferingapriceforit 本便条内容必须包括以下三项 1 Expressingyourinterestinit 2 AskingJackaboutitscondition 3 Offeringapriceforit 缺内容扣分 语言表达较差扣0 5 1 5 拼写及语法错误超过3个的扣一分 Notes writing评分标准 1 格式不对扣1分2 超字数或字数达不到扣1分3 语法 拼写错误3个扣1分 主要内容是否交待清楚占最大比重 造成错误的原因1 不写日期或日期格式不对 很多学生习惯将它写在右下方 2 署名后不应该有任何标点符号 而很多学生习惯点上句号 3 结束语与署名写在一行 4 Yours写成Your语言不得体 比如 对于很随便的情景 使用很正式的词 Back 注意 1 便条的时间 2 写便条者与收便条者之间的关系 3 情景的正式程度 根据情景确定适当的称呼和署名 确定所用语言的语体 4 仔细检查格式是否正确 内容表达是否清楚 用词是否准确得体 句子结构是否符合语法 Back TypesofNotes1 DeclininganInvitation2 PassingInformation3 AskingforInformation4 TakingLeave5 AskingforHelp6 AskingforPermission7 ExpressingRegrets8 ExpressingCongratulation9 ExpressingGoodWishes10 MakingComplaints11 Othertypes Back CommonTypesofNotes 1 DeclininganInvitationTask YoureceivedanotefromyoursisterdormroominvitingallyourroommatestoseeafilmnextWednesdayafternooninYouhaoCinema Butyoucan tgo Writeanoteofabout50 60wordstellingthemyoucan tgoandexplainingthereason KeyNote 1 Thanks 2 Reasons 3 ApologySample Sample Apr 6DearEveryone Wecan tthankyouenoughfortheinvitationtoseethefilm However nextWednesdayisnotagoodtimeforusbecausewearegoingtotakepartinourschool sdramacontest Couldwemakeitsomeothertime Wearereallysorryfornotbeingabletogo Yours WangLingling Onbehalfofall 要点分析 1 这是写给同龄人的 语气和文体都不必太正式 2 内容包括 1 感谢邀请 2 陈述不能去的理由 3 表示抱歉 3 不必提出另一次约会的时间 因为写作任务里并没有要求 多写还可能出没必要的错 Back 2 PassingInformationTask YoureceivedatelephonemessagefromanassistantworkingatthecomputercenteraskingyourroommateBob Janetoclaimhis herlostelectronicdictionarytomorrow Writeanotepassingtheinformation KeyNote 1 sourceoftheinformation 2 ContentSample Sample Feb 19DearJane Itookatelephonemessageforyoujustnowwhileyouwereatthelibrary PeterJames theassistantatthecomputercenter saidthatsomeonehadturnedinyourelectronicdictionaryandtoldyoutopickituptomorrowat10 30inRoom303 RemembertotakeyourIDcardwithyou Yours Marilyn要点分析 1 这是给同学的便条 语气和格式不必正式 2 内容应包括 1 如何知道该消息的 2 要你转告什么 3 在何处 什么时间 找谁以及还需要带什么证件去取 3 写清如何去取是重点 Back 3 AskingforInformation Task YouhearthattheStudentunionwantssomevolunteerstoworkduringthesummervacation WritetoBonnieInsulwhoisinchargeofitaskingforfurtherinformation KeyNote 1 Theme thetopicsentenceinthetask 2 informationwanttoknow 3 yourwayofcontact 4 Thanks sample Sample May28thDearMs Insul IknowthatthestudentUnionwantssomevolunteerstoworkduringthesummervacation Wouldyoupleasetellmesomedetailedinformation suchasthekindofjob thelengthofthework thestartingdate andanyspecificrequirementsofthework etc sothatIcandecidewhetherIshouldapplyforitornot PleasedropanoteinMailbox2365 Thankyouverymuchforthehelp SincerelyYours LiuXiaoming要点分析 1 收条人是你不认识的人 所以语气和格式都要正式 2 内容应包括 1 主题 第一句话 2 需要了解的工作的细节 如什么样的工作 干多长时间 等等 3 你的联系方式 4 致谢3 此类寻求信息的便条内容越具体越好 Back 4 TakingLeave Task YouhavetosendyourroommatePeter Janewhoisrunningahighfeverthismorningtothehospital soyoucan thavethismorning sreadingclass