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单击此处编辑母版标题样式,单击此处编辑母版文本样式,第二级,第三级,第四级,第五级,Through the ice,读后续写（满分,25,分）,阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。,About a half-mile behind our Minnesota farm lay a,pond,. In summer, my brother,Harry,and I would run through a stand of oak trees to skip stones there. The pond wore a collar of black mud. It was not a place for swimming.,In late summer, the pond would be covered by a green and bubbly,scum,(,起泡,的,浮渣,).,Sometimes a strong, unpleasant smell rose from it. We,stayed away,.,When winter came, the pond was once again an inviting place. One day when ice covered it, Harry said to me, “Try walking across.”,The ice looked solid. No water showed through it, but I hesitated. “Go ahead.” Harry urged. “Try it. Youre lighter than I am. If the ice holds, we can run and,slide,carefully on it. Itll be fun.” I wanted to,please,Harry, and I thought about the fun of a long slide on the ice. I began to slide across the pond.,In the middle of the pond, the ice gave way with a,sudden,crack,(,裂缝,),!,I stretched,out,(,伸展,) my,arms. The next thing I knew I was hanging on to the edge of a hole in the ice by arms outstretched on the ice. From my shoulders down I hung in,icy,water. I thought of the bottom of the pond. I knew it would be black and awful down there, full of mud and maybe rotting creatures.,I tried to,climb,out of the hole, but when I got a knee on the ice, it broke like window glass. Again and again I tried to get out. Again and again the ice broke into pieces. The hole widened. I was wearing a,coat,of heavy material. As it became completely wet, it,dragged,me down. I was tired of the struggle and rested with my arms stretched out on the ice.,I looked at Harry on shore. He seemed rooted to the spot. “I cant get out!” I screamed when I caught some breath,.,注意：,1.,所续写短文的词数应为,150,左右；,2.,至少使用,5,个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；,3.,续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；,4.,续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。,Paragraph 1:,Harry turned and ran from the pond.,Paragraph 2:,The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over.,A story,when,where,who,what,how,why,Reading,for a story,Reading,for setting,I,Harry,a pond,lay behind our farm,wore a collar of black mud,a green and bubbly scum,sometime smelly,unsuitable for swimming,stay away,an inviting place,brothers,skip stones,In summer,In winter,contrast,overt plot,Setting,Inciting incident,Rising action,Climax,Falling action,Resolution,Denouement,Events,A.,The pond in winter was so inviting in winter that I decided to slide across it at the instigation of my brother.,B.,I strived to climb out of the icy water by myself, but in vain.,C.,With the ice cracking, I fell into a hole in the ice.,D.,The pond behind our farm was not suitable for swimming in the summer,.,D,A,C,B,Reading,for plot,Covert plot,Time,Events,Mood,Before,I slid,across the pond,Harry _ me to go first because of my lighter weight.,In order to _him and have fun, I _.,I felt _,but_.,When,I,was in the middle of the pond,With ice _,suddenly,I fell,into a hole. Arms _ on the ice and body _in the icy water, I was _ in the hole.,I got _,and _.,When I tried to save by,myself,I attempted to climb,out of the icy hole several times but _.,The heavy coat, _worsened,the terrible situation.,I was _,and _.,When,I looked at Harry,Harry,was _.,I _ at him for _.,I,was _,but _.,urged,hesitated,cracking,shocked,hanging,in vain,exhausted,becoming wet through and dragging me down,willing,agreed,outstretched,trapped,/caught,r,ooted to the spot,screamed his help,scared,anxious,please,How about Harry?,hopeful,nervous,Inferring,the development,Paragraph 1:,Harry turned and ran from the pond.,Paragraph,2:,The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over.,Infer the development from the given sentences,I was rescued.,Inferring,the development,Paragraph 1:,Harry turned and ran from the pond.,Paragraph,2:,The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over.,I was rescued.,Raise questions about the development,Inferring,the development,Paragraph 1:,Harry turned and ran from the pond.,Paragraph,2:,The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over.,I was rescued.,Raise questions about the development,What,was,my,response to his leaving?,Did he really leave me alone,?,How was I rescued?,What did mum,react,to the accident,?,How can the story be ended rationally?,Inferring,the development,Paragraph 1:,Harry turned and ran from the pond.,1 What,was,my,response to his leaving?,2 Did,he really leave me alone?,3,How was I rescued?,Feeling: dismay; disappointment; despair,Action: wonder; exclaim,Let “body language” speak!,Way: with the help of an oak branch,Action: push; wriggle; grab; drag,Let “action” speak!,How