基础写作之---人物

人物介绍写作方法,基础写作之一,Basic writing,基础写作: 众所周知, 刘翔以世界飞人而出名, 在男子110米栏方面, 他是我们中国, 甚至是亚洲的骄傲. 写作内容: 请根据表格, 向世界介绍刘翔. 写作要求: 用5个句子介绍全部所给的内容.,姓名：刘翔出生年月：年月日 性别；男出生地：上海身高：米 教练：孙海平偶像：Jordon专项：栏 成就： 年瑞士洛桑以秒破亚洲记录 年雅典以秒夺冠，平了世界记录 年月日在瑞士洛桑以秒破世 界记录 爱好：听音乐，打游戏，看书 自评：为人诚恳，随和，自信乐观 瑞士洛桑: Lausanne, Switzerland,审题 列要点 依要点, 拟草纲, 组织成句. 构篇章,扩句成文. 检查润色 书写,基础写作解题步骤：,人物简介的一般步骤：Give the right order,( )教育/ 专长/事业：education ( )外貌性格/爱好appearance ,character ( )生平big events in his or her life ( in order of time ) ( )评估evaluation ( )概况age, sex, birth-place, background,概,貌,育,平,估,一、审题:(四确定),确定类型 2. 确定体裁 3. 确定主体时态 4. 确定主体人称,第三人称,人物介绍,记叙文,一般现在时,二 列要点,概,貌,育,平,估,1. 概况age, sex, birth-place, background,姓名：刘翔出生年月：年月日 性别；男出生地：上海身高：米 偶像：Jordon,刘翔, 出生在1983年7月13日上海.,教练：孙海平,专项：栏,2. 外貌性格/ 爱好appearance ,character, hobby,身高：米 自评：为人诚恳，随和，自信乐观,3. 教育/ 专长/ 事业：education, speciality,3)他的身高1.89米, 为人诚恳, 随和, 自信乐观.,2) 他的偶像是Jordon, 爱好是听音乐, 爱打游戏及看书.,专项：栏,教练：孙海平,爱好：听音乐，打游戏，看书,偶像：Jordon,4) 他擅长110米栏, 他的教练是孙海平,4. 生平big events in his or her life ( in order of time ),成就： 年瑞士洛桑以秒破亚洲记录 年雅典以秒夺冠，平了世界记录 年月日在瑞士洛桑以秒破世 界记录,4) 他在年瑞士洛桑以秒破亚洲记录, 两年后他又在年雅典以秒夺冠，平了世界记录, 5) 他年月日他在瑞士洛桑以秒破世界记录,5. 评估evaluation,三 依要点, 拟草纲, 组织成句.,1) 刘翔, 出生在1983年7月13日上海.,2) 他的偶像是Jordon, 爱好是听音乐, 看打游戏及看书.,3)他的身高1.89米, 为人诚恳, 随和, 自信乐观.,4) 他擅长110米栏, 他的教练是孙海平,5) 他在年瑞士洛桑以秒破亚洲记录, 两年后他又在年雅典以秒夺冠，平了世界记录, 6) 他年月日他在瑞士洛桑以秒破世界记录,2) 他的偶像是Jordon, 爱好是听音乐, 看打游戏及看书.,3) 拥有身高1.89米的他擅长110米栏, 在他的教练孙海平的帮助下他取得了傲人的成绩.,4) 他在年瑞士洛桑以秒破亚洲记录, 两年后他又在年雅典以秒夺冠，平了世界记录, 5) 他年月日他在瑞士洛桑以秒破世界记录,1) 为人诚恳, 随和, 自信乐观的男孩刘翔, 出生在1983年7月13日上海.,1) 为人诚恳, 随和, 自信乐观的男孩刘翔, 出生在1983年7月13日上海.,Liuxiang, an honest, easy-going confident and optimistic man, was born on July 13th, 1983 in Shanghai.,2) 他的偶像是Jordon, 爱好是听音乐, 看打游戏及看书.,He has an idol of Jordon and likes listening to music, playing games and reading books.,3) 拥有身高1.89米的他擅长110米栏, 在他的教练孙海平的帮助下他取得了很多傲人的成绩.,With the height of 1.89 meters, he is good at 110 Meters hurdles and under the training of his coach, he has many gained wonderful achievements.,4) He broke the Asian record with the time 1312 in 2002 in Lausanne, Switzerland, and two years later, he won the championship again in 1291 in Athen which ties the world record. 5) He broke the record by 1288 on July 12th, 2006 in Lausanne, Switzerland.,4) 他在年瑞士洛桑以秒破亚洲记录, 两年后他又在年雅典以秒夺冠，平了世界记录, 5) 他年月日他在瑞士洛桑以秒破世界记录,四 构篇章,扩句成文.,LiuXiang, an honest, easy-going confident and optimistic man, was born on July 13th, 1983 in Shanghai. He has an idol of Jordon and likes listening to music, playing games and reading books. With the height of 1.89 meters, he is good at 110 meters hurdles and under the training of his coach, he has gained many wonderful achievements. He broke the Asian record with the time 1312 in 2002 in Lausanne, Switzerland, and two years later, he won the championship again in 1291 in Athen which ties the world record. He broke the record by 1288 on July 12th, 2006 in Lausanne, Switzerland. He has many gained wonderful achievements.,五 检查润色,时态是否正确 人称是否一致 是否用5个句子 是否漏掉必要信息 是否语句连贯,五 检查润色,LiuXiang, an honest, easy-going confident and optimistic man, was born on July 13th, 1983 in Shanghai. He has an idol of Jordon and likes listening to music, playing games and reading books. With the height of 1.89 meters, he is good at 110 meters hurdles and under the training of his coach, he has gained many wonderful achievements. He broke the Asian record with the time 1312 in 2002 in Lausanne, Switzerland, and two years later, he won the championship again in 1291 in Athen which ties the world record. He broke the record by 1288 on July 12th, 2006 in Lausanne, Switzerland. He has many gained wonderful achievements.,六 书写,Liuxiang, an honest, easy-going