Writeanoteofabout60wordstoyourteacherMr Chenexplainingthereasonforyourabsenceoftheclass KeyNote 1 Askforaleave 2 Reasons 3 Apologysample Sample Jan 6DearProfessorChen IamsorrythatIcan tattendthismorning sreadingclassbecauseIhavetotakeJanetothehospital Sheisrunningahighfeverandcan tpossiblygobyherself Iwilltrytomakeuptoday slessonbyconsultingtheotherstudents noteswhenwecomeback Yourssincerely LinJing要点分析 1 这是学生写给老师的请假条 语气和格式都应正式 2 内容应包括 1 你要请假 2 原因 3 致歉3 补上课的内容为附加内容 有了更好 Back 5 AskingforHelpTask Upongraduation youaredeterminedtogoabroadforfurtherstudy Whenyougottheapplicationformsfromthechosenuniversities youneedsomerecommendationletters WriteanotetoaskProfessorYangforit KeyNote 1 Yoursituation difficulty 2 Askforhelp 3 Thankssample Sample May8 2003DearProfessorYang I vebeenluckytobeoneofyourstudentsduringmyfourthyear Bothyourlecturesandpersonalityhaveinpressedmegreatly IdecidedtogotoAmericatoworkforamasterdegree Sinceyouenjoyreputationbothathomeandabroad I llbeobligedifyouwouldsparesometimetowritemearecommendationletter I llbemoreconfidentthaneverwithyourkindnessandencouragement Verysincerelyyours WuYu要点分析 1 这是写给老师的便条 所以语气要客气委婉 格式要正式 2 内容应包括 1 背景介绍 我是谁 我出国求学的原因 我对收件人的仰慕 恰倒好处 2 提出要求 3 表明盼望的心情和谢意 3 为了促成事情的圆满解决 适度地强化内容也是必要的 这则便条的最后一句就起到了事半功倍的作用 Back 6 AskingforPermissionTask Youhavetoborrowyourroommate slunchboxbecauseyourformerclassmatehascometovisityouandyouaregoingtohavelunchtogether AsXinrongisoutshoppingandwon tbebackforlunch youjusttakehers his Leaveanotetellingher himaboutit KeyNote 1 Whatyouwanttodo 2 Askforpermission 3 Thankssample Sample 22 10 2003DearXinrong IhavetouseyourlunchboxthisnoonbecauseIhaveavisitor Sinceyouwon tbebackforlunchI llsimplytakeyours IwillreturnittoyouassoonasIfinisheating Ifthiscausesanyinconveniencetoyou Ifeelterriblysorry Yours WuPeng要点分析 1 便条是写给同学的 所以不必刻意讲究 2 内容应包括 1 你要做什么 2 请求允许和原谅 3 致谢3 在物品的主人不在时 需要使用他的东西应急是我们时常遇到的情况 留个便条说明一下显得礼貌 所以最后一句的语气应该正式一点 Back 7 ExpressingRegretsTask YourmiddleschoolclassmatewhoisinanotheruniversityinthesamecitycametovisityoulastSaturday butyouwerenotin writeanoteofabout60wordsexpressingyourregretsonhavingmissedseeinghim herandgivecertainreason KeyNote 1 Explainreasons 2 expressregrets 3 yourwayofmakingupforit Sample Sample Jan 21 2004DearXiaoMing ItwasverykindofyoutocometoseemelastSaturday IthappenedthattheEnglishDepartmentheldalectureonhowtoimproveoralEnglishandalltheEnglishmajorswererequiredtoattend WhatapitythatIdidn tseeyou ShallwemeetnextSunday I dliketovisityouandyouruniversity I llcallyoubeforeIgo Yours Lily要点分析 1 这是一个写给朋友的便条 要求中没有给出姓名的情况下 必须加上姓名 2 内容必须包括 表示感谢 解释原因 表示遗憾以及补救方式 3 尽管朋友间的便条使用非正式语气 但应注意要真诚地表示遗憾 Back 8 ExpressingCongratulationYouwatchedthebasketballgamebetweenthesophomoresandthejuniors Thesophomores teamwhereyourfriendJimisinwonthegame Writeanotetocongratulatehim KeyNote 1 sourceofthenews 2 yourreactionandcongratulationsample Sample Apr 4 2003DearJim