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读后续写的具体内容提供一段提供一段350350词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写（给段落开头语和所标示关键词进行续写（150150词左右），将其发词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。第五档： 21-25第四档： 16-20第三档： 11-15第二档： 6-10第一档： 1-5与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。与所给短文融洽度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理。内容比较丰富，应用了内容比较丰富，应用了5 5个以上短文所标出的关键词语。个以上短文所标出的关键词语。所使用的语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，所使用的语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但不影响意义表达。但不影响意义表达。比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。第四档： 16-20第五档： 21-25与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。内容丰富，应用了内容丰富，应用了5 5个以上短文中标出的关键词语。个以上短文中标出的关键词语。所使用语法结构和词汇丰富，准确，可能有些许错误，但完所使用语法结构和词汇丰富，准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。全不影响意义表达。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。记叙文阅读理解能力记叙文书面表达能力读后续写过程中存在的问题：续写内容与所给短文在叙述意图上不一致续写内容与所给短文在相关细节上相矛盾续写内容与所给短文在语篇结构上不连贯读后续写的能力要求一、记叙文阅读理解能力二、由读到写的思维能力三、记叙文书面表达能力一、记叙文阅读理解能力浅层的信息定位能力：深层的文本分析能力： what, when, where, who, why, how等等厘清故事的发展线索厘清故事的发展线索明确文本的主要矛盾明确文本的主要矛盾关注故事的语言风格关注故事的语言风格阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away. With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost. “Tom!” she cried. “Help!” No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him. Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake. As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again. But no more helicopters came and it was dark. _ It was daybreak when Jane woke up. _2016年10月高考读后续写Read for informationwho:what:where:Jane, TomJane was lost. in the forest One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away. With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost. “Tom!” she cried. “Help!” No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him. Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake. As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again. But no more helicopters came and it was dark. _ It was daybreak when Jane woke up. _Read for the organizationIn what order is the material developed?One weekend in July, As night was beginning to fall, Jane rose at the break of the day, But and it was getting dark again.It was daybreak when Jane woke up. time sequenceRead for the plotbehaviorsfeelingspara. 1quarrel, walked awayangrypara. 2 was lostfrightened, regretful, confused, para. 3 criedpara. 4kept moving, had to stop, wanted para. 5saw, drank, ate, felt strongerjoyful, hopefulpara. 6 heard, took off, thinkinghopeful, anxiousBeginningClimaxEnding quarrelledgot lostcriedwantedsaw, drank, ateheard, took off, thinking that .angryfrightenedregretful(helicopters)joyfulhopefulno more helicopterswoke uprescued?feelings?Read for the language阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away. With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost. “Tom!” she cried. “Help!” No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him. Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake. As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again. But no more helicopters came and it was dark. _ It was daybreak when Jane woke up. _With no path to follow, Jane, she turned around, hoping to Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that Jane rose, hungry and thirsty.If only she had not left her mobile phone Never in her life had she tasted anything better.二、由读到写的思维能力细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落的逻辑关系；细读两段续写的开头语，理顺续写段落的逻辑关系；围绕划定的围绕划定的1010个个关键词，合理创新故事情节。关键词，合理创新故事情节。Para. 1: But no more helicopters came and it was dark. How did Jane feel then? How did Jane struggle through the night? Did she fall asleep?Para. 2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Was Jane rescued? Who rescued Jane? How was she rescued? How did she feel then?The underlined words where020304 yellow blousewalkedTomhelicopterJanelakestreamclimbedat a distanceto her great joyClassify 10 key words into different groups._: Jane, Tom_: walked, climbed_: helicopter, yellow blouse_: lake, stream, at a distance_: to her great joycharactersbehaviorstoolsplacesfeelings三、记叙文书面表达能力( (一一) ) 语言的丰富性语言的丰富性 ( (二二) ) 语篇的连贯性语篇的连贯性 ( (一一) ) 语言的丰富性语言的丰富性1. 1. 词汇、句式、语法的多样性词汇、句式、语法的多样性2. 2. 情感表达的多样性情感表达的多样性3. 3. 动词使用的丰富性动词使用的丰富性1. 1. 词汇、句式、语法的多样性词汇、句式、语法的多样性简单句，复合句以及强调句、倒装句等特殊句式的使用情况。简单句，复合句以及强调句、倒装句等特殊句式的使用情况。