to express disappointment / dismay:,皱眉,“Where could he go?” I,murmured,with a fierce frown,.,失望地看,I shot/,threw/cast,a frustrated look at,him.,摇头,I just,shook,my,head,in,hopelessness.,哭,Tears,of grievance,(,委屈,),/rivns/,came into,my eyes,with the figure of my brother out of sight.,Staring at the familiar figure out of sight, I was,trembling with rage,and chill,.,颤抖,Let “body language” speak!,Tips,for writing,_ by a strong sense of nervousness and anxiety, Harry didnt know what to do, his heart _wildly.,A flush of frustration _ from the bottom of my heart, I froze with terror, trembling in icy water and hard to breathe.,The thought of being abandoned/deserted by Harry _ my mind, dismay and despair _,in my heart.,The icy water _ my skin with needle-like chill as I was _(,湿透,) to the skin and _(,颤抖,).,Desperate and exhausted, I was on the verge of_(,奔溃,). “Harry. Dont leave me alone.” I _ at the top of the lung.,As I looked at his back, I_, “Is he running for help, or is he running way and leaving me alone?”,Seized/ Consumed/ Overwhelmed,surging,occupying,beating /pounding,accumulated,Show more than,tell!,pierced,soaked,trembling/shivering,collapse,exclaimed,wondered,How did Harry save me by using an oak branch?,push vt.,推动,grab vt,.,抓住，攫取,drag,vt.,拖，拉，拽，,扯,flop vi,.,扑通落下,wriggle vi.,蠕动，蜿蜒而行,_ to,his stomach,Harry _ the branch before,him and,_ toward,me. When a slender top branch was,within _,I,grabbed,it.,Eventually, I,was _ from,the,icy water.,Flopping,pushed,wriggled,reach,dragged,Let “action” speak!,Let “action” speak!,Seeing Harry _ back to the pond with a long stick in his hand, I was _ with fresh blood. The next few minutes _ his dragging me to the shore inch by inch.,Finally _ Harry with a long rope. “_ it.” He _ one end of the rope to me. Desperate to escape from the chilly pond, I _ the lifeline tightly and was eventually _ up to the shore.,_ out my arms, I _ the oak branch with all my strength,and _ carefully out of the hole inch by inch.,I _ eventually.,storming,injected,saw/witnessed,came,Grab,t,hrew/cast/ flung,grasped,d,ragged/pulled,Stretching,s,eized,survived,crawled,Continuing,the story,Paragraph,2:,The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over.,1 What,was,my,mums first reaction?,2 What lesson did,I learn from the experience?,That day,impressed,a lifelong lesson on me,Always,stay away,from potential risks and,bear in mind,that curiosity kills cats.,As life has it,not until,we encounter something adventurous,will we be aware of,precious warnings.,T,he,pond was,still so,inviting,to,young,Harry and me,especially when,winter came again.,I was temporarily comforted and relieved but I would never forget the,life-risking experience,and,never act so,blindly again,.,A story is,an accident, which begins with,a problem,and ends with,a solution,.,A,good story often has,a good theme,.,A better story “,show,s,more than tell,s”.,A great story,display,s,details properly,.,Tips,for writing,Para. 1,He,turned and ran from the pond.,Staring at,his familiar figure,out,of sight, I,wondered:,“Is he running for help, or is he running away and leaving me,sliding,to the bottom?” Dismay and scare beat me out of breath. The,icy,water pierced my skin with needle-like chill. I,was anxious to,climb,out by myself, but countless previous failures froze me from struggling again. After what seemed to be centuries of fruitless waiting, I was on the verge of collapse. Just at that moment,here,dashed,Harry,with a large, black, V-shaped oak branch.,Flopping,to his stomach, he pushed the branch before,him and wriggled,toward me.,The moment a,slender top branch was within reach, I grabbed it,immediately and,was eventually,dragged,out of the icy water by Harry,. What a narrow escape!,We,stumbled,home, with my clothes dripping(,滴水,)and my overshoes squishing(,发出,嘎吱声,),and squirting(,喷出,) water.,Appreciate,a possible version,Appreciate,a possible version,Para. 2:,I,crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over.,Unbuttoning,my,coat, and,stripping(,脱去,),my clothes from me, she,gave me a quick bath and then nimbly,wrapped,a thick,blanket over me to stop my teeth-chattering,chill; meanwhile she gave me a,cup of,milk to,warm me up. I tearfully complained to her about all that had happened and Harry was lectured about getting a younger sibling into,such a trouble,. His head drooping, Harry murmured an apology to me. I was temporarily comforted and relieved but,in fact, the,pond,was still,a permanent temptation to young Harry and me, especially when winter came again,.,Assignment,Polish your writing according to,tips,for writing.,Share your writing with your,classmates.,Try to learn from your classmate and meantime give some advice on improving their writing.,Thank,you!,
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