《高三一轮复习写作指导》PPT课件.ppt

高三一轮复习之写作指导韩彦瑾沈阳二中,Howtoimprovewriting?,第五档（很好）（2125分,完全完成了试题规定的任务。覆盖所有内容要点。应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或高级词汇所致；具有较强的语言运用能力。有效地使用了句间的连接成份，使全文结构紧凑。完全达到了预期的写作目的。,第四档（好）（16-20分）,完全完成了试题规定的任务。虽然漏掉一、二个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的需要。语法结构会词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试叫复杂语法结构或词汇所致。应用简单的语句间的连接成份，使全文结构紧凑。达到了预期的写作目的。,第三档（适当）（11-15分）,基本完成了试题规定的任务。虽然漏掉了一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。应用的语法结构或词汇能满足任务的要求。有一些语法结构或方面的错误，但不影响理解。应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文连贯。整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的。,第二档（较差）（6-10分）,未恰当完成试题规定的任务。漏掉或未描写清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容。语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。信息未能清楚地传达给读者。,第一档（差）（1-5分）,未完成试题规定的任务。明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未能理解试题要求。语法结构单调，词汇项目有限。较多语法或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解。缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯。信息未能传达给读者。,0分,未能传达给读者任何信息；内容太少，无法评判。写的内容均与所要求的内容无关或所写内容无法看清。,比较优秀的作文;条理清晰,用词得当,结构合理,书写很好;得23分,语言表达流畅;层次分明;连接不够;得19分.,语言不地道;中文式思维;词汇错误;卷面有涂改;得14分.,卷面不整洁;涂改较多;语言错误多;层次不清;得11分,用词不当;语句毛病多;大小写;标点符号;书写不清等等;得6分.,兴奋点1.语言简洁,层次清晰.2.选词准确,句式多变.3.内容连贯,表达地道,无明显错误.4.书写规范,卷面整洁.,阅卷老师的厌倦点和兴奋点厌倦点1语言层次不清,令人感到单调乏味.2.词汇有错误,句子结构单一.3.表达不地道,汉语味太浓.4.书写潦草,令人无法辨认,得分较低的作文：1.词汇错误;语言不地道,中文式思维2.语句毛病多;层次不清3.段落层次不分明;连接不够;4.书面不整洁较优秀的作文：语言表达流畅;层次分明条理清晰,用词得当,结构合理,书写很好,Wordsproblems,Sentencesproblems,Paragraphsproblems,Handwritingproblems,Problemsofwriting,PartoneDictionwriting,(thechoiceanduseofwords),1选择适当的词汇:,1Thechildlikes_(seeing,watching,looking)TV.2Therain_(had,caused,led)alotofeffectonthecrops.3InareaChinaisthethirdlargest_(state,nation,country)intheworld.4Iwillhavea/an_(date;appointment)withProfessorLiuthisafternoononmytermpaper.5Finally,ourclass_(won,beat)theirclass.,watching,had,country,appointment,beat,2选择具体的词汇,3.Heisagoodman.Heisa_man.(具体词汇),kind/honest/generous/brave,/selfless/warm-hearted,2Thefoodiswonderful.Thefoodis_.(具体词汇),tasty/delicious,fresh/appetizing,1.Itisoftenbadhereinspring.Itisoften_hereinspring.(具体词汇),windyanddusty,一般词汇(wordswithageneralmeaning),具体词汇(wordswithaspecificmeaning),“走出房间”，general的词是:walkoutoftheroom但是小偷走出房间应该说:slipoutoftheroom小姐走出房间应该说：sailoutoftheroom小孩走出房间应该说：danceoutoftheroom老人走出房间应该说:staggeroutoftheroom,3选择书面的词语,1Itishardtogetthegeneralideaofthisarticle.(口)Itis_to_thegeneralideaofthis(书)2Afriendisaguyyoucandependonwhenyouareintrouble.(口)Afriendisa_youcandependonwhenyouareintrouble.(书)3Ateacherissomeone/somebodywhohelpswithyourstudies.(口)Ateacherisa_whohelpswithyourstudies.(书),difficult,grasp,person,person,4.不要用中文的思维来写英语词汇:(chinglish),1新年就要到了.TheNewYearisgoingtoarrive.2光阴似箭!Timeislikeanarrow!3接电话receivethephone4人山人海peoplemountainpeoplesea5.好好学习,天天向上Goodgoodstudy,daydayup,TheNewYearisaroundthecorner.,Timesflies!,Answerthephone,hundredsofthousandsofpeople,Studyhardandyoullmakeprogresseveryday.,ParttwoSentencewriting,1句子要简洁,不要啰嗦,1Mr.SmithusuallylikestodrinkallkindsofwinesthatareproducedinFrance.(wordy)Mr.Smith_(concise)2WhenIpushedthedooropen,Isawagroupofyoungpeople.(wordy)_,Isawagroupofyoungpeople.