confident and optimistic man, was born on July 13th, 1983 in Shanghai. He has an idol of Jordon and likes listening to music, playing games and reading books. With the height of 1.89 meters, he is good at 110 meters hurdles and under the training of his coach, he has gained many wonderful achievements. For example, he broke the Asian record with the time 1312 in 2002 in Lausanne, Switzerland, and two years later, he won the championship again in 1291 in Athen which ties the world record. Most excitingly, he broke the record by 1288 on July 12th, 2006 in Lausanne, Switzerland. he has many gained wonderful achievements.,1.A. 概况 : 译：钟南山年出生在广州，他是中国最伟大的医生之一 1)Born in Guangzhou in 1941, Zhong Nanshan is one of the greatest doctors in China. 2)Zhong Nanshan, one of the greatest doctors in China, was born in Guangzhou in 1941. B.外貌,性格: 译：我的历史老师是个漂亮女人，她长着两只大眼睛，留着长发,* 语法，句法高分tips,尽量用分词短语、同位语结构，使文章简洁，通顺,My history teacher is a beautiful lady with two big eyes and long hair.,巧用with做定语,C. 教育经历： 1）Majored in Science, he graduated from a famous University in the north and after 4 years, he went abroad for further studies. 2）Graduated from the department of English of Zhongshan University, she went on further education and received a doctors degree. D生平： 1）Not only is he interested in science, but also he has a gift for music. 2）He set a new world record of swimming, which won a gold medal for China Team.,注意尽量用非谓语动词, 使文章精炼,尽量用复合句倒装,非限定定语从句等，润色文章,E评估： 1）Leifeng set us a good example ,so all the people spoke highly of him and all respected him . 2）He is one of the greatest novelists in China and will be always remembered as an outstanding man. 3）Lishizhen makes great contributions to Medical literature.,注意运用一些动词、形容词等短语、词组,1.例文：假如你叫李明，你的美国朋友布鲁斯开始学习中国文学，来信询问鲁迅其人及作品。你回信介绍鲁迅，内容如下 （1）鲁迅，原名周树人，浙江绍兴人 （2）为了国家，弃医从文。 （3）著名的作家，思想家，而且还是中国现代文学的开创者。 （4）小说被译成多种文字，并被制成电影，如阿Q正传、祝福这两部影片。 （5）一些作品还被选入了中学和大学课本。 参考词汇：阿Q正传：The True Story of AH Q 祝福：The New Years Sacrifice 注意： 1）介绍必须包括所有内容要点，但不要逐条译成英语。 写作要求 只能使用5个句子表达全部内容。文章首尾已给出，不算字数。 评分标准句子结构的准确性，信息内容的完整性。,实战演练,Dear Bruce, I was glad to know you began to study Chinese literature. Now let me tell you something about Luxun ._. Since you are learning Chinese literatures, I think reading Lu Xuns novels will help you to know more about it. Yours, Li Ming,概,貌,育,平,估,审题 列要点 依要点, 拟草纲, 组织成句. 构篇章,扩句成文. 检查润色 书写,基础写作解题步骤：,一、审题:(四确定),确定类型 2. 确定体裁 3. 确定主体时态 4. 确定主体人称,第三人称,人物介绍,记叙文,一般过去时,2. 外貌性格/ 爱好appearance ,character, hobby,3. 教育/ 专长/ 事业：education, speciality,（2）为了国家，弃医从文。,4. 生平big events in his or her life ( in order of time ),（4）小说被译成多种文字，并被制成电影，如阿Q正传、祝福这两部影片。 （5）一些作品还被选入了中学和大学课本。,5. 评估evaluation,（3）著名的作家，思想家，而且还是中国现代文学的开创者。,（1）鲁迅，原名周树人，浙江绍兴人,1. 概况age, sex, birth-place, background,二 列要点,阿Q正传：The True Story of AH Q 祝福：The New Years Sacrifice,三 依要点, 拟草纲, 组织成句.,Find out the good sentences in the possible version and remember them,Dear Bruce, I was glad to know you began to study Chinese literature. Now let me tell you something about Luxun. Born in Shaoxing, Zhejiang Province, Lu Xun with real name Zhou Shuren abandoned the study of medicine because he thought he could change society more through writing. His novels have been translated into many languages and some of novels have been made into films, such as The True Story of AH Q and The New Years Sacrifice. Some of his novels have been collected in high school and college textbooks. Not only was Lu Xun a well-Known Chinese writer, a thinker, and translator, but also the father of modern Chinese literature. Since you are learning Chinese literatures, I think reading Lu Xuns novels will benefit a lot. Yours,goodbye,