主被动语态、非谓语动词、独立主格结构、主被动语态、非谓语动词、独立主格结构、with的复合结构、的复合结构、虚拟语气的使用情况。虚拟语气的使用情况。常见初级词汇、高级词汇，以及不同词性的使用情况。常见初级词汇、高级词汇，以及不同词性的使用情况。比喻、拟人、夸张等修辞格的使用情况。比喻、拟人、夸张等修辞格的使用情况。句式结构：句式结构：语法结构：语法结构：词汇选择：词汇选择：修辞手法：修辞手法：2. 2. 情感表达的多样性情感表达的多样性 Janes feelingswalked away, turned around, criedIs that for me?“Tom!”“Help!”Night was beginning to fall.It was daybreak.confused,hungry and thirsty.walked away, turned around, criedwalked away, turned around, criedactionswordssurroundingsthoughtslooks “Another race, another race!” said the little boy. The wise old man stepped forward and presented the little boy with two new challengers, an elderly weak lady and a blind man. “What is this?” said the little boy. “This is no race.” He said. “Race!” said the wise man. The race was started and the boy was the only finisher, the other two challengers left standing at the starting line. The little boy was excited. He raised his arms in delight. The crowd, however, was silent showing no sentiment toward the little boy. “What has happened? Why dont the people join in my success?” he asked the wise old man. “Race again.” said the man, “This time, finish together, all three of you, finish together,” said the wise man.urgedaskdcomplainedrepliedcontinued3. 3. 动词使用的丰富性动词使用的丰富性Use more specific words to replace “say”.shout, scream, yell, roar, cry, whisper, interrupt, add, continue, tell, remark, predict, repeat,guess, implyrefuse, agree, admit, complain, smile, urge, apologize, sigh, beg, explain，promise, comfort, compromise，warnask, wonder, doubt, answer, reply方式态度问答 God felt sad and sighed to the butterfly, “Do you regret for what you have done?” “No!” the butterfly said firmly, without hesitation. “He was your lover, but now he stays with another woman. Without you, he couldnt have recovered.” God said with pity. “I love him.” the butterfly said in a low voice, “although I cant be the one he loves, I want him to be happy. Never will I regret what I have done.” God smiled, “True love is the most invaluable thing in the world.” The butterfly then left the town with the best wishes for the man.firmly/excitedly/seriously/jokingly/sincerelyin great surprise/a low voice/a soft voicewith delight/excitement/embarrassment/pride/respect/alarm/satisfaction/caution/ patience/certaintyMake your “say” more specific. “Oh yes, Daddy, you know I love you,” the little girl said sincerely. “Well, then, give me your pearls.” “Oh! Daddy, not my pearls!” Jenny refused, shaking her head violently. “But you can have Rosy, my favorite doll. Remember her? You gave her to me last year for my birthday. And you can have her tea party outfit too. Okay?” “Oh no darling, thats Okay.” Her father brushed her cheek with a kiss. “Good night, little one.”eyeshandsheadstare / glare at / look her in the eye / with her eyes shining/ filled with tearsHis eyes sparkle with excitement/ gratitudepat him on the shoulder/headgrasp/hold ones handspoint to sb/sthwave his handsnod/shake his head violentlyHe thought for a momentMake your narration more vivid with appropriate movement. But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again. Amid the dreadful darkness, strange sounds of wild beasts were heard. “If it werent for that stupid quarrel, I wouldnt be trapped here,” she thought to herself, regretful tears clouding her eyes. Surrounded by the fear and tiredness, Jane felt exhausted and finally slid into sleep. “Tom, is that you?”she murmured. “Tom, help!” In her dream, she saw a man extending his arms towards her at a distance. It was day break when Jane woke up. After a washing, Jane continued to force her way ahead. In the boundless search, she found it impossible to find a way out, which threw her into desperation. Fortunately, a helicopter flew overhead just at that moment. In no time did Jane rush to the rock and climb onto it. She waved her yellow blouse madly to the passing helicopter. To her great joy, this time, the helicopter spotted her. The moment Jane was reunited with her husband, her tears clouded her vision. They hugged each other tightly in the warm light of the setting sun.wordssurroundingsthoughtslooks( (二二) ) 语篇的连贯性语篇的连贯性 1. 1. 内容连贯内容连贯故事大意一致，写作意图一致故事大意一致，写作意图一致2. 2. 语句连贯语句连贯 衔接词的准确使用衔接词的准确使用but/howeverneverthelesswhereasalthoughthoughunfortunatelyinsteadon the contrarybesidesmoreover furthermorewhats more whats worse worse stillsothusthereforehenceconsequentlyaccordinglyas a result One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away. With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost. “Tom!” she cried. “Help!” No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him. Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake. As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again. But no more helicopters came and it was dark. _ It was daybreak when Jane woke up. _3. 3. 语言连贯语言连贯 语言风格一致语言风格一致 But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again. Amid the dreadful darkness, strange sounds of wild beasts were heard. “If it werent for that stupid quarrel, I wouldnt be trapped here,” she thought to herself, regretful tears clouding her eyes. Surrounded by the fear and tiredness, Jane felt exhausted and finally slid into sleep. “Tom, is that you?”she murmured. “Tom, help!” In her dream, she saw a man extending his arms towards her at a distance. It was day break when Jane woke up. After a washing, Jane continued to force her way ahead. In the boundless search, she found it impossible to find a way out, which threw her into desperation. Fortunately, a helicopter flew overhead just at that moment. In no time did Jane rush to the rock and climb onto it. She waved her yellow blouse madly to the passing helicopter. To her great joy, this time, the helicopter spotted her. The moment Jane was reunited with her husband, her tears clouded her vision. They hugged each other tightly in the warm light of the setting sun. One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “Im going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away. With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost. “Tom!” she cried. “Help!” No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him. Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake. As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again. But no more helicopters came and it was dark. _ It was daybreak when Jane woke up. _3. 3. 语言连贯语言连贯 语言风格一致语言风格一致With no path to follow, Jane, she turned around, hoping to Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that Jane rose, hungry and thirsty.If only she had not left her mobile phone Never in her life had she tasted anything better. But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again. Amid the dreadful darkness, strange sounds of wild beasts were heard. “If it werent for that stupid quarrel, I wouldnt be trapped here,” she thought to herself, regretful tears clouding her eyes. Surrounded by the fear and tiredness, Jane felt exhausted and finally slid into sleep. “Tom, is that you?”she murmured. “Tom, help!” In her dream, she saw a man extending his arms towards her at a distance. It was day break when Jane woke up. After a washing, Jane continued to force her way ahead. In the boundless search, she found it impossible to find a way out, which threw her into desperation. Fortunately, a helicopter flew overhead just at that moment. In no time did Jane rush to the rock and climb onto it. She waved her yellow blouse madly to the passing helicopter. To her great joy, this time, the helicopter spotted her. The moment Jane was reunited with her husband, her tears clouded her vision. They hugged each other tightly in the warm light of the setting sun. But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again. Amid the dreadful darkness, strange sounds of wild beasts were heard. “If it werent for that stupid quarrel, I wouldnt be trapped here,” she thought to herself, regretful tears clouding her eyes. Surrounded by the fear and tiredness, Jane felt exhausted and finally slid into sleep. “Tom, is that you?”she murmured. “Tom, help!” In her dream, she saw a man extending his arms towards her at a distance. It was day break when Jane woke up. After a washing, Jane continued to force her way ahead. In the boundless search, she found it impossible to find a way out, which threw her into desperation. Fortunately, a helicopter flew overhead just at that moment. In no time did Jane rush to the rock and climb onto it. She waved her yellow blouse madly to the passing helicopter. To her great joy, this time, the helicopter spotted her. The moment Jane was reunited with her husband, her tears clouded her vision. They hugged each other tightly in the warm light of the setting sun.4. 4. 结构连贯结构连贯 前后呼应前后呼应关于衔接：关于衔接：1. 1. 关注段落内部句与句之间的衔接；关注段落内
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