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单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,*,“,冤屈的,”,四档作文,(,得分,19,分,),Dear Ms Jenkins,，,How is everything going these days?Im writing to,ask,help from you.,The summer vacation is,coming soon,so I plan to take a part,time job in a foreign capital company during my two,month holiday.,You know that,working experience is,very important,when I graduate from college.,So,Id like to,get,some working experience by doing the part,time job.,Besides,I can earn some pocket money to buy what I need.,In order to apply for the job,I have written my job application form and personal resume.Please,correct,my application and the format of my resume,when you are free,.,I would be thankful if,you send it to me by Friday.,Looking forward to your early reply.,Yours,，,Li Hua,升格后的五档作文,(,得分,24,分,),Dear Ms Jenkins,，,How is everything going these days?Im writing to,seek,help from you.,The summer vacation is,around the corner,so I plan to take a part,time job in a foreign capital company during my two,month holiday.,As you know,working experience is,of vital importance,when I graduate from college.,Therefore,Id like to,gain,some working experience by doing the part,time job.,In addition,I can earn some pocket money to buy what I need.,In order to apply for the job,I have written my job application form and personal resume.Please,polish,my application and,check,the format of my resume,when it is convenient for you.,I would appreciate it if,you send it to me by Friday.,Looking forward to your early reply.,Yours,，,Li Hua,名,师,点,评,左栏作文用词准确，分段合理，而且使用了非谓语动词、复合句等，总体来说是一篇相当不错的作文。但是看一下右栏提升后的作文，就会感叹其语言更地道、更自然流畅，可谓妙笔生花，技高一筹。,词汇的提升有六处，特别是,around the corner,of vital importance,以及,polish,和,check,的使用会令人赞叹进入了一个更高级的写作档次；句式的提升有三处，,As you know,定语从句，,when it is convenient for you,状语从句，以及固定句式,I would appreciate it if.,的使用都恰到好处，相对于左栏的作文有了大幅度的提升。,9,、,要学生做的事，教职员躬亲共做；要学生学的知识，教职员躬亲共学；要学生守的规则，教职员躬亲共守。,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,Monday,November 11,2024,10,、阅读一切好书如同和过去最杰出的人谈话。,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,11/11/2024 7:17:36 AM,11,、一个好的教师，是一个懂得心理学和教育学的人。,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,Nov-24,11-Nov-24,12,、要记住，你不仅是教课的教师，也是学生的教育者，生活的导师和道德的引路人。,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,Monday,November 11,2024,13,、,He who seize the right moment,is the right man.,谁把握机遇，谁就心想事成。,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,11/11/2024,14,、谁要是自己还没有发展培养和教育好，他就不能发展培养和教育别人。,11 十一月 2024,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,15,、一年之计，莫如树谷；十年之计，莫如树木；终身之计，莫如树人。,十一月 24,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,11/11/2024,16,、提出一个问题往往比解决一个更重要。因为解决问题也许仅是一个数学上或实验上的技能而已，而提出新的问题，却需要有创造性的想像力，而且标志着科学的真正进步。,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,11 November 2024,17,、儿童是中心，教育的措施便围绕他们而组织起来。,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,2024/11/11,2,、,Our destiny offers not only the cup of despair,but the chalice of opportunity.,(Richard Nixon,American President),命运给予我们的不是失望之酒，而是机会之杯。,二二一年六月十七日,2021,年,6,月,17,日星期四,3,、,Patience is bitter,but its fruit is sweet.,(Jean Jacques Rousseau,French thinker),忍耐是痛苦的，但它的果实是甜蜜的。,10:516.17.202110:516.17.202110:5110:51:196.17.202110:516.17.2021,4,、,All that you do,do with your might;things done by halves are never done right.,-R.H.Stoddard,American poet,做一切事都应尽力而为，半途而废永远不行,6.17.20216.17.202110:5110:5110:51:1910:51:19,5,、,You have to believe in yourself.Thats the secret of success.,-Charles Chaplin,人必须相信自己，这是成功的秘诀。,-Thursday,June 17,2021June 21Thursday,June 17,20216/17/2021,
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