(concise)3Sheisattractiveinappearance,butsheisaratherfoolishperson.Sheis_,but_,prefersFrenchwine.,Pushingthedooropen,attractive,ratherfoolish.,2句子符合语法规则,不要犯语法错误,1Thereare40%ofthestudentsareagainstthisopinion.2Seeingfromthetopofthemountain,thecityisnice.3Heworkedhard,therefore,hewasagoodstudent.4Onlyinthiscountryyoucanfindsuchasocialcustom.5Hislefteyeisblind.,Seen,and,canyou,Heisblindinthelefteye.,句子与句子间的衔接:,注意:别将moreover,therefore,however,nevertheless,forexample,forinstance等副词性的连接词当作连词使用,否则就会犯堆砌句子的错误.Heworkedhard,therefore,hewasagoodstudent.,Heworkedhard,andthereforehewasagoodstudent.Heworkedhard;therefore,hewasagoodstudent.Heworkedhard.Therefore,hewasagoodstudent.,1a)Itstoolatetogotothecinemanow.b)Ihaveanimportantmeetingtoattendafterlunch.Itstoolatetogothecinemanow._Ihaveanimportantmeetingtoattendafterlunch.2.a)Gotoseethedoctoratonce.b)Yourcoldmaygetworse.Gotoseethedoctoratonce,_yourcoldmaygetworse.3.a)Hesawtheboyinthestreet.b)Hestoppedtospeaktohim.c)Hegavehimapenny._theboyinthestreet,hestoppedtospeaktohim_gavehimapenny.,句与句的衔接,Besides,or/otherwise,Seeing,and,PartthreeParagraphwriting,_JennyisaCanadiangirl.Wehavebeenpenfriendsformorethanthreeyears._IfoundherinformationwhenIwasreadinganEnglishmagazineand_Iwrotetohersoon.InmyfirstletterIintroducedmyselfandtoldhersomethingaboutmyfamily.Wekeepintouchwitheach._,Wealsotalkaboutourschoollifeandourfuture.Shewillvisitourcitythissummer.A.BelieveitornotB.Ofcourse,C.AsyouknowD.WhatsmoreQuestions:Whereyoushouldputthem?Whatisthefunctionofthem?,C,A,B,D,Function:Theycanmakesentencesinaparagraphcloselyconnected.Theyarecalledtransitionalwords.(过渡词),Function:1.Theycanmakesentencesinaparagraphcloselyconnected.2.Theycanalsomakeparagraphsinapassagecloselyconnected.Theyarecalledtransitionalwords.(过渡词),Improvethepassagebyaddingtransitionalwords:,Deareditor,_Studentsofourschoolhavemadeasurveyof“ViewsonNewspaper”.Thepeoplewhomweinterviewedhavetwodifferentopinions.45%ofthepeopleenjoyreadingnewspapers._,asaconvenientsourceofinformation,readingnewspapersisnotlimitedbytime._,readingalsomakespeoplethink,whichhelpsdeveloppeoplesintelligence._,peoplecanselectandreadwhateversectiontheyareinterestedin._,55%ofthepeopledontturntonewspaperstogetinformation.Theyholdtheideathatnewspapersarenotveryattractive_theylackthesoundandvideothatmakeothersourcesofinformationmoreexcitingtolookatthannewspapers._,peoplecanmakeuseofwhatevermeanstogetinformation,solongasitsconvenientforthem.Bestwishes,Yours.LiHua,Recently,Firstofall,Secondly,Moreover,However,because,Inmyopinion,修改例文,Ladiesandgentlemen,Welcometoourschool!,Thisvillageisasmallonewith/whichhasnearly100familiesandabout500people.,Itusedtobeverypoor.,However,ithaschangedalotsince1978,andhasbeendevelopingveryfast.,Peoplehereliveamuchbetterlifethanbefore.,.Nowitis,takingonanewlook.,Inthepast,theschoolherewasverysmallandmostchildrencouldntaffordtogotoschool.,Butnowithasbeenrebuiltand,whichhas4storeysisthemostbeautifuloneinthevillage.,Alltheschool-agechildrencanstudyhere.,Whatsmore,theyenjoyfreeeducation.,Mayyouenjoyyourstayhere,thenewlybuiltteachingbuilding,/Mayyouhaveapleasanttimehere!,Thankyou.,公式一：积累+练笔公式二：基本词汇、短语、句式+基本的写作技巧公式三：一个清晰的思路/一个好的开头+二、三个简单的从句（定语从句、状语从句、宾语从句）+四、五个前后衔接的词语+六、七个恰当的短语+八、九、十个完整通顺的句子=一篇行文流畅的、字数在100左右的高考控制性作文。,