Congratulationstoyouandyourteam Iwatchedthegameyesterdayandwasgladtoseethatyouhelpedyourteambeatthejuniorsbadly YoubehavedextremelywellandIthoughtyoucouldwintheBestAthleteifthereweresuchareward Iwillsupportyouandyourteamasever Yours George要点分析 1 这是一个写给朋友的便条 所以使用非正式语言表现朋友之间的亲密关系 2 内容应包括 得知消息的途径 写便条人的反映以及表示祝贺 Back 9 ExpressingGoodWishesTask Yourforeignteacherisleavingforhishomecountryafterteachinginyouruniversityforoneyear Writeanoteexpressingyourgoodwishestohim her KeyNote 1 aboutthenews 2 expressyourgoodwishesSample Sample Dec 20 2003DearProf Smith I veheardthatyou veleavingforUSthedayaftertomorrow I velearnedagreatdealfromyouoverthepastyearandIfeelsorryfornothavinghadthechancetoattendyourclasslonger Pleaseacceptmybestwishes IwishyouapleasanttripandamerryChristmas Yourssincerely Cathy要点分析 1 这是一个写给老师的便条 所以语气和用词应显示尊敬 2 内容必须包括 得知离开的消息 依依不舍的感情及美好的祝愿 3 语气和格式有点正式 但又不失亲近 表示祝愿要真诚 Back 10 MakingComplaintsTask Astudent sally whoislivingnextdooroftenplaysrecordssoloudlydeepintothenight Writeanoteconveyingyourcomplaints KeyNote 1 problemandcomplaint 2 yoursuggestion hopeinsolvingtheproblem 3 Thankssample Sample Jan 2 2004DearSally Thefinalexaminationarecomingandeveryoneisstudyinglateatnight ButfortunatelyI vefoundithardtositdowntoworkrecently becauseIhavebeendisturbedbytheloudnoisemadebyyourstereo Willyouturnitdownsothatitwillnotdisturbothers Thankyou Yours Jane要点分析 1 这是一个非正式的便条 两人是关系比较密切的同学 所以语言简洁直接 2 内容必须包括 导入抱怨的话题 提出不满 希望如何解决问题 作后表示感谢 3 尽管双方地位平等且关系密切 还应注意礼貌地表达不满 这样才容易被对方接受 Back OtherTypesofNotes 1 appointment 关键 定好约会的时间 地点Example Feb 11thHelen CouldwemeetonFridayafternoonat3o clockattheschoolgate Jane 2 Apology 关键 遵循以下步骤 道歉 解释原因 再一次道歉 注意道歉的表达方式 July3rdLily I mterriblysorryIfailedtomeetyouattheschoolgateyesterdayafternoon Ihadoneofthebiketirespuncturedonmyway andbythetimeIhadthepuncturemendedandgottoschool youmusthavegivenuphopeandleft Dopleaseforgiveme GeorgeUsefulexpressions 1 I msorrythat 2 I mso terribly awfully extremely reallysorrythat 3 Iwouldliketoexpressmyapologiesfor 4 Iapologizefor 5 Forgiveme ing 6 Pleaseacceptmyapologiesfor 3 SendingInvitation 关键 写明时间 地点及活动内容Example July12thMr Mrs Johnson Weshouldbeverygladifyoucouldcometodinnerwithusatourapartmentatabout7p m onWednesday Sep 21st welookforwardtoseeingyou Lin Wang 4 Inquiry 关键 注意请求的方式及语言要客气 Example Aug 1stDan Pleaseletmeknowassoonaspossiblewhatarrangementsyouhavemade Thankyou TongUsefulexpressions 1 CouldI 2 Please Please 3 Will Would Couldyouplease 4 Iwouldliketo 5 Iwouldbegratefulif 6 Wewouldappreciate ing 7 Iwonderif 5 ExpressThanks 关键 表达谢意的句型 Example May5thDearMr Shen I mwritingtotellyouhowgratefulIamforyourwarmhospitalityduringmystayinyourcity Ienjoyeditgreatly FengUsefulExpression 1 Thankyouvery so muchfor Manythanksfor 2 I mwritingtothankyoufor 3 I mwritingtoexpressmyappreciationof 4 Itwasmostkindofyouto Back 历年试题 TEM4 97 YouarePeter Mary Youhadapartyatyourhomerecentlybutunintentionallyneglectedtoinviteaclosefriendofyours Victoria Writeheranoteapologizingforthisandexplaininghowthemistakecameabout TEM4 98 YouareMarkorsally Youhavegotatickettoacomputerfair butyounowfindthatyouareunabletogo Writeanotetoyourfriend George explainingwhyyouaresendingtheenclosedtickettohimandtellinghimbrieflyhowtogetthere 历年试题 TEM4 99 You velearnedthatyourfriendJimmyisillthesedays Writehimanoteexpressingyourconcern askingafterhishealthandgivingyourbestwishes TEM4 2000 You vereadonthenoticeboardthattheuniversitylibraryislookingforapart timelibraryassistantwhocanworkatweekends Youthinkthatyourclassmate George isasuitablepersonforthisvacancy Writehimanote tellinghimwhatyouknowaboutthevacancyandtryingtopersuadehimtogoforaninterview 历年试题 TEM4 2001 Yesterdayyoufailedtoturnupfortheappointmentwithyourteacher ProfessorWang Writehimanoteofapologyandmakearequestforanothermeeting Youshouldalsosuggestthetimefortherequestedmeeting TEM4 2002 Youhaveheardthatyourfriend Jack wishestosellhiswalkman Writehimanoteexpressingyourinterestinit askinghimaboutitsconditionandofferingapriceforit 历年试题 TEM4 2003 Yourfriend Jane hasfailedinthefinalexam andisfeelingveryunhappyaboutit Writeanotetocomfortherandgivehersomeencouragement TEM4 2004 Yourfriend Jane hasfailedinthefinalexam andisfeelingveryunhappyaboutit Writeanotetocomfortherandgivehersomeencouragement Back Exercise Writeanoteofabout50 60wordsbasedonthefollowingsituation Youhavereceivedabirthdaygiftfromafriendofyours Writeanotetoacknowledgethegiftandexpressyourthanks Markswillbeawardedforcontent organization grammarandappropriacy Sample April 5 2005DearLinda Whatasurpriseitistogetthebirthdaygiftfromyou I mveryhappytohaveyourwishes Andthegiftissopretty thatIreallyloveit Infact I mgoingtogiveabirthdaypartytomorroweveningathome I dlikeyoutocome Thankyouagainforthegiftandyourgoodwishes Yours Jenny Back Writeanoteofabout50 60wordsbasedonthefollowingsituation Yourclassmate Jimmy isheadoftheuniversity sswimmingclub Hehasinvitedyoutojointheclub butyoulikesomeothersport Writehimanote decliningandexplainingwhy Markswillbeawardedforcontent organization grammar andappropriateness April22 2007DearJimmyThankyouforyourinvitationmetojointheclub wouldliketogo ButIdosswimming andIcannotit SoIthinktakepartinsomeotherssport Thankyouthesametoyou Yoursxx Jimmy Ifeelgratefulforyourinvitation Swimmingclubisreallysomethingexiting Especially toworkwithyou ButIthinkIhavetosaysorry Youknow foralongtime Iaminterestedintennisandvolliball And Ihavealreadygottenagreatdealofrewardandprize Idon twanttogivethemup Jane April22 2008DearJimmy Thankyousomuchforinvitingmetojointheswimm lingclub I dliketobutI mafraidIcannot Tolearntennishaslongbeenmydreamandthebesttennisteacherwillbeleavingnextyear SothisisthelastchanceformeandIwouldlikeverymuchtoSeizeit Bestwishes Yours Tom