高考英语（湖北）卷书面表达评卷简析

单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,*,2013年高考英语（湖北）卷书面表达评卷简析,武大附中 刘 伟,评卷简析内容,1.2013年高考英语（湖北）卷书面表达完成句子,2.7180题考查内容及评分要求,3.2013年高考英语（湖北）卷书面表达 短文写作,4.短文写作评分标准,5.五档作文范文,第四部分：书面表达(共两节，满分50分）,第一节：完成句子（共10小题；每小题2分，满分20分）,阅读下列各小题，根据汉语提示，用句末括号内的英语单词完成句子，并将答案写在答题卡的相应题号后。,71.Knowing,reduces the risks of failure and it works like an insurance policy for your own ability,(do),知道你正在干什么，能降低失败的风险，这就像给自己的能力买了份保险。,72.Not,my parents,I failed to go to a drama school,where my interest lay.(persuade)由于没有说服我父母，我没能上戏剧学校，而那才是我的兴趣所在。73.The chief engineer together with his colleagues,new scientific methods of farming since five years ago.(look)五年以来，总工程师和他的同事们一起一直在寻找新的科学农耕方法。,74.When I work on the farmland in the daytime,I always,to a tree on the river bank.(keep),白天干农活的时候，我总是把羊拴在河边的树上。,75.As time is pressing,I think,is the best way to get from here to the conference centre.(take),由于时间紧迫，我认为从这里去会议中心最好的办法是乘出租车。,76.So fast,that we can hardly imagine its speed,(travel)光传播的速度快到我们难以想象。77.Through the course of my schooling,I met many teachers,two,me greatly.(influence)学习时我遇到过很多老师，其中两位对我影响很大。,78.I dont often lose things,so I was quite surprised,my wallet and found it wasnt there,(reach)我不常丢东西，所以当我拿钱包却发现钱包不在时，大吃一惊。79.It is reported in the newspaper that several new subway lines,in Wuhan.(build)据报纸报道，武汉正在建设几条新的地铁线路。80.Most believe he,for England last week,but for a serious injury which put him out of football,(play)多数人认为，要不是受了重伤而告别足球，上周他本会为英格兰踢球的。,2013年书面表达完成句子考核内容,题号,考核内容,71,名词结构,72,现在分词作状语,73,主谓一致性,74,动词过去分词作宾补,75,非谓动词作主语,76,倒装句,77,非限制性定语从句,78,状语从句,79,现在进行时态的被动语态,80,虚拟语气,评分原则,所考语法结构正确、用给定的英语单词正确完整表达所给的汉语信息，给满分;,未用给定单词不给分；,所考语法结构不正确不给分；,所考语法结构正确，信息完整，但有拼写错误扣分（不累计扣分）；,所考语法结构正确，但信息有误（添加、遗漏信息等）扣分；,所考语法结构正确，但有其它个别语法错误扣分。,完成句子考查内容及评分要求,71.Knowing,reduces the risks of failure and it works like an insurance policy for your own ability,(do)知道你正在干什么，能降低失败的风险，这就像给自己的能力买了份保险。,考查：名词结构,what you are doing（2分）,the things which/that you are doing（2分）,what you did/do/are you doing(个别语法错误扣分),what to do(个别语法错误扣分),all the things which/that you are doing(信息有误,-添加all扣分),完成句子考查内容及评分要求,72.Not,my parents,I failed to go to a drama school,where my interest lay.(persuade)由于没有说服我父母，我没能上戏剧学校，而那才是我的兴趣所在。,考查：现在分词作状语,having persuaded,（2分）,persuading（信息有误和个别语法错误各扣分）,persuaded/having been persuaded,(语法结构不正确0分),完成句子考查内容及评分要求,73.The chief engineer together with his colleagues,new scientific methods of farming since five years ago.(look),五年以来，总工程师和他的同事们一起一直在寻找新的科学农耕方法。,考查：主谓一致性,has been looking for（2分）,has looked for （2分）,is looking for(个别语法错误扣分),looks for(个别语法错误扣分),have been looking for(个别语法错误扣分),完成句子考查内容及评分要求,74.When I work on the farmland in the daytime,I always,to a tree on the riverbank.(keep)白天干农活的时候，我总是把羊拴在河边的树上。,考查：动词过去分词作宾补,keep the/my sheep tied（2分）,keep the/my sheep being tied,（信息有误和个别语法错误各扣分）,keep the/my sheeps tieed(拼写错误扣分,sheeps和 tieed均为拼写错误，但不累计扣分),完成句子考查内容及评分要求,75.As time is pressing,I think,is the best way to get from here to the conference centre,(take),由于时间紧迫，我认为从这里去会议中心最好的办法是乘出租车。,考查：非谓动词作主语,to take a taxi/cab（2分）,taking a taxi/cab（2分）,(for)you take a taxi （信息有误和个别语法错误各扣分）,taking taxi/to take taxi(信息有误-遗漏a或the扣分),完成句子考查内容及评分要求,76.So fast,that we can hardly imagine its speed,(travel),光传播的速度快到我们难以想象。,考查：倒装句,does light travel（2分）,did light travel (个别语法错误扣 分),does a/the light travel (信息有误-添加a或the扣分）,完成句子考查内容及评分要求,77.Through the course of my schooling,I met many teachers,two,me greatly.(influence),学习时我遇到过很多老师，其中两位对我影响很大。,考查：非限制性定语从句,of them having influenced（2分）,of whom influenced （2分）,of whom have influenced （2分）,用who扣分,two having influenced 扣分(?),of them influenced(结构不正确扣2分）,完成句子考查内容及评分要求,78.I dont often lose things,so I was quite surprised,my wallet and found it wasnt there,(reach),我不常丢东西，所以当我拿钱包却发现钱包不在时，大吃一惊。,考查：状语从句,when I reached for （2分）,the moment I reached for （2分）,at the time when I reached for （2分）,用as或 while（信息有误扣分）,at the time(that)I reached for （结构错误0分）,完成句子考查内容及评分要求,79.It is reported in the newspaper that several new subway lines,in Wuhan.(build),据报纸报道，武汉正在建设几条新的地铁线路。,考查：现在进行时态的被动语态,are being built （2分）,is being built （个别语法错误扣分）,are being builded （个别语法错误扣分）,are being build （结构错误0分）,完成句子考查内容及评分要求,80.Most believe he,for England last week,but for a serious injury which put him out of football,(play),多数人认为，要不是受了重伤而告别足球，上周他本会为英格兰踢球的。,考查：虚拟语气,would/could have played （2分）,should have played（个别语法错误扣分）,would/could play （结构不正确0分）,第二节：短文写作（共1题：满分30分）,请根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。,We all know that sticks and stones may break our bones,but we should also be aware that words can hurt people,too.,注意：无须写标题，不得照抄英语提语；,除诗歌外，文体不限；,文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；,词数为120左右。,短文写作评分原则,第一档-第五档赋分要求,评卷定档参考,档位,评阅印象,感觉,第五档,漂漂亮亮,cool,爽,第四档,清清楚楚（2/3语言没问题，有个别小问题）,clear,顺,第三档,马马虎虎（半对半错，很纠结）,coy,行,第二档,糊里糊涂（1/3有英文，2/3 看不懂）,cloudy,差,第一档,一塌糊涂（基本无英文或无法读懂）,chaotic,晕,0分,内容太少，无法评判（谨慎）,One Possible Version,My deskmate admires my fluent English very much and I usually feel encouraged by his compliments.,One day,when we learned the new word“eccentric,in class,we were asked to make a sentence with